July 11, 200620 yr Very good, descriptive, short and sweet. I could see this all happening in my head as you spoke. Great write you got there ~~Byers The Carter III"I can get your brains for a bargain, like I bought it from Target.Hiphop is my supermarket, shoppin' cart full of fake hiphop artists."
July 13, 200620 yr not if you meant the story to be funny =P just read your other (longer) story. you really don't need to worry about others appreciating your storys. just keep writing and you'll get appreciation anyway i'm sure.
July 16, 200620 yr this story has great detail and a very great ability to make the reader think that the write is alot bigger then it actually is.
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