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Leaf on Your Tree (new verse added)


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its really good issy. I love the sentence structure and metaphors particularly the one about the hopscotch square. could need editing in some places but other than that great. best thing: variety and rhyming.

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its really good issy. I love the sentence structure and metaphors particularly the one about the hopscotch square. could need editing in some places but other than that great. best thing: variety and rhyming.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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off/topic - do you like the sig? :)

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I like it. it flows well and rymes, it seems to have a metephorical meaning which I picked up on so, if thats intended well done :thumbsup: and I mean this Issy, your definatly improving! :thumbsup: you might not know me, but you post on my threads and Ive seen you wanting sigs in the gallery and talking in off topic so. I know you :wink:

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I think you are a great writer! I checked this place out and your work is great, and i've seen the order you posted them and your definatly improving!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

and andufus you never told me you write!

Hi, I'm new to Tip. It but far from a noob. I know my runescape stuff!

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:D :D :D :D :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

 

 

 

Its even better than the first version issy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

 

 

promise me you'll never give up poetry i think it would be a great loss to everyone with good taste, seriously.

 

 

 

My mum says to tell you its "fabulous darling". =D>

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That's a good poem. Nice structure, flows well and the end is good. Maybee it's a bit to much to ask, but do you think you could post the subject matter? I was never the best at interpreting metaphors and other poetic techniques. Well done anyway. =D>

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