Drealfreak Posted February 8, 2005 Share Posted February 8, 2005 I wrote these 2 poems for english class :P They are not so very good but enjoy :) ------------------------------------ A Friend Is Like Your Hand A friend is like your hand A part of you, warm and helpful Walking with you all the time A friend is like the sky Big enough for you to explore for a lifetime A friend is like the blackboard in your school Always giving you knowledge and advice A friend is like a window And though it you see a beautiful green meadow Where the sun shines, trees flourish, Birds sing and the sea rests A friend is like a good book No book is perfect There are mistakes, folded edges and ugly covers But the words written are wonderful A friend is like life Sometimes you hate it Sometimes you are angry Because everything about it Isn't how you thought it was going to be But then you realize that you are lucky to have life A friend is like a smilie face Giving you that big wide grin And you can't help but smile too A friend is like your hand Something precious that you don't want to lose ---------------------------------------- Hope You find it in the children's eyes You feel it in the summer sky You see it where a race kicks start You find it in a beating heart It's bright as if it was light's twin It's powerful beneath your skin It has the shape of happiness The universe is its address All worries fall to it like prey Gets eaten up and laid to waste If dark's King, light's the Joker card To find it shouldn't be so hard Hid in the darkness of all nights There is always a thread of light It's always there, it's always been Just don't forget to take it in Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rhys Posted February 8, 2005 Share Posted February 8, 2005 Nice poems, I preferred the first one, the way you compared your friends to a hand was quite peculiar but it turned out a nice comparison. "A friend is like a window And though it you see a beautiful green meadow Where the sun shines, trees flourish, Birds sing and the sea rests A friend is like a good book No book is perfect There are mistakes, folded edges and ugly covers But the words written are wonderful " I particularly liked those verses, the window one is very well done, it's hard to think of your friend being like a window but the way you wrote it; it seems almost natural. The second verse is also very good because it's true. Well done. 8/10. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForsakenMage Posted February 8, 2005 Share Posted February 8, 2005 Drealy! Great poems! :D Adventurer's Log || YouTube || Facebook || Tip.it Times Work || Wanna Join the Editorial Panel?Maxed Out 01 October 2012 PDT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
barfbag Posted February 9, 2005 Share Posted February 9, 2005 Can I use that for my class? I need better grades! :mrgreen: To stand in the valley of death is one thing, to not have been able to stop the chaos is another. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drealfreak Posted February 9, 2005 Author Share Posted February 9, 2005 Can I use that for my class? I need better grades! :mrgreen: no way dude thanks people! and magey :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Merry Posted February 14, 2005 Share Posted February 14, 2005 Hope You find it in the children's eyes You feel it in the summer sky You see it where a race kicks start You find it in a beating heart It's bright as if it was light's twin It's powerful beneath your skin It has the shape of happiness The universe is its address All worries fall to it like prey Gets eaten up and laid to waste If dark's King, light's the Joker card To find it shouldn't be so hard Hid in the darkness of all nights There is always a thread of light It's always there, it's always been Just don't forget to take it in I really Liked this Poem especially. it flows when spoken by the tounge in melodious tones that I could not help but appreciate it. And Hope is a wonderful Subject. Often Used in poetry but not often portrayed significantly. I enjoyed both poems and I look forward to future creative writings by you. :D My PoetryA short story: THE INTRUDERA Short Story:Jerrel the Jester Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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