I've been working on-and-off on this piece for a while, and I finally finished it today...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm still trying to find out what I can do with just a pen and a pencil. Constructive criticism is welcome as always. :)

I've been working on-and-off on this piece for a while, and I finally finished it today...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm still trying to find out what I can do with just a pen and a pencil. Constructive criticism is welcome as always. :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I like it a lot, I really do. :)

Pretty good stuff. The proportions of the far right guy with the axe are a bit off. The arm is too long and the pose of the bent leg is not very natural.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also, as far as composition goes, I know in the back you were not wanting a lot of detail, but the outline of the guys doesn't work. Anything in the back tends to look better in DARKER shades. Darker shades fade into the distance while lighter shades jump out. So while they are shown to be in the back by overlapping, it would be more effective if you made them darker.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The outlines on the figures are too pronounced.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Overall though I think you are on the right track. You portrayed a scene that appears to be a unified army on the left against a rag-tag group with mixed armor on the right. The ones on the right seem to be getting the worst of it for now.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also, I doubt the lines of troops would still be that organized in the bg once the war started.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Finally, the title has to change. On the front, or war front or something would be fine. But ...frontal sounds like something ...er..bad.

that picture is fliggidy fly!

hey thats not bad, i tell you what, thats WAY better then i can do, hell my stick figers suck. lol

that picture is fliggidy fly!

 

 

 

:lol: Well said. Good job.

Thanks for the advice, tttia.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm not going to change the title, though. :P

dude truly amazeing ure gonna be the next famous aritsit guy thingy

Pen + pencil and no computer editing?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The neatness of the lines on the armour is amazing.... Hardly a feathered edge in sight....

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I demand to know how you've managed to pen in the curves so smoothly!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

:wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Generalised things:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sketching background figures is ok but if you're not going to do them in detail make them less clear, have them covered with a haze or blur.... don't go for the very clear hexagon on a partial hexagon low detail style in the far right.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You seem to have given up on the shadows, sketching in what looks like a floor-meets-wall shadow behind the armoured guys and the barbarians.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Specific things:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The figure under the central figures right foot seems to get a bit confused around his waist where it meets the standing figures cape as if its cut through him....

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Middlemost barbarians left foot and shoulders - the shield covering his body and the strange angles the shoulders are presented at make him look very odd

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Seem to have lost the ruler when you were drawing the leftmost barbarians short sword/knife/dagger :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The armoured fighters have flat feet with the toes ending very sharply.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Practicalities :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The lefthand guys are encased in very expensive looking metal armour but the middle one's holding a wooden shield.... and not in the same armour style as the rest.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Capes don't happen in battle.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Fighting men would avoid things that could get snagged or be used against them by the enemy. A cape could be dragged at to pull you off balance.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The fang-like bottom of the helmets would seriously hinder a soldiers ability to turn his head round, they would get caught on the shoulders.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Great work :)