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Something I have made up in the passed hour and a half. I am afraid that unless your name is Hawkxs, or you ever played Star Control that a large part of this story will go over your head, for that I am sorry.

 

Please read, if you don't get something just accept it and read on. Anything you don't understand at the end put in a review. Its just an introduction so there will be more, Here or in Falador :o

 

Just to give you a chance:

 

Frekop is a swear word

 

Res is scanners

 

Acharmar and Bellatrix are stars

 

Syreen, Ur-Quan, VUX(Very Ugly Xenoform), Yehat and Mycon are Races.

 

Dreadnought, Cruiser, Intruder, Terminator and Avenger are race specific ships.

 

Limpet drone is a weapon used by the Vux, slows a ship down.

 

 

 

Sir, vessel on Res.

 

Distance and markings

 

Six minutes

 

Minutes! Take evasive action.

 

Sir! Human Pre-Hyperspace.

 

The bridge dropped to silence. Pre-HyperspaceHow far away is that Dreadnought?

 

If it remained at full we have put an hour between us and them.

 

Can we get a more precise reading on the vessel?

 

Free-Class

 

FrekopSet to intercept, prepare shuttles and charge weapons.

 

A series of Ayes went around the bridge. As Drake leant back in the captains chair it gave a shudder Just what I need The chair stank of death. Drake was an Ensign, the only surviving crewman not out of stasis; technically that gave him the highest rank aboard. Names had not been learnt, just referring to everyone as you or not referring to anyone at all was easier.

 

Computer, He said softly into the voice panel last recorded log.

 

The static picture of Diana, ships engineer, appeared. The tone was light, was happy. We gave those Mycon a pasting they wont soon forget! Ha-ha. On course for Bellatrix, meeting up with the Yehat to escort us back though their space, the Grenadier and Frederick are heading for Achermar, the Syreen first fleet will be meeting them there, hopefully they will have had as much luck. The tone dropped slightly It has been hard adjusting to command duties but a pay increase will mean that Jan will have a future whatever happensUnless I die too of course The tone had dropped away completely and followed with silence for a few moments before the computer flashed End Log

 

Computer begin recording-The Ebert has been travelling at capacity for the passed three days. Two limpet drones have been removed, two remain. Bellatrix was an ambush, two Terminators had been destroyed when we arrived and another three were heavily damaged. We attempted to assist but the VUX had soon destroyed another Terminator and the other two had edged across the Golsis point. We attempted to follow them but before they could push up two Dreadnoughts dropped out of Hyperspace, laying down fire, forcing them to change course.

 

Re-entering True-space in five, four, three The bridge was suddenly awash with the spectrum, a Free-Class vessel drifted with only three flashing lights as signs of continued power.

 

The Ebert was unable to make the course corrections but the Lattice had recharged enough to provide minimal cover. I am sorry to report that Chief Engineer Diana Laurel perished, along with Quartermaster Gail Knox and S.Crewman Harry Hawfinch. The living quarters have been re-sealed. Possessions and bodies have been recycled. At least one Dreadnoughts has pushed up after us, it is possible that the two Terminators have survived but the chances are limited. Now we must render assistance to a defenceless Human vessel that probably is not even aware that the war rages on. End Log.

 

Sir, we have reached ISA three, estimated time to arrival thirty minutes.

 

Ok. Are the shuttles prepared?

 

ErrSir, the Stasis cycle isnt complete yet.

 

Oh, of course. When will the Shuttles be prepared?

 

Twenty three minutes sir, and there is one shuttle.

 

Keep me informed. Is there any response to hails?

 

No sir, any response will have a three minute delay I am afraid, that is supposing there is anyone active over there. We still have thirty seconds before the six minute round trip is completed.

 

I see. Class specifications?

 

Two hundred berth colony ship. No weapons, no shields. Armour has a tensile defence of half an Inversion Factor.

 

Good God. Estimated time to Dreadnoughts arrival, verse the estimated transfer time?

 

We are deficient by twenty minutes. Dreadnought transit time at ISA, ten minutes. We can complete transfer but we will not be able to push up before they fire. Sir.

 

Keep me informed. Gene Drake had felt the dislike of the crew the moment they discovered that he was an Ensign. Most of them out ranked him and this stupid rule against S.Crew, Stasis Crewmen, from taking over while any member of the original crew remained made things difficult, all to save a few seconds of paperwork.

 

We have a transmission coming in, Sir. Ship Classifications: The Guardian. SearchingIf you have no objections? He hadnt stopped the search, it was merely protocol now.

 

NoCan I Drake re-began Patch the transmission to my comm.

 

Aye Sir.

 

This is the Earth Vessel Guardian. We are transmitting Welcome messages on all frequencies

 

Jam them!

 

What, er Sir.

 

They are transmitting on all frequencies. All we need is for the Ur-Quan to know we have dropped out of Hyperspace. Have you jammed them yet?

 

Err The officer suddenly all fingers and thumbs Yes sir.

 

Good. Now unscramble the message and patch it to me.

 

Aye Sir.

 

It was a small victory but a victory none the less. This is the Earth Vessel Guardian. We are transmitting Welcome messages on all frequencies, your transmission system was unlike anything we have seen before, please transmit on our level if you can receive this. We await your response. This is the

 

You did transmit on Radio frequencies didnt you?

 

Sir?

 

It did not occur to you that they would not have Hyper wave transmitters or receivers?

 

Sir, with respect all vessels have Hyper Wave receivers, even pre Hyper He trailed off.

 

Pre Hyper what?

 

Pre HyperSpace, Sir. What I meant was, ah, I meant wasRe-transmitting.

 

Good. Dont mess up again and you can stay out of the deep freeze. A threat made against him many a time.

 

Yes Sir. Another small victory.

 

 

 

This is Captain John Dale, to whom am I speaking please? Well I suppose that I will have to waitfour minutes? Man your ship moves quick. I am afraid that we have not had much luck out here so far. I was brought out of Suspension only a few hours ago, seems there is some Gravitonic disturbances nearby, any idea what is causing them? I am pleased to report that there has been no incident thus far, an achievement I guess being we are over ninety years old. The transmission cut off.

 

This isGene Drake, of the Alliance Earth Cruiser Ebert. I am afraid that the last ninety years have not been as uneventful for the rest of humanity. We are at war with a race known as the Ur-Quan; together with their Hierarchy of Battle Thralls they seek to imprison us beneath a device they call a slave shield. Humanity will not tolerate that. However we are currently being pursued by one of their Dreadnoughts, and we are battle damaged. We have approximately fifteen minutes before they pose a threat to us. Your vessel cannot out run them, but my vessel has enough space for you and your colonists. We will send a shuttle over while we manoeuvre into docking position, please transfer as much stored energy and supplies as possible on it. Once we have docked you can transfer your people, it will be faster and safer that way. Please time is of the essence.

 

I see. I have begun bringing people out of suspension but I fear that there will not be enough time to bring the whole crew around in time. We are however carrying some Ultra-high density connectors, if we were connected by that then you could continue to put distance between us and this Earl-Quan threat.

 

My engineers tell me that it has a chance of working but it will mean leaving the shuttle behind. The two crewmen do not yet know this and so I must entrust the responsibility for informing them to you.

 

I see. I cannot allow you to put any of your people at risk for the sakes of my people. We will have to think of something else.

 

What! Sir my men are all willing to lay down their lives to save their fellow man, the war has taught us that we are only as strong as our weakest link, everyone has to pull together not struggle individually.

 

It might just be my twentieth century morality but I cannot allow any man to die as a result of my ship. Could you not simply tow us to safety?

 

No, I am afraid the Ur-Quan Vessel is faster in True-space. We will be with you in only a few moments now. Please prepare the connectors.

 

I cannot allow it.

 

You must! It is for the greater good.

 

I am not allowing them to take the connectors.

 

If you do not allow them to take them then some of your own people may die, you said so yourself!

 

May Die! Your people Will Die!

 

They are prepared to take that sacrifice!

 

Sir, we have docked, the shuttle is returning. Another S.Crew interjected while the two fought over the communications net.

 

You dont know how many you have condemned to death!

 

Sir! Avenger de-cloaking!

 

Laun

Well I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts.

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Pretty good. Grammar next to impeccable, as expected, Needs more explaining...

 

 

 

1. More explaining of faction specific ships, I thought, for a minute, that the dreadnought was human!

 

 

 

2. Free-class?

 

Terminator?

 

Inversion Factor

 

ISA

 

 

 

that's all for now. I'm interested in this... Where may I learn about star control?

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http://starcontrol.classicgaming.gamespy.com/sc2/

 

Although I am...going beyond the canon by a long way.

 

 

 

Free Class is an old Pre-Hyperdrive type Human Vessel, sort of colony ship.

 

Terminator is the Yehat Faction main ship. Pair of Pulse Cannons and an Inpentrable shield that is powered by a Quirk in their Genetics

 

 

 

Inversion Factor is the base unit of damage, 1 IF is equivlent to 1 Point Defense Laser(Human Weapon) at full power for 1 second.

 

 

 

ISA, Interspacial Acceleration. The Alliance, and Hierarchy both use Thrusters, these thrusters typically will accelerate a ship to ISA 5, however the drag of the ship, and it max energy output and such combine to (always) decrease the speed(as well as the hull's stress level). ISA four is considered fast, ISA five is the max using Thrusters. Although later stories will have vessels that exceed that speed. Hyperspace obeys different rules, as will be explored in other stories!

 

 

 

As I said, it is the introduction, as I(Or others, please pm me for any details) post more stories of this type the races will(hopefully) become clearer. Thanks Xe by the way.

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I am not going to lie to you, most of the time I write in prose so Dialogue is tricky for me. Do you have any tips for that? Making the characters different, interesting?

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I am not going to lie to you, most of the time I write in prose so Dialogue is tricky for me. Do you have any tips for that? Making the characters different, interesting?

 

 

 

Depends on how the character should act. If he hates his job, he will be annoying and hate everything. If he is an evil enemy who wants world domination he should be kind of giddy.

 

 

 

It just depends, before you write a story, you think out how the players in the story will act, and based upon that write how they act in diologue so the reader gets a sense of feel for the character.

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For me, I find it's best to walk around and act like a character you are having trouble with.

 

 

 

For example. In my recent work, Valkyrie, you have the sadist Personality of Ben. He is essentially evil, but generally does things towards the cowardly and timid personality of Ben's best interest (as the cowardly one is the 'original' personality) So how does he talk?

 

 

 

He is insane, so he has a verbal tick. (Just for fun, that is) so every now and then, he peppers his lines with, mainly, Japanese. He has his own code of morals so he doesn't talk all that politely. He says 'heck' and Crap and a small slew of lesser cuss words. Next, since he essentially is the other half of Ben he speaks intelligently, despite the cuss words.

 

 

 

In interacting with others, he is completely arrogant and understands that he can beat up anyone at the drop of someone else's hat, for no reason. So he bullies and tortures. Since he represents the unbridled desires of Ben, he has no... how to put it... reserve... he talks about how much he enjoyed raping and dissecting AT THE SAME TIME the first valkyrie seen that first time he sees Hermione, effectively breaking her more 'happy' personality.

 

 

 

So, to get a feel, I pace the first floor (which is abandoned at ten O'clock almost without exception) and I talk like him, flesh out his philosophy in his mind... is he a wanton serial killer? Of is he more refined... He thinks that torturing men is 'gay' so he is homophobic and disturbed. He is insane.

 

 

 

That's my method of thought for evil people. Good people I just wing it, can't really sympathize with too many of them. Unless I make them comic idiots. Here is a site that is very influential to me for the creation of heroes/villains. Warning, major spoilers for practically everything that exists in the secret underground world of geekdom.

 

 

 

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/HomePage

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This bores me a bit, due to the fact it is absolutely cliche! It is so common, like Star Trek or something. I really do not like that, also it seems everyone talks the same, it's like they are all royalty, some of them need a different sort of personality.

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I am not disagreeing with you but I am so tired of the dysfunctional crew that has so many differences its just unrealistic.

 

Perhaps if you were to suggest some kind of character complete with responces to certain situations I would be able to react in different fashions...at the moment I was reliant on my own limited experiances and responces.

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I am not disagreeing with you but I am so tired of the dysfunctional crew that has so many differences its just unrealistic.

 

Perhaps if you were to suggest some kind of character complete with responces to certain situations I would be able to react in different fashions...at the moment I was reliant on my own limited experiances and responces.

 

 

 

Dysfunctional crew are the best... They may blow the ship up :lol: [/lamejoke]

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I am not disagreeing with you but I am so tired of the dysfunctional crew that has so many differences its just unrealistic.

 

Perhaps if you were to suggest some kind of character complete with responces to certain situations I would be able to react in different fashions...at the moment I was reliant on my own limited experiances and responces.

 

 

 

 

 

Well this may be a bit blank, but most of the crew seem a bit robot-like.

 

 

 

I would suggest a character but I think you are being sarcastic. I was thinking along the lines of a rookie or something who does things differently like instead of aye he is like 'uh yes sir' or something.

 

 

 

But if this seems pretty useless not all comments have to be considered :)

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I have that effect on people. :( No I am not being sarcastic. It was more that I wanted to make a start and a complicated storyline was not what I was interested in, I just wanted to highlight the futility of the whole war against the Ur-Quan and set the scene for characters that you actually have got to know just dying without much warning...Unlike Star Trek or Star Wars.

 

I suppose it is boring because I wanted it to be(odd as that sounds), I will endevour to make the next one more character elaborate.

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Jee, the posts on this forum come quick! I'm used to writing a few replies and then waiting tommorow to see them x]

 

 

 

but yeah, I would make something interesting happen, maybe a monster crashing through the ships hull [illogical as it may seem, it's an idea].

 

 

 

Your story, your world.

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Hmmmm a war going on that is taxing humanity(as well as a number of more advanced races) and a monster crashes into a ship...Well its plausible I suppose...Interesting to see how it played out...lots of talking though.

 

 

 

And as a Vetern Varrockian I can tell you that most of the time you will be waiting a long time for replies...Just going though a high patch at the moment.

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lol'ed at "unless your name is Hawkxs"

 

 

 

No but really, a decent story, I like it with more description, just it's kinda hard to do that when you're writing space battles and stuff.

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yep... sometimes, it's just me and a couple guys, unlike the 5+ guys (girls) we currently have.

 

 

 

Here's one :arrow: Bluejayfan94

 

And another :arrow: Xewleer

 

And another :arrow: Ratchet573

 

And... ANOTHER? :arrow: Sephy

 

And.. Oh hell with it. I'm tired with this list

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