Xewleer

okay. Will power is teh only proper magixes!

what do they use for power? Will? (like Hylean or Gandalf) Runes (which are the power themselves?)? (like runescape) or words? (which involves powers outside themselves... anyway, it would be impossible for words to have power without a god backing them... and God doesn't need words if you catch me drift) (Like Harry Potter) Edit: good, but it is exceedingly, EXCEedINGLY! chaotic in the beginning, it needs a major revision. Excellent plot though, needs more explanation.

well, you see, its crescendo, which means loud, chaotic noise, (also a music term... using a really old dictionary), its loud, chaotic scream, that continues its loudness. Heightening in decimals!

yes, because the magic is not innate power (Harry potter had ability, but had to learn spells to call out power, using words of power.) As opposed to Runescape magic (this includes my story), the characters all have innate abilities, but must use runes to get the desired affect, in fact, the magic power is not OUR magic, but rather the runes magics. For example, Hylean has tendrils of magical power that come out of his when he goes berserk, this is innate power. Gandalf had innate power that he could use, he was only a wizard in name only, he was more towards an angel in human form. And the Balrog was a demon twisted by Morgoth, both, Innate power. Oh, wait! First post! on these forums!

naw, she's really his daughter. Same blood, you see, that's why he reacted so strongly! Oops, did I spoil something? "Akka! I am your father!" "NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" *jumps into handy abyss!* Sorry... too sarcastic.

well, thats the single biggest inspiration of my writing. The music lets me get the feeling and the character's fighting style. For example, Beserk Hylean was indirectly inspired by Dr. Octopus theme. Alexia, was inspired and toughened up from her original form from Gil Colin Graham's Alexia, the protagonist's wife, Alexia. who was inspired by a particularly beautiful piece of Classical music I heard once. Gil Colin Graham rewrite will be my next project. This particular arc in the story was inspired by Stand My Ground by wtihin Temptaion and Cona was inspired, by 1. Zacon from the RPG, and 2. the Green Goblin theme.

w00t! sarcasm! Awesome! excellent chapters.... May I speculate? Please! Please!

Aiming for ten million fans? Quite a challenge! I know, I'll use my advanced engineering knowledge to create cloning vats, with ten million Ben Wheelers running about, I would be unstoppable, 10 mil comments on how great your story is instantly! ha ha ha ha! Hoo! better slow down... You might be able to do it on Gaia, but, quite frankly, I went there, and its just too large... people are disrespectful, worse than the worst that ever frequents here, and they don't appreciate true story telling art... Well, from what happened to me, anyway... Hey! you joined the same day as my birthday! Anyway... nothing else to say except: More, more! ha ha ha! "This has been brought to you by the insane young evil genius club of America, please take time to fill out the form sent to you at your earliest inconvenience." Hah! Goodnight...

what the!?! Now your sig has a bunny!

Note, for this chapters, several parts were inspired by musical themes: Green Goblin theme: Spiderman 1, Dr. Octopus theme: Spiderman 2, The theme in Castle in the sky when the robot thing rescues Sheeta, and the theme for the BARC troopers from the animated Star Wars:Clone Wars, among other famous/well written themes. Stand my Ground from Within Temptation also deserves a mention. Chapter 13: Blood and Guts, Part 1 On top of a tree, a dark figure watched a sleeping camp, he was facing the moon, so they could not see him. He was Cona, Advanced Scouting General of Zamorak, to give him his title. He had finally found his prey, and he could tell where they would go. He wasn't just any general of the chaos god, no, he was a Majharrat! More powerful than the average human, he had a slim build but was the strongest in his castle, the cruel towers of Blood and Guts. A spear was held loosely in his hand, and he sat cross-legged on the tree with a quiet confidence of a master warrior. -Hylean's camp- Hylean woke up in the arms of Alexia. He felt surprisingly refreshed, but the breath of Alexia was not smooth, labored almost, like in the grip of a bad dream that one cannot awaken. He didn't want to disturb her though. Rakkan walked over, he had sensed that Hylean had awoken. He smiled, signaling Hylean with his hands, he began a conversation in military sign language. "[it seems you are well now, its been a tough three days.]" Hylean's forearms were free so he signed back. "[What happened?]" "[if only you knew. The only reason were still with you is because you are the strongest.]" "[What happened?!]" "[We've been hunted for at least two days. We've been carrying you for that long at least. It's been really tough on your two girlfriends.]" "[Well, as soon as its morning we'll move out. Get all the rest you can. You'll need it.]" "[What? You see the future now?]" "[i will eventually.]" -Morning- Hylean woke with Alexia, surprising her by jumping up and pulling her up with him. It was odd, even though he had decimated and slaughtered over a hundred soldiers, he felt happy. She merely slumped against him, mumbling something about carrying her for a change. He roused the rest of the camp, and they moved out, with Alexia on Hylean's back. It was a wonderful feeling day, the sun was out, the clouds were no where to be seen, but the birds did not sing... "Ambush!" Soldiers jumped out of hiding places in trees and bushes, surrounding them. Alexia and Ranguvar, both now being carried by Hylean, roused themselves and became battle ready like the rest of the party. Suddenly, a dark figure burst out of the trees, Hylean felt a sharp, precise blow at his neck and collapsed, paralyzed. The figure jumped about, dodging attacks and magical blasts that came from every which way. They were all defeated. "Take the girls! Leave the rest! They won't find us! Move out!" The soldiers obediently and expeditiously took the hostages and ran. "Oh! If only you knew! How much trouble you caused! I won't kill you! But you'll wish I had!" He walked away. He trusted his minions to not stab him in the back, but to keep two young, pretty female hostages unspoiled, was another story. The towers of Blood and Guts were impenetrable, Hylean would give in to Lord Zamorak's will! -nightfall- Hylean woke up with a start, where were Alexia and Ranguvar!?! He nearly paniced for a second, but he quickly calmed down within seconds. His allies woke up soon after he did, one look at their leader meant only one thing, they were going after the girls. Tracking them was easy, Rakkan could see the tracks and damaged foliage so well he didn't even have to focus. Hylean knew it was too obvious for them to think of secrecy. They reached the towers, Blood and Guts! A high tower, with another, but smaller, behind it. They were completely black, not even the sun alleviated the sheer despair that emanated from them. Slaves and soldiers milled about, seemingly just running every which way, but their was some perverse purpose in each and every one of them. The sky had great, dolorous clouds, threatening rain, but never actually doing so. The towers stood out for their sheer blackness against that dark sky. And around the towers were flames and forges, all manners of desolation and industry. Hylean sighed... it would have been easier to just... but it held greater risk. They would have to storm the keep. Hylean would be darned if it wasn't the tallest dungeon of the tallest tower. -Tallest dungeon of the Tallest Tower- In the tallest dungeon, nearly six hundred feet up, sat two very miserable females. Two of the most brutish and ugly guards known guarding them brooked no conversation. They spoke without words, fists often doing the talking, soon, Alexia and Ranguvar had welts and bruises from the fists of the guards. Everything but the barest of clothes had been taken, no chance of escape under their own power, all they could do was huddle together and hope that Hylean could reach them in time for whatever their captor's plan's were.

Thank you!! *dances like a baptist!* A cookie if you know what I mean!

Chapter 12: Savage Jano Ranguvar and Alexia had been roughly grabbed by some handy Zamorakian soldiers, one happened to be Kinnin. Grabbing Ranguvar's hands, he yelled something incoherent that caused the Zamorakians to laugh. The one known as Rakkan grabbed Alexia's arms and whispered something into her ear. "Jaahaajh... you just caused a lot of trouble for Hylean..." Ranguvar was quite surprised, he wasn't speaking in an accent, but his weird laugh was the same. "Jahajahajahaj! You're surprised? Well, you were right, I'm much smarter than I sound. Hylean gave orders, if he is to lose and you cannot escape, I and Rakkan there are to kill you. You would not want to be in savage Jano's clutches. He is not one for subtlety in those matters." Ranguvar started, and she noted the same startled look in Alexia's eyes, thought she hid it better. They arrived at the field, Hylean, soon fully prepared, joined them. He squeezed both their shoulders and entered the battlefield. Hylean was an impressive site, his rune armors glistening in the dim sunlight despite the clouds, he wore no helmet. He unstrapped his halberd and laid it across the shoulders of his armor. A dagger hung loosely in a sheathe at his side. a cape billowed a little in the breeze, as he awaited the savage Jano Jano was not long in coming, rightly guessing the Hylean would bring as many of the soldiers allied to him as he could, he brought everyone he hung around in the camp. His armor was dragon hide, with claws attached to the vembraces. He had snakeskin boots and also had no helmet. They both went into their fighting stances. Hylean crouched, Shoulders and arm tensed to attack at the slightest chance. Jano went down like an animal, and a bass drum was heard, beating a war-like rhythm, raising his blood. And then they rushed at each other, stopping at the last second, and dodged around each other, or, that's what it looked like to the observers, thirty-odd seconds later, they separated, and stood very still. Hylean ran to Jano, using his halberd, he attempted to take him at a distance, failing that, he withdrew it from the strike. Jano ran under the halberd, stopping for a second, and Hylean and Jano started to attack each other so fast that it didn't even look like they were moving. Hylean had his dagger out as well, striking as fast as he could. Jano slashed wildly, trying to destroy Hylean's face. He was blocked several times, then started to assault his chest. At the end, they jumped back, and stood still, eyes daring the other to move. To the two captives, it looked like nothing had happened, then Kinnin whispered in his ear. "Jaaaahh... Your brother has it!" Jano laughed, and started to move his arms, laughing even more, he moved into a combat position. Hylean didn't move. Suddenly, cuts burst on Jano's flesh, causing blood to fly everywhere. Hylean moved a little and shavings of Rune armor started to fly off in all directions. it moved up his arm and his unprotected hand became slashed, blood dripping out of it, hand now useless, he grimly smiled. "I won, Jano, you can't go on, half of them haven't even opened yet." "Nonsense! Ack!" More wounds appeared, this time on his chest and shoulders. "Heh! I know what you are though. So, it doesn't matter if I die now." "Your death would be a vain sacrifice. You have no magic capabilities, I am magically enhanced, perfectly balanced warrior. You have lost, accept that." "No! You plan to sell us out to the Zamorakians. I heard you talking to that stinking Saradominist prosty! That's all she is! Seducing you to give into the weak Saradominist credo!" Alexia was about to shout something when she was stopped by Rakkan, who who had neatly gagged her while her mouth was open. Kinnin had done the same to Ranguvar. "Thats all good! When the girl sleeps with you, gives you pleasure, gives you satisfaction. And you betray us! You'll be the death of us all! ... And you can't be man enough to kill me for all I said just now." Hylean had taken it all in quietly. His face was down, allowing no one to see his face. "If you had betted on that, you would have lost." Hylean looked up, a vampiric smile on his face. His eyes glowed and radiated power, while nearly invisible tendrils protruded from the back of his head. "You can talk about me any way you want, in fact, you have, but no one, NO ONE INSULTS MY LOVED ONES!" Hylean disappeared, then reappeared in front of a paralyzed Jano. "Killing is so much tastier this way!" Jano felt something being forced out of him, then, he felt himself floating away. As he was about to consider himself dead, he was wrenched back into the physical plain. What remained of his soul only registered great pain before it winked out of existence. Hylean looked around, then saw some of Jano's cronies starting to take up arms to fight him "YOU"RE NEXT!" Rakkan and Kinnin grabbed the girls and ran as fast as they could. They had seen him like this, but never, ever this angry. It was very scary, if they had stayed they would not have survived. -one minute later- Hylean sat in the middle of a battlefield, a giant boulder had been displaced on a demon, a head was stuck on the back of a chair its occupant headless. A body here, an arm there. Really, though the ground was torn up and blood was every, the dirt a red mud, there was very little actual corpses. -in the forest- Rakkan and several others huddled around a campfire in the middle of the forest. Ranguvar and Alexia had joined, no longer captives, the comrades of Hylean made it clear that it would be safest just to stay with them. Hylean walked up and sat down. Alexia was first to move, sitting on her haunches, she stared him in the eyes. "May I ask what happened to you? I've never seen you like this." "..." Ranguvar got up too and moved next to him. "Brother, please, I've never been so scared, not since Grant Nif tried to touch me. You nearly killed him, and his family. When did you lose control?" Hylean hung his head, he could no longer look at them. Alexia and Ranguvar hugged him at the same time. The other occupants of the fire turned away, Hylean was the strongest, he could do whatever he wanted. They spoke in turns. "I... it doesn't matter... I forgive you for what you did so long ago... what you fought for, because, in the end, you fought for us... and, I like the brother you are... I love you, Hylean." Hylean heard and he couldn't move, his soul, feeling dirty and unworthy of their unconditional love he shared. He couldn't let himself... Why were their hearts more pure than his was? Why couldn't he let himself love Alexia, every other fiber of his being did... He collapsed, the power he had used had exhausted him. "Hylean!"

Thank you! I really didn't want to be the first to say it!

A question's answered! Huzzah! 8-) That was an easy one... for your next rhetorical question... Just joking! you are an excellent author.

he uses "V"s instead...

no chapter today I'm afraid :| :x :cry: Waaahh! I have to leave it in a cliffhanger!

yes! yes! Its so awesome! What's Yassin's connection to his mistress... what in the world is his mistress planning... what is Yassin's connection to Akka? Why does he never use his Ws? Well... those questions are not answered.... Excellent as always!

can't improve on greatness, support!

don't much like it I'm afraid... well, to each his own.

well, don't know what to say, will this be a detective flick?

wow... but, quite frankly, I don't feel anything reading it. Not a thing. 2/10

Chapter 11: A Sister's Plea, Part 2 Jano removed himself to the Zamorakian commander's chair. A cruel thing, it stood nearly as tall as a man, and was perpetually inhabited by demons. One of which actually occupied the seat. It was Deathmonger Hero-eater, personal executioner to the Zamorak general Cona, and the slayer of countless heroes from the dawn of humanity. Around him were many soldiers, half demons and other such monsters, looking at this intruder with the respect that comes with a superior fighter. They nodded their heads, not daring to look him in the eye. "I come with... tidings." He said, without pomp or respect to the demon. "Well? Flesh sack? What does my powerful warrior have to say?" The demon mused, then, reaching out, he grabbed a handy nearby prisoner, and, beginning at the feet, ate him all. "Yes, what does the powerful warrior have to say with so little respect? Indeed!" Jano looked the demon straight in the eye. "We have a traitor. Not dangerous yet, but he could be soon. Ensign." Deathmonger waited, normally, he would kill the soldier right out, but Ensign was way above his level of power. "So? If he isn't dangerous, I won't fight a warrior like him, you know what he can do. I've burned cities, raped women, flayed men alive and killed heroes who had slain greater demons than me, and yet what he does, and how he does it, scares me. Well, we all know he is general ranked! What can I do about it?" "He has recently acquired a new girl. She will undoubtedly be forced to see us battle, for her, of course. I want you to change the judgment, so that I deserve her. If he really wants her, he will fight me. I can defeat him." Jano spoke without cockiness or surety; he said it as fact, which Deathmonger fervently hoped it was. "Very well, this will prove a most cruel battle." The demon sunk into his chair and communed with the trapped spirits. -Hylean's tent, just outside the Zamorakian encampment- "Jaaj! Ere we's! Dats Ensign's... ar, Hylane's tent. Dats it! Don espect all da peoples ere ta be soe nice." Kinnin left, hobbling along, looking around for any potential spies. Ranguvar went in, to find him embracing a Saradominist soldier! "Dearest brother, care to introduce us?" She said, she didn't mind really, but still, he could have mentioned he had a love interest! "Certainly, this is Alexia! And I'm going to help her escape so that she can lead the Army of Saradomin here, for a surprise attack." "Hello, so you're Hylean's sister, he told me a lot about you." "Well, anyway... Daddy says come home at once, things, if they continue, will risk everything you have, or will, hold dear. The future, though not written in stone, will nearly be the death of you." "I know... but I've come too far! I need to help end this war!" "Hylean, your sister may be right, I would hate for you to die too. Like everyone else, it seems." Hylean merely nodded. "I'm too powerful to be killed by anyone who has less than a general status. I will stay here and tell the Saradominists myself. I want you, Alexia, to go with Ranguvar and stay in Falador. I think you never really were a soldier..." "What?! And stay home, become like my mom, lethargic and over-violent?" "Eh? No, alive, and then we travel a bit, fighting or whatever you desire." "ALRIGHT! ON YOUR FEET! HIS DEMONIC LORD, DEATHMONGER HERO-EATER, ARRIVES AT YOUR TENT FLAP!!!" Yelled the stentorian shout of a powerful sergeant. Deathmonger came in instantly. "Ensign! I have come to tell you that your claim is invalid. That girl belongs to Jano, unless you'd like to fight him for it, good! In one hour, main ring, that girl goes with her too, heh, like brother and sister, this should be fun." The demon left without a word. Hylean couldn't find a word, but he was white as a sheet. He couldn't have the same leverage he had when he planned for the two to leave. He would have to win even at the loss of himself.

whoa! now... that is the single most weirdest thing, and yes, I had some kind of bug, I would post, and it would say Debug mode... etc. I thought it hadn't processed so I did it again (4 times) and gave up... hoo boy.

Whoa! Take one step back, slide to the left! And do the cha cha slide. Now that you're done. I will tell you something. Yes, if you recall, Hylean smashed her away with such force that she broke a table. Ranguvar loves him greatly, however, she misunderstood that for romance, which only she has. puberty... you should of seen the things I did (and do) under the effects of puberty. Hylean has always, and will love his beloved sister, but it is most certainly not romance. Ranguvar got over it almost as soon as Hylean reached her. It never turned into incest. They are just much closer than the average brother/sister. And incest is not love, it is lust. Hylean will only love Alexia romantically.

whoops, quintuple post.