Well this is my first submission to deviant art and pretty much my first wallpaper I ever submitted anywhere. :) I think it turned out pretty well, but tell me what you think. rate it 1/10. Feel free to comment here or on deviant art.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

http://www.deviantart.com/view/9709154/

First of all gotta state i'm not that great fun of abstract, however i can rate it according to my personal taste plus comparison to other abstracs of that kind i saw around.

 

 

 

The render is a bit 2 dark and way 2 "brycy" with those aliasing probs i myself hate in my bryce works on metal reflections...The main problem is the linework...it's way 2 heavy. Overall it gives a sort of plastic wrap over it that lowers the brillancy a lot and totaly counters the high-tech effect you were trying to give with the foreground big brushsets and the text. With such a faded out bg those foreground stuff catches most of the viewer attention but being a bit pointless (i mean there's no real message coming from them, if u get what i mean) the overall result, at least IMO isn't that great. I'd also add that wallpaper doesn't work the top with Windows xp due to the start bar that wipes out some text.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

6.5/10

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

but fixing something it could realy turn into something very nice...at least according to my taste

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Keep it up !!!

First of all gotta state i'm not that great fun of abstract, however i can rate it according to my personal taste plus comparison to other abstracs of that kind i saw around.

 

 

 

The render is a bit 2 dark and way 2 "brycy" with those aliasing probs i myself hate in my bryce works on metal reflections...The main problem is the linework...it's way 2 heavy. Overall it gives a sort of plastic wrap over it that lowers the brillancy a lot and totaly counters the high-tech effect you were trying to give with the foreground big brushsets and the text. With such a faded out bg those foreground stuff catches most of the viewer attention but being a bit pointless (i mean there's no real message coming from them, if u get what i mean) the overall result, at least IMO isn't that great. I'd also add that wallpaper doesn't work the top with Windows xp due to the start bar that wipes out some text.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

6.5/10

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

but fixing something it could realy turn into something very nice...at least according to my taste

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Keep it up !!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Thanks for the comments and I understand what you mean about the linework, altho it looks better with it then without it. I know the text gets covered up, but I didnt expect anyone to be using it really. Hopefully I can fix my mistakes on my next peice.

7/10, not too bad, if you want my advice, no more weirdo names like ENDOMORPHIC :wink:

7/10, not too bad, if you want my advice, no more weirdo names like ENDOMORPHIC :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lol, What kind of names am I supposed to use then? :lol:

 

7/10, not too bad, if you want my advice, no more weirdo names like ENDOMORPHIC :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lol, What kind of names am I supposed to use then? :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lol the name was nice in my opinion...However back on your previous reply i wouldn't call them errors...i mean...i'm almost sure u had this render that looked great in the preview but then...well...once finished it turned out into something not pleasing at all. (as often appens in bryce when u keep saying...well but the uberslow antialiasing will fix this and that...yes...must be for sure...meeeeeh!!!) that you were almost forced to cover that way. p00p happens :D I personaly think bryce works great if u make a render 4 times bigger than desired dimension lol (for example on sigs) if u use the metal, spheric surfaced reflections.

hm, lets see, save it with better quality next time.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

the bg is as said by jeppoz, too dark, and id like to add that there isn't a real focal point. the 2d is a bit random and doesn't fit in, because usually the 2d revolves around the focal point, whereas you don't really have one.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and with the 2d your going for, its one of those ' fill up the whole bg with it, or don't do it at all ' ones, because it just doesn't look good elsewise, the font doesn't really fit in either i reckon.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I know there are good points in your work - just that im prone to be very negative.

 

7/10, not too bad, if you want my advice, no more weirdo names like ENDOMORPHIC :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lol, What kind of names am I supposed to use then? :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

just normal names damnit, personally im sick and tired of the names some people give wallpapers and images like "ubersubtraction of the 7th dimension hyperportal" or whatever, THAT IS STUPID BULL

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

MAKE UP SOMETHING ORIGINAL

 

 

7/10, not too bad, if you want my advice, no more weirdo names like ENDOMORPHIC :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Lol, What kind of names am I supposed to use then? :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

just normal names damnit, personally im sick and tired of the names some people give wallpapers and images like "ubersubtraction of the 7th dimension hyperportal" or whatever, THAT IS STUPID BULL

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

MAKE UP SOMETHING ORIGINAL

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Original... normal names would be common words, so thats original? Since abstract represents something to the creator they name it by what the peice means to them. I named it this on purpose, maybe if you would think about it their is a link to the meaning of the word ENDOMORPHIC and the wallpaper. This name is original.... Give me an example of a name thats normal and original. :roll:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Please explain to me how the name isnt original. I have never seen it used before...

Original... normal names would be common words, so thats original? Since abstract represents something to the creator they name it by what the peice means to them. I named it this on purpose, maybe if you would think about it their is a link to the meaning of the word ENDOMORPHIC and the wallpaper. This name is original.... Give me an example of a name thats normal and original. :roll:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Please explain to me how the name isnt original. I have never seen it used before...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Nice burn there :P

i posted at deviant art...... but i post here also. The bg is alrigh, but nothing to special. And i think you should make the line art less visible

i posted at deviant art...... but i post here also. The bg is alrigh, but nothing to special. And i think you should make the line art less visible

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

K, I will make a few changes soon.

ENDOMORPHIC is no real word, you made it up just for the sake of coolness, just like all those other thousands of deviant art noobs

Main Entry: enÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷doÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷morÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷phic

 

 

 

Pronunciation: "en-d&-'mor-fik

 

 

 

Function: adjective

 

 

 

1 : of or relating to the component in W. H. Sheldon's classification of body types that measures the degree to which the digestive viscera are massive and the body build rounded and soft

 

 

 

2 : having a heavy rounded body build often with a marked tendency to become fat ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ã

 

Main Entry: enÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷doÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷morÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷phic

 

 

 

Pronunciation: "en-d&-'mor-fik

 

 

 

Function: adjective

 

 

 

1 : of or relating to the component in W. H. Sheldon's classification of body types that measures the degree to which the digestive viscera are massive and the body build rounded and soft

 

 

 

2 : having a heavy rounded body build often with a marked tendency to become fat ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ã

 

Main Entry: enÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷doÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷morÃÆââ¬Å¡Ãâ÷phic

 

 

 

Pronunciation: "en-d&-'mor-fik

 

 

 

Function: adjective

 

 

 

1 : of or relating to the component in W. H. Sheldon's classification of body types that measures the degree to which the digestive viscera are massive and the body build rounded and soft

 

 

 

2 : having a heavy rounded body build often with a marked tendency to become fat ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ã

Well, to start off its very plain. No focal point, no flow, no real eye-catcher. The quality also seems to be very poor. Very pixel-ish.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The linework is way to big, also to defining. Needs to be lowered (opacity)a whole lot and also made smaller.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The bryce peice itself is very dark, if it were brighter that would make it better. Also, its very unoriginal. Not that thats a bad thing :wink:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

6/10.

Well, thanks for all the comments. I guess I just have a different taste then most of you. Hopefully my next wallpaper you guys will like more. :D

the bg is horrible and yea there's way too much of that technical line art crap. wallpapers are supposed to unbalanced if u know what i mean(probably not) anyway your's has shiht all over the place. 5/10