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its really good issy. I love the sentence structure and metaphors particularly the one about the hopscotch square. could need editing in some places but other than that great. best thing: variety and rhyming.

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its really good issy. I love the sentence structure and metaphors particularly the one about the hopscotch square. could need editing in some places but other than that great. best thing: variety and rhyming.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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off/topic - do you like the sig? :)

I like it. it flows well and rymes, it seems to have a metephorical meaning which I picked up on so, if thats intended well done :thumbsup: and I mean this Issy, your definatly improving! :thumbsup: you might not know me, but you post on my threads and Ive seen you wanting sigs in the gallery and talking in off topic so. I know you :wink:

I think you are a great writer! I checked this place out and your work is great, and i've seen the order you posted them and your definatly improving!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and andufus you never told me you write!

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Its even better than the first version issy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

 

 

promise me you'll never give up poetry i think it would be a great loss to everyone with good taste, seriously.

 

 

 

My mum says to tell you its "fabulous darling". =D>

That's a good poem. Nice structure, flows well and the end is good. Maybee it's a bit to much to ask, but do you think you could post the subject matter? I was never the best at interpreting metaphors and other poetic techniques. Well done anyway. =D>

Very nice, I'm relatively new to the Varrock library, but this is very fine poetry. =D>