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  1. yer i know they can be hard to wright, but, well, if you like this story then you want to put the people under presseure so they come out with the next instalment =)
  2. ok we need 1 bad and 1 good. any takers?
  3. ok, im nice. i quite like it its good. kinda sad tone to the poems, but its good.yer i like it what bout evry one else?
  4. well if you read my story again you will see the wolf is posesed. now if it was a normal wolf it had to be posesed by something. in the first edit of it (i changed it while checking for spelling) it said it was 'controled' ok so that a greater evil is sending animals (posessed) his way as if trying to be rid of him. so thats kinda my plot line or a branch of the main plot. if i may i would like to make an evil character. it would be summin like: name: eagle gender: female age: 56 side: evil powers: able to summon almost any creature at will, and exelent mage skills. background: a long time ago was orfaned at the age of ten after her brother killed their paarents. moved to a seperate orfanage to him, they havent seen each other since. she got adopted by a rich family and all was going well for her. her forster parents were wrongly acused for steeling and hanged inocent leaving eagle with out parents once again. she took all she could and ran away into the most remote of places weher she wtayed for several years killing what she could to eat after find random weapons out side her 'home'. by the time she was 23 she decided this wasnt the life for her. she came out of hiding but no one cared for her. she had to settle down but the only place that ecapted her was the street. it was hard for her and she got angry. she got really angry. she still had the weapon she used to kill the animals with and decided to use it. one day she say a really rich banker walking down the road with a heavy purse and snatched it. the banker felt it how ever and tryed caling for help only to be aproched by a sword by his neck. he died and eagle got her first sence of murder, and she enjoyed it. she had to run away since if she was caught she would be killed. by now she was 27. all she did all day was walk around and steel food for her to eat. she finaly got enough money for her to buy some armout, that she did. it was a set of finaly crafted black armour. she wore it where ever she went but continued to keep the old sword for its memorys. she felt like she wanted to be the power over some ones life and quickly killed another person, despite them being innocent. she loved the blood, another person died due to her. so this continued till she was in such a mess she couldnt get out. many people were after her and she couldnt defeat them all so she ran. she found shelter in a little hutwith an old woman inside. the woman taught her skills such as summoning fire from nowhere and blasting it as a bolt squarly into a target. she continued with the training untill she was better than the old woman.they got into an argument other the dinner and eagle killed the old woman with a massive blast of wind. the house was destroyed. again she gathered what she could and set off. she found this black castle and called for them to let her stay with them. they acepted. she didnt know it at the time but she was staying at the home of one of the most powerful evil over lords of that time. they tranined her in the ways of evil and soon she could summon anything from chickens to lesser deamons. by now she was getting old. she had found out information her brother was still alive and so sent a posesed wolf after him. she dosent know what happened as she still has not recived information about him. she had turned from good to bad. her closest friends being those she summons.
  5. i really like this it is good. i cant wait for the next part =)
  6. Then everybody died, except for the panda with a mohok on his Partially balding head. Suddenly a man impersonated the one moose that liked cherry berry pie. And gota machinegun, shot his pet and got a gold plated toilet and pooped for five days straight! afterwards she decided
  7. soz double post. any way, what did u all think?
  8. i like it, it has lost the 'star warsy' feel and its looking good. well done =)
  9. I will! it was a bitterly cold night. the wind raced through the trees. they creaked and bended as falcon walked along the narrow path. a faint fog had risen from the ground while, in the distance, a wolf howled. falcon was wearing nothing spectacular. he had deep blue eyes, the kind any person could easily get lost in, and long brown going grey hair. he was on his nightly walk to get the air while it was at its most refreshing. it was a massive change from his normal city home full of dirty, stinking markets, and people shouting. he had time to think. while he was thinking of thoughts of this life, he often used this moment in time for reflecting, he heard a movement in the bushes. his right hand slowly reached down to a weapon behind his back. the weapon was silver in colour longer than a dagger but shorted than a knife, a shoto. the movement was more constant as if he was being followed by something. his grip round his blade tightened. the grey wolf launched its self at falcon. the weapon sliced round in an arc injuring the wolf. this still didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t put the wolf off. it was strange usually wolfs were calm towards him. this was the first time one had ever tried to attack him. the fight commenced. while the wolf launched its self at falcon, falcon dodged while plunging the sharp of his shoto into the fur of the wolf until it tore through and reached the muscles. blood splattered every assault. either this wolf was very dumb or had a strong basis of attack . Again falcon grabbed his weapon and flipped it so he could stab with it. the wolf lunged at falcon. the sound of its muscles rippling, the breath hitting falconÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s chest, the sharp teeth. it slammed into falcon and the teeth tore into falcons flesh. blood poured from the wound. despite being old he was extremely strong. he was lying on the ground the wolf on top of him ready to strike. but so was falcon. the shoto shot upwards powered by falconÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s hand. it reached the fur then the skin, you could hear a terribly painful sound as the glinting silver opened up the wolfs wind pipe and let the valuable air escape from the wolf while its blood stained falcons top. it rolled over. sucking sound could be heard for a while. falcon felt feed up with the wolf. he raised his un-scabbard weapon and brought it crushing down on the wolf. its own blood stained its wonderful fur. 7 times it was stabbed before it gave in. as it died a green and red smoke rose out of the carcass. "possessed" falcon explained to himself. the smoke flowed into the air and vanished behind the fog. falcon cleaned his shoto on the wolf and slotted it back. He looked down at his injury. blood was hammering out. he tore of his sleeve and tied it around his injury. After doing all this he hobbled back home thankful not to see another possessed animal.
  10. i also like it however i fell that it is talking to much of a star wars feel (which i dis-like) thats the only thing puting me off it. other wise its really good, good descpiption, gore (a bit), and you can almost make us feel the character. im looking forwars to the next chapter just try and get rid of the 'star warsy' feel
  11. ugh! we are full of good you can only be evil so live with it!
  12. ok i know this isnt my story but nutaral people are just anoyin! (no offence) so since we full of good people we turn you to an evil. ok? good good.
  13. you know your strong enough when..... .....a new weapon is made especialy for you. .....you have lv 1000 strenght. you know your rich enough when..... ....you drop dragon armour because 'its taking up bank space'. ....you buy a blue phat to make you look good and then drop it because you cant be borthered to bank it.
  14. merry i was talking about your. a tuching story (i know i cnt speel). yer, so people, now we need bout 3/4 evil guys. so create away. (would i be alowed to create another character?)
  15. just a thought isnt 20 people a bit to much for a story :? . what bout 5 per side.
  16. i know this may sound really stupid but i felt moved by that! lol
  17. name: falcon gender: male age: 56 side: good skills: very wise and has a very vast knolage. also a master sword wielder and good with a bow and arrow. (he also loves fire :P) background: orfaned at the age if 10 after assasinating his parents with his trusty sword and setting the hut alight! he moved to an orfanage home but didnt enjoy it there (would you?!) so to get revenge he was (in cases) pschopathic and made everyone think he was mad! after he was left alone he found he enjoyed reading and so thats how his vast wisdom and creative language come from. he loves making up poems. any way he finaly found some foster parents and they misteariously died on falcons 16th birthday (as soon as he could live alone). since his 'parents' had no other sons or daughters he inhereted all they had. little else if known about falcon untill the age of 55 when he re-aperes. his sword skills have improved alot and can take down almost all enimies with only 1-3 hits depending on their strengh. he can also split a branch with one shot, at a distance of 200 meters, on his first attempt. he has got on well with various monks and has every prayer skill avalible including the ablility to come back from the dead which he has only ever used once. he is not one to be messed with, how ever, in his old age he prefers to work on tactics rather than fight.
  18. There once was a girl from Antarctica who loved to explore the discount store in the penguin's backyard for some new socks and shoes but she had no money on her so she decided it would make sense to rob the bank. After thinking about it she decided to get some mischief powder to instead make the people eat food and not to watch the bank. The Haunted bank was built by a old man who glanced very quickly at the wris[bleep]ch he wore on his head... The bank was going to be styled, architecturally, like the Leaning Tower which fell onto a river of hot, boiling fudge. Well, she decided to cross the boiling river, she noticed something. It was a strange man standing in the boiling with a knife to smear some jelly on andrew grower. For some reason he liked it. He then ate my cousin, and I had to beat up Andrew. Then killed paul. However, my pants caught fire and boom went the toilet I then saw cheese flying through my bedroom window with someone riding a pink tricycle with training wheels and a large object floating in his pocket. Then a crusty wrench was dropped from the Twin Towers, which don't exist any more. Then a hot grabbed the wrench and she said "I will eat this like bacon". So she ate some cheese instead. Much to the dislike of her one-armed father who ate children. Thus her father hopped in his batmobile and drove into a wall of demon pigs that had green, rotten, smelly breathes. But suddenly from the top of the father's head, a three word, three d monkey said, "I will poke my s with a chopstick". The monkey jumped out onto the skateboard of his hairy toe. Suddenly, the chainsaw in the devious pub, started magically and began with its tremendous roar to scare the villagers. The antarctic went to the pub to save the moldy cheese that was kept in a lockbox. Then she realized she was bisexual and she yelled: "I want clinton!". She gasped as the toxic fumes tried to choke the smelly monkey, herself and her pet decided to die right there. The said "Oh, yes, I would like some new friends because I always thought that cooking is really really dumb, and sex is fun!". And after a run in with her nonexistent brother, she did some plastic surgery on her little, inflatable, round, and large [bleep] that was growing very rapidly at around 0.0005miles/hour. But the surgery ended up being too expensive, so she died. Then the surgeon felt guilty, so he decided to stab her lifeless body. But he ended up making a bigpile of poopy which he later flung at neighbors general area while walking alight. However, once she saw this akward looking little boy who had a broken head and so she decided to go to the hospital to get a smelly blender! Being poopy, the infamous hotdog ronald ate her burger and then puked on her. Meanwhile in antarctica, the icecream man was flying in his Porsche to his ulgy momma whom everybody thought was really hot! When he arrived, 80 chinese kids were eating some really stinky crap made from snot that a dog had stolen from an old lady who looked like an old shoe. Suddenly, a massive quagmire appeared in Los Angeles, California and Texas. The quagmire was large and very stinky like frog guts and re-fried beans. While this happened, Bobby ate some good pie and drank some camelblood. Until suddenly, he was ambushed by an army of evil monkeys that threw poo on the ground, then ate it. Meanwhile, Superman flew off to rescue some fat jellyfish that Catwoman had stolen from the volcano of turd which was created by the big monkey-donkey-horse. The fat jellyfish found Antarctican-girl and they fell through the cold window of her midget friends potato and together they saved the world from the evil green foot fungus who was very small with spots on his eyes. An orange cheese covererd with fungus is very smelly and very dirty! The orange cheese came straight from hot fiery heck. "Oh my lord!", yelped the little remote control when she poked it with a random stick of wisdom. Out of nowhere, a rabbit appeared, with ninja turtles, and spiderman alone who bit george. Then -spiderman killed himself-, a desparate depressed guy wanted to become a real boy so he could eat strawberry pie, because apple pie was colored like cake in jelly. On another note, the president of communist Duck World was a republican who had a wife that ate 80 chinese kids, who had MSG. This is because his mum got brain cancer from drinking the evil smelly fart potion while listening to Zezima's loser life-story. This caused a N00B-fest straight from Varrock world one after Delrith came, eating genetically modified frogs with smelly butts which stank like a cabbage mixed with tomato and smelly armpits with no friends. Nobody expected to dance in this vile rat infested son of a mother and father with Jerry Lewis. But when everyone jumped on the cart of the furious horse tamer who thought that he was cool, he turned and said to the little girl. "Why must you torment me, because I hate my self and you? Thats ok I like being a transgendered she said. Then she bit me. Then i pushed her into a smelly butt of a fat ogre. My grandma said "I need help with my underpants because they're pretty and bright pink". In the meanwhile, somewhere else on the blue oysterbar, a magical muffin was eating a genatically manipulated spider, but got poisoned! So the muffin got antidote from a wizard named FatJoe, but was tricked by the evil muffin lord of Evil Pastry Lane. "I want to eat the muffin", said the Muffin. So the Muffin ate himself / herself because he was a very hungry and cannibalistic muffin. Having watched this, i just know I had to watch it all through my binoculars which smelled like bobble head dolls with a touch of lavender oil-covered antisocial butterflys with the lack of respect for the king of france and his queen which is dumb and useless and also a lawyer who no one ever known as much sillyness.she got naked, then she started taking pictures of birds in the trees with a camera that cost her twenty dollars at Subway Eat Fresh. But then she lost it and so random dude farted very loud,and blew up the rest of the poisonous lightbulbs. Being poisoned, the person ate pie and danced to the rythms of the planters peanuts and ate glue and indented these paragraph's poisioned penut pie. The whole universe was very unhappy so they ate cheese covered foot in her boots that she found... Yet it was very unlikely that her pixel sigs were any good in a place like the august so she moved her furniture outside of her pants and went to Thormac the Sorcerer who was eating, flying, and dancing a stupid dance on stupid music with his ugly pink pet poodle named Frodo Baggins who looked like it had rabies. Unfortunately, the girl (aka the man) killed the poodle, and made frodo CRAZYY!!! Frodo smashed his head on Thormac's beloved ming-vase and kill everyone with his butterflyknife which is pointy and made of home brewed pork and is very dangerous when cold. But then something ate Frodo up. It was some giant naked bear, that liked beans on cold toast with glue attached. Frodo was regurgitated when he found a pshyco called 'Andr̮̩̉̉ Wallnut'. He tied his laces with strings made by a cow named Bobbyjohn Jr. The cow went towards pixie shrinks and said "Blimey, I LOVE NUTS!". Funnily enough, nuts were cooked with even more nuts and covered in delicious nut alcohol. He quickly became drunk and disordely and accidentally made a very big pile of mustard. Upon closer examination, it appeared to have a tiny fire giant trapped with a gardenhoe bought from B&Q in a nutshell and it was on clearance today. Then everybody died, except for the panda with a mohok on his Partially balding head. Suddenly a man impersonated the one moose that liked cherry berry pie. And gota machinegun![/b]
  19. u said it was short you lier! :cry:
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