shadowarcher

well, on the internet, if someone doesn't like me I pretend to be someone else and get them to like the other me just to find out. then when guilt gets the better of me, I reveal who I am, sorry Issy. (she didn't like my writing and i wanted to know why so made this account)

the rules say - do not post your first sig

can't you put it all in one place sour tacos?

cool, sorry if it sounded a bit harsh!

well, It flows ok and there are some good discriptions in it. I know i'm not very good at writing and can't talk but I don't care and am going to tell you anyway. I don't really like the name Rosa it doesn't sound special or anything Rose might be a bit bettter. You haven't fully used Imagery for your advantege throw in a few similies and metaphors so change "Her eyes where a dull grey" to something like "her eyes where like old iron in colour, dull as if the metal had long lost it's shine" and describe everything a bit more. like "her hair a mousy brown" Whats that? is it short, long, curly, strait or what? have something like "he examined her long, curly mousy brown hair, which she had tried and failed to straiten" or something I'm a bit harsh so sorry, but I'd give it a 14

well, Issy seems to have it covered but... You need to write more than 5 lines to post it in the varrock library. I know there is no official rule or anything and I'm brand new, but it doesn't seem right. If you spend an hour on a peice of writing you will get a lot more helpful critisism and less "Do this!" because it will flow more, yur grammer will be better, and in total it will be greatly improved

I think you are a great writer! I checked this place out and your work is great, and i've seen the order you posted them and your definatly improving! and andufus you never told me you write!

well, Diddy kong racing like andufus said was amazing....... so its got to be the right one

well, Good luck andufus hope you do well! my lvl 70 got hacked so take the secuirity options

Hi, I'm brand new to Tip. It and have a level 3 skiller called robed_archer she may not be much yet but she will be when I'm done. I know my stuff as I had a level 70 that got hacked :( but time rolled on and I decided I wanted a skiller, hope I make some friends here :)