It was a busy day in varrock square, players were trading furs and weapons, tramps were begging for money, And king Roald was sitting on his throne doing nothing of particular interest as usual. Two hours later the bell in the guards tower went off signaling the most bloody gang war in Varrock's long history. Jamart was buying a new set of dragonhide armor sd he heard this alarm and ruched to the pheonix hideout. Yep you guessed it Jamart was a member of the Pheonix gang.. As he stepped into the hideout he heard screaming.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Got to go for tonight

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

BIOS

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Name

 

 

 

Race

 

 

 

Place of Origon

 

 

 

Gender

 

 

 

Gang: Either black arm pheonix guards or bystander

 

 

 

Weapon(s)

 

 

 

Armor: If any: if any

 

 

 

Sheild: If any

 

 

 

Class: warrior,mage etc

 

 

 

Special abilities

 

 

 

Personality

 

 

 

Bosgraphy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I know its a lot but comon guys

really short... cant coment much on the topic. Try typing your story in microsoft word or something, then when you get a substancial amount paste it here. 4 sentences is really really short, this is the story forum... expand on your opening paragraph and submit your entry when you get a chapter or so.

sorry gotta leave now but i promise it will get better... and longer

I suggest being more descriptive in some parts, but overall 7/10. Good start.

I like the start and you've already generally got the story line accross, big battle between Phoenix gang and Black Arm gang right? \

wow still on page 1 well ok here it goes

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

As he walked into the hideout Jamart noticed something was wrong, instead of laughing and boasting he heard yelling and screaming. He quickly took out his preciuos Magic Shortbow and put some rune arrows in his quiver. He rounded the corner to see several Black Arm gang members attacked his fellow commrades. Jamart quicly pulled out an arrow and fired it at one of the gang members; it hit right on target. As fell onto a table dead another came at him with a mace. The grunt swung iit at Jamart but he ducked, then Jamart pulled out his dragon scimitar and with one swift motion gutted the grunt. After more butt kicking the Black Arm grunts finally retreated. But two were left to be prisoners. What was the intention of this attack?!, Marcus, a gang warlord asked. "I wont tell you anything Pheonix scum.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

To be continued :ohnoes:

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bios p10z