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its my own shading style.. so dont make fun fo me.. P00 on you :P

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Location: On The Dark Side Of The Moon

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

fits the occasion and subject matter :P

wings look pretty good, as long as they are colored right they should be fine but you have to be careful on making the holes look decent, particularly the ones with little flaps left. Not sure about the arms but the left (our right) arm looks a bit misshapen, could be because of pose but it still seems unnatural. The left leg also looks slightly out of place, twisted so that it starts further from the center of the body then it should, in comparison to where the front of the demon is based on the chest/belly.

wings look pretty good, as long as they are colored right they should be fine but you have to be careful on making the holes look decent, particularly the ones with little flaps left. Not sure about the arms but the left (our right) arm looks a bit misshapen, could be because of pose but it still seems unnatural. The left leg also looks slightly out of place, twisted so that it starts further from the center of the body then it should, in comparison to where the front of the demon is based on the chest/belly.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

good spot on the arm, i'll fix that, as for the leg.. = pose :P could use a little adjustment thogh :)

i dont know what you have in mind, ill need to see it later in the workings to give proper C/C but the muscles on the torso look completely messed up, dont know whether theyre just basic structure for you to re do or not though

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

oh, and his (our left) arm.... you turned his shoulder into a muscle... it isnt connected to him :shock: EEK!

oh, and his (our left) arm.... you turned his shoulder into a muscle... it isnt connected to him :shock: EEK!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

thats his shoulder...

 

 

 

you'll see what i mean when i start shading it :P

well.. hope you dont mind, but i edited the actual linework (in red) it was easier than just explaining...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

theyre just small modifications i personally reckon would make it look 'better' but of course thats me.. also the chest area kinda looks like it has gills.. i kno the red lines dont seem much different to the black. but for example with the right leg it looked slightly too high :? but once again, that could just be my eyesight going :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

anyway- i adore the wings :D and im looking forward to seeing further stages of this and the final :) gl with it :wink:

his back looks wrong :( anyways hands and feet suck 8)

 

oh, and his (our left) arm.... you turned his shoulder into a muscle... it isnt connected to him :shock: EEK!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

thats his shoulder...

 

 

 

you'll see what i mean when i start shading it :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

like i said cant really tell yet

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

...your gonna have him have obliques right? its really irky when supposedly real muscular people have all these super formed muscles and other muscles dont even show up!

can i try making a head on him for you so you can get an idea or something :)

can i try making a head on him for you so you can get an idea or something :)

 

 

 

go ahead...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and thanks all for the crits/tips they'll help alot :)

bumpo

Looking great so far :)

dam, that's going to be pretty nice man. Keep it up!

still need to fix the left (our right) arm, compared to the other arm it is much to short when in reality it is closer to us so should be larger. Also the muscle for the right bicep looks wierd (looks like he has two, one of which doesnt belong)

wing update, darker shading.. update also

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

crits please :P

still need to fix the left (our right) arm, compared to the other arm it is much to short when in reality it is closer to us so should be larger. Also the muscle for the right bicep looks wierd (looks like he has two, one of which doesnt belong)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

his shoulders are bulky..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and the reason their is a size difference is beacuse of perspective.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

they are not straight accross the arms and shoulders are bent forward, and ect.

1409 colors. You realize how insane that is? Thats not real pixel art, is it?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Anyways, heres the problem. His legs are in the completely wrong place. You see, his six pack, is not above his crotch, but rather his thigh, which throughs off the balance of the picture. Also, does this guy have a manhood? :lol: His neck is also in the wrong place- every body had a central line of motion. If your standing stiff, the line is straight, but if your arch backwards like this guy, the line is curved. Anyways, heres what I'm talking about:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Your line of motion:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The proper line of motion:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

alot of your muscles ar ein the wrong place.... mainly the arms

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and you didnt draw obliques!!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and for how musclar he is supposed to be he has puny shoulder/neck muscles

muslce is nice gj

 

 

 

alot of your muscles ar ein the wrong place.... mainly the arms

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and you didnt draw obliques!!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and for how musclar he is supposed to be he has puny shoulder/neck muscles

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

He has no skin :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Gs: demons is really angry.. his head is jolted back and hes gunna be screaming.. :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

as for colors.. :P lol.. how the hell did u get that number there shouldnt be any more than 4-500 not nearly 1500ish ah well.. its my own style :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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its random dithering.. i dunno maby

I dont care about his head, his body can even twist into a position like that, because the neck is in the entirly wrong place, as is his crotch. You cant move your body parts into incorrect places.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also, I did color count on graphics gale.

wings beyond the right(left) arm need lots of work, unless the bone is sticking out at the bottom of the wings the wing's skin/hide should be sharper like there is an object impeding its deformation, which there is.

Thinking about scrapping this, and starting a new project with less anatomy.. maby something more comical/cartoony

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

if anyone want to take possesion of this PM me...

 

 

 

you can use it for whatever, finish the hands and feet, and face..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

as long as you give me cred, for the body :P