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Hello godde1008, Welcome to Tip.It, and thank you for your submission! :thumbsup: I have edited the page to link to the correct page now, and added you to the credits. Changes should be lives soon. If you have any questions, feel free to PM me, ~Julie

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The term is Dutch (both nationality and language), and I was only joking. :^_^: I know being a grammar nazi can be annoying, but it is vital in my role as tutor and teacher. Linguistics is my thing, maths is not. Each of us have our own talents. Edit: I suck. Forgot to count: 269.

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267. You native speakers suck. ;)

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265. Something us noobs who learned English as a second language tend to master. ;)

You're. I am, and always will be, a grammar nazi. :^_^: 263.

First: Welcome to Tip.It. :) Second: I'm unsure what the purpose of your assignment is, or which rules you are bound by, but I would assume that you are assessed on your use of language in some way? Anyway.. Aside from the points raised in above posts, I would suggest you adjust your jargon somewhat: Avoid words like "really" because they weaken your writing. There's a number of grammatical issues: Are you trying to "partake of a possibility that appealed to you" ?? Are you referring to a number of professions or jobs? Think about what you're trying to say and take your reader by the hand: state - explain - illustrate. Mind your grammar: If you're not sure what to use, use a dictionary. For terminology, use a thesaures. [hide=Partake of/in] [/hide] Avoid using excessive wording - refer to Wadsworth's section on Deadwood: Also avoid the use of contractions, and try not to start sentences with words like "but" and "and" Asking yourself what question? Debating what? Why is there a greater sense of urgency? ^I would actually just remove that whole thing and reword what you're trying to say in one concise sentence. Reword this sentence (it is ungrammatical), but before you even keep it in, ask yourself what you're trying to say here. How is this sentence relevent to the rest of your essay? Why is it overwhelming when you still have two years? Which decisions and what pressure? Where does what start to get difficult, and why? Which young age? Must we really be planning our lives at age 17 (assuming that's what you mean)? Why? Also: try to use written language, rather than type up something you would speak. What situation? Why does it give you comfort? People can "undergo situations"? "...undergoing this very same situation" ?? I may not be a native English speaker, but the wording strikes me as off. Keep in mind that I only went through your first paragraph, and that these are only a few points.

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Non taken I made no attempt to be objective, I made up my mind that the Palestinians deserve the land as much as the Jews. Since neither side will consent to the either having the land they will be at war till the end of time. The example was just meant to say hey wait a minute maybe the Palestinians have reason to be mad Actually, most of that post was directed at Nifflin. Guess I could have made that clearer. ;) In essence, I agree with you in that they both have legit claims to the land.

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What's done in the past, is done. You cannot undo it, however to address your point, I would say that the way native Americans have been treated is utterly shameful (this being in the 20th century and whatnot). Yes, they do deserve part of the land, but since many others now also live there it should be shared. This does not mean that putting natives at a disadvantage is justified. To get back on topic, Nifflin does indeed appear prejudiced, and The Gabe seems like a reasonable individual to me. I'm not going to comment on isreal63. Anyway, as The Gabe stated, both sides have committed atrocities. In their violence, neither are justified. You can't just simply assume one side is at fault, because accept it or not, it takes two to tango. Nifflin, the notion of wanting to remove the Jews from Israel and into Siberia is as ridiculous as I would be to claim all non-native Americans should be shoved into the Atlantic for their crimes against the native people and their taking of the natives' land. I understand your sympathies for the Palistinians, and am not denying unjustice has been done to them, but you're completely ignoring the other side of things. You are personally involved in this conflict, and I believe that, therefore, you are incapable of keeping an objective opinion on the matter. No offence. Finally I'd just like to note that, since you said Jews live peacefully in other islamic countries (like Egypt), non-islamic people in such countries are not treated equally to muslims. With your belief in human rights, I would think that you'd know this, and disapprove.

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