Redman4933 Posted September 3, 2007 Share Posted September 3, 2007 These are three short stories I created, chronicling the adventures of Jonas, a simple miner from Falador, who answers the call of Saradomin. Constructive criticism welcomed. CHARACTERS Jonas Silversmith - The hero of the story. Marie Silversmith - The hero's wife. General Wilhelm Frederick - Commander of the Misthalin Army. Lieutenant Gunter Frederick - Wilhelm's son. Priest - sent by Saradomin to solve the crisis. Sorry I didn't give him a name! Otto Erbot - The bad guy. Say his name out loud. See what I done there? Saradomin - Yep, you read that correctly. Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 3, 2007 Author Share Posted September 3, 2007 INFESTATION Part One of the Jonas Silversmith Trilogy Chapter One ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Introduction As the sun set over the Crafting Guild, Jonas smiled. It had been a good day for his silver and gold business. Despite the rock golem attack earlier, nothing much had happened. As he packed away his ores, Brown Apron and Rune Pickaxe, he couldnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t help but notice a lot of people clamouring around a yew tree. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅGoodbye, Jonas!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jenova1692 Posted September 4, 2007 Share Posted September 4, 2007 Great story, wouldn't have guessed it was your first try if you hadn't said so. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xewleer Posted September 4, 2007 Share Posted September 4, 2007 not badly written, I await the next chapter welcome to the library! I'll show you how terrifying a true Christian can be!It's Xewleer: ZEW le ar, got it memorized?Hermit of the Varrock Library and its proud guard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 4, 2007 Author Share Posted September 4, 2007 Chapter Two ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ The Automaton Army The next day brought with it howling winds and biting cold rain, but Jonas still had a job to do. He packed his lunch, kissed Marie goodbye, put on his leather raincoat and left. On his way, he took some ores out of the bank. For today was smelting day. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅI hate smelting day.ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 5, 2007 Author Share Posted September 5, 2007 Chapter Three ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Hope and Prayer Jonas was out of breath by the time he reached the Varrock West gate, having run the whole way. As he approached the gate, a guard ran over. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅAre you from Falador?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 5, 2007 Author Share Posted September 5, 2007 Chapter Four ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅAnswers!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lit0ua Posted September 5, 2007 Share Posted September 5, 2007 Excellently written Red, I can't wait for the next Chapter :) [Click here to help stop World-Hunger.] ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xewleer Posted September 6, 2007 Share Posted September 6, 2007 pretty good! keep it up, thank goodness she'll survive! I'll show you how terrifying a true Christian can be!It's Xewleer: ZEW le ar, got it memorized?Hermit of the Varrock Library and its proud guard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 6, 2007 Author Share Posted September 6, 2007 Chapter Five ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Divine Intervention Jonas awoke to the sounds of many voices, intermixed with the sounds of horses whinnying, weapons clanging and marching feet. He got out of bed and looked out the window. Down below, he saw the Misthalin army preparing to assault Falador. The generals were going over their plans and the soldiers were deep in prayer. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅJonas,ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 6, 2007 Author Share Posted September 6, 2007 Chapter Six ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ The truth about the Automaton Army ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅJonas Silversmith,ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 6, 2007 Author Share Posted September 6, 2007 Chapter Seven ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Uprising Once the plan was agreed, many hours had passed, and Jonas was tired. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅSo,ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 6, 2007 Author Share Posted September 6, 2007 Chapter Eight ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ The End of Otto Otto Erbot moved through the ranks, casting as he went. Everywhere he pointed his staff, soldiers fled, allowing Otto to kill them at will. Nobody dared challenge him. Nobody, except Jonas. He barred OttoÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s path. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅFOOL!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 6, 2007 Author Share Posted September 6, 2007 Chapter Nine ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Aftermath Hours later, the Misthalin army was cleaning up the mess. They were taking away their wounded, burying the dead, and rescuing captured Falador citizens. Jonas, on the other hand, was being treated as a hero. As he walked through the large crowd of people, shaking hands, he saw two familiar faces at the gate. It was Marie and the priest. Marie ran and hugged Jonas, while the priest called for everyoneÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s attention. There was a sudden silence. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅYou are all wondering what happened to the Automatons?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
llamster Posted September 7, 2007 Share Posted September 7, 2007 Very good for a first attempt. Ah, this reminds me about the noob on the Runescape forums who was upset with the quest "Cold War" because apparently his grandparents died in the war. :wall: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 23, 2007 Author Share Posted September 23, 2007 HOLY RETRIBUTION Part Two of the Jonas Silversmith Trilogy Chapter One - Memorial The snow flakes appeared to be dancing in the breeze that swept through Falador. It was time for the Fourth Falador Snow Festival (which takes place every seven years), but the Falador residents werenÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t celebrating. They were mourning. For it had been three years to the day since the march of the Automaton Army. The records state that over three hundred Falador citizens died when the Automatons (referred to as ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¹ÃâAutosÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢ by some residents) attacked Falador. And so, the residents were gathered around a statue of Saradomin in the park, deep in prayer. The only person speaking was the priest. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅO Lord Saradomin,ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soviet_skunk Posted September 23, 2007 Share Posted September 23, 2007 :ohnoes: i wonder what happened. Zamorak stole a seed from the draynor seed stall?Cat get stuck up a tree?I NEED ANSWERS!! :evil: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Unoalexi Posted September 23, 2007 Share Posted September 23, 2007 Off topic- Gosh, there's so many wannabe Soviets on these forums.. -.- On topic- Not a bad story, however a bit, hmm how shall I say this? Basic.. The whole 'Simple guy goes about his days untill the arrival of a superior force. The death of a loved one by this new enemy causes him to seek revenge, so the gods/god make him their hero and thus, he alone has the power to.. Blahblahblah, you know what I mean..' plot has been used many times before.. Seven kittens out of ten... Here be dragons ^ Dragon of the Day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 24, 2007 Author Share Posted September 24, 2007 Chapter Two ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Meeting with the Gods ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWhat?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lit0ua Posted September 24, 2007 Share Posted September 24, 2007 The first chapter was excellently written, well done! :D The second one looks interesting, can't wait for the rest! ~Lit [Click here to help stop World-Hunger.] ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soviet_skunk Posted September 24, 2007 Share Posted September 24, 2007 off-topic:im not a wannabe soviet,theres a big diffrence,im a Communist big diffrence,i use the flag to show my support of the (ex)Communist country (btw nice sig Unolexi) Ontopic:Wow Redman Yet another fantastic piece of writing,I assume that your next writing will be of the same calibre. (Btw thing you researched,that was one of the best parts,Guthix...A chair!It boggles my mind! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 24, 2007 Author Share Posted September 24, 2007 Chapter Three ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ A Spiritual Battle ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅHello? Anyone here?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soviet_skunk Posted September 25, 2007 Share Posted September 25, 2007 =D> =D> =D> =D> =D> =D> =D> =D> ^DO that or else! Another excellant piece.One question is it the last :-k Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Redman4933 Posted September 26, 2007 Author Share Posted September 26, 2007 Chapter Five ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ Rebirth and Retribution Jonas came to, and was greeted by a worried looking Saradomin. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWhÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ what happened?ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Retired from RuneScape as of November 10th 2007. This is what I am doing now. | My Website | My RuneScape Programs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
smitherfolyf Posted September 26, 2007 Share Posted September 26, 2007 interesting... very enjoyable :D Air running in world 16 at air alter... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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