ForsakenMage Posted November 24, 2004 Share Posted November 24, 2004 What is it that makes the human hand so gentle, so innocent, yet hold such great power and evil to try to destroy the other hands? What is it that allows the human hand to carry two worlds, one that is good and one that is bad? They are open. They may curl slightly if you let it hang, but they are open. They are open to everything... Open Hands The cold deadening feeling that clutched my heart When I saw the flash and somehow the bullet Just flying, hovering in front of him. And then nothing. No blood, no scream, no groan. Just nothing. But then he began to fall, over and over again. Could I catch him, hold him close, And hope he was still breathing, still living? God I would if I could. But I couldn't. He fell flat on his face onto the muddy street, Hands palm up to the sky as though asking, Pleading even, for someone to let him cradle life once more. Me, me with the merciless look on my face, Me with the blood on my fingers and clothes. It's raining now, raining my victim's blood. Me, the victim once upon a time. Me, now cradling the gun still smoking in my hands. Me, the one with the palms faced upwards now. Me with the open hands. Note: This is also posted on my DeviantArt site if you wish to comment there instead. :) Link's in the profile. Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ice_ring Posted November 24, 2004 Share Posted November 24, 2004 is that like telling kids not to play with guns...or did you just kill someone? nice anyway :) --not to nag, but have you posted that story on geocities? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForsakenMage Posted November 24, 2004 Author Share Posted November 24, 2004 is that like telling kids not to play with guns...or did you just kill someone? nice anyway :) --not to nag, but have you posted that story on geocities?Ah no lol. I can post it up later tomorrow after I get home from class though. :) Thanksgiving holidays hehe! It'll give me more time to format it and stuff. I have never killed anyone, let alone held a gun in my hand. :P Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ice_ring Posted November 24, 2004 Share Posted November 24, 2004 i think i may understand it now, the narrator kills his friend for some reason, and then kills himself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Neanderslave Posted November 24, 2004 Share Posted November 24, 2004 nice poem it makes you think about life and how precious it is its quite moving Neanderslave Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForsakenMage Posted November 24, 2004 Author Share Posted November 24, 2004 i think i may understand it now, the narrator kills his friend for some reason, and then kills himself.Uh no lol! Read the description above and connect from there. :wink: Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ste_mc_efc Posted November 24, 2004 Share Posted November 24, 2004 i really dont get it at all plz explain in simple terms its good but i dont no y its good? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForsakenMage Posted November 25, 2004 Author Share Posted November 25, 2004 Humans have hands that give them the ability to create good, yet bad as well. :wink: Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ste_mc_efc Posted November 25, 2004 Share Posted November 25, 2004 so no hidden meaning then? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForsakenMage Posted November 25, 2004 Author Share Posted November 25, 2004 so no hidden meaning then?I have never killed anyone, nor has anyone fired at me before. I didn't intend for it to have a hidden meaning. :P Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rease Posted November 25, 2004 Share Posted November 25, 2004 Very nice.. I had goosebumps. I've written a few stories about killings.. I find them interesting to write about.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blipo Posted March 4, 2005 Share Posted March 4, 2005 wicked i love it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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