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It does seem slightly confused. The overal effect was quite good though - However it did make me feel that the smile was not a good thing, or something to take particular joy in, but rather an extant object, intrinsic in human life, but in some way sinister. perhaps it was the webs and random imagery that did that. Anyway, read and comment on the poem in my sig - the one that just says "poetry"

Hehe. Liked that one. Reminds me on fairies and children.

I love it! The only thing I'll say is to stick with the topic you're writing on. I couldn't understand some of the parts.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

=D> Nice job!!! =D>