I havn't done many wallpaper sized abstracts, so I thought I would give it a go. Comments welcome

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Shattered

im not much for wallpapers, but i think its pretty cool. seems a little plain tho... 8.5/10

not a big fan of this one:

 

 

 

background i dont like. Not really that impressive ( and i could still see the burst of light you tried to do, didnt work cause you have a lot of black)

 

 

 

text wasnt necessary, but its fine. Line work doesnt fit in well since.

Hmm well actually i like the linework, and the background is pretty nice except there is a bit too much black :? and i would either use a different font and make it smaller. maybe try making it fit in with the linework or take it out all together.

not a big fan of this one:

 

 

 

background i dont like. Not really that impressive ( and i could still see the burst of light you tried to do, didnt work cause you have a lot of black)

 

 

 

text wasnt necessary, but its fine. Line work doesnt fit in well since.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I had this as the first version but was told more contrast would look better, which resulted in more black.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

http://img39.exs.cx/img39/9210/shattered1.jpg

hmmm yea i bit plain i would have 2 agree. 5/10

the second 1 you posted isn't very attractive. First one is pretty good i think. I see nothing that bad in it as some1 else did. It's a good abstract that needs minor fixing. The dark look is ok...not all abstracts need to be colorfull or bright...expecialy a wallpaper that needs to be less eyecatching than a normal abstract, and that doesn't work nice with a strong eyecatching focus. I personaly don't like some sharp/pixel cuts that u can fix easy i think ( i mean the ones in the middle-bottom left part...there's 2 pretty noticable and 1 less obvious on the left). And i think the linework should be bright, not black.

 

 

 

About the text i'd try another, more regular shaped font that goes better with the geometric cuts in the wally. some kind of borderwork could be useful 2.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still i like it 8/10.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And remember u shouldn't rate a wallpaper born piece as u do with a standalone piece. Wally has to work on your desktop. Normal abstracts have to work in your eyes/brain only.

the second 1 you posted isn't very attractive. First one is pretty good i think. I see nothing that bad in it as some1 else did. It's a good abstract that needs minor fixing. The dark look is ok...not all abstracts need to be colorfull or bright...expecialy a wallpaper that needs to be less eyecatching than a normal abstract, and that doesn't work nice with a strong eyecatching focus. I personaly don't like some sharp/pixel cuts that u can fix easy i think ( i mean the ones in the middle-bottom left part...there's 2 pretty noticable and 1 less obvious on the left). And i think the linework should be bright, not black.

 

 

 

About the text i'd try another, more regular shaped font that goes better with the geometric cuts in the wally. some kind of borderwork could be useful 2.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still i like it 8/10.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And remember u shouldn't rate a wallpaper born piece as u do with a standalone piece. Wally has to work on your desktop. Normal abstracts have to work in your eyes/brain only.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The second one is the first version, the blue one is the updated version.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Thanks for the comments Jepp, I'll go work on it some more later to fix it up.