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Wow, amazing story. I've read the first five chapters and I'm already really into the story. Very nice, you really capture the reader. I was just posting now because I couldn't wait to post my positive feedback! :ohnoes:

 

 

 

I'll try to finish it soon! :P

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By popular demand, this signature is back- however I currently do not have a blog up at the moment and if I did I wouldn't update it. Sorry, the sig links to nowhere :( .

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Wow, amazing story. I've read the first five chapters and I'm already really into the story. Very nice, you really capture the reader. I was just posting now because I couldn't wait to post my positive feedback! :ohnoes:

 

 

 

I'll try to finish it soon! :P

 

 

 

Thanks mario_sunny! I'm leaving feedback for your story asap because I love it. Enjoy.

Hoping to get a new Signature (with matching avatar) soon. :D

 

In the meantime...Steam username: )I'll rewrite it later (add me if you want)

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What luster can the starts hold here? The sky here shoes no boundaries...

 

 

 

I guess you mean What luster can the stars hold here? The sky here shows no boundaries. You might want to edit that bit.

 

 

 

Plus you have various spelling mistakes. Including the word ancient, which seems to be repeatedly spelt wrong. I suggest reading through it, scamming for errors. It's what I did with my story. just to edit out the mistakes.

 

 

 

Only got up to chapter 12. But I have to go now. I'll read the rest later.

 

 

 

The negatives aside, I like the plot of the story. Not only that, but your description is incredibly realistic. As if i was there. Your characters have thier own seperate attitudes to one another. This makes the story A complete success. I'll read The_Corrupt later on, if i get the chance that is...

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Dude your post has at least 3 spelling mistakes I noticed in it... So really if your telling him to look back through his maybe you should look back through yours.

I got 99 problems but a noob ain't one.

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What luster can the starts hold here? The sky here shoes no boundaries...

 

 

 

I guess you mean What luster can the stars hold here? The sky here shows no boundaries. You might want to edit that bit.

 

 

 

Plus you have various spelling mistakes. Including the word ancient, which seems to be repeatedly spelt wrong. I suggest reading through it, scamming for errors. It's what I did with my story. juts to edit out the mistakes.

 

 

 

Only got up to chapter 12. But I have to go now. I'll read the rest later.

 

 

 

The negetives aside, I like the plot of the story. Not only that, but your description is incredibly realistic. As if i was there. Your characters have thier own seperate attitudes to one another. This makes the story A coplete success. I'll read The_Corrupt later on, if i get the chance that is...

 

 

 

Thanks. But I am not looking back for spelling mistakes, for this story is not the real Advent. I kinda wanted to wait to tell everyone--After I make my stories, through the Omega, there will be remakes of these stories--NOT and I repeat NOT RS based. Not only that, the plot in each story will be increased, and the depth will be, too. The last of the increase will be double the chapters, The Advent (No hyphenation with these ones--That's also a differentiation--The ( _) simply meant RS based, without one is the regular story. Clever?) will be 40 chapters, the Corrupt will be 80, and th Omega 160!

 

 

 

Hope you look forward to it! More story for the_Corrupt coming soon, guys. :D

Hoping to get a new Signature (with matching avatar) soon. :D

 

In the meantime...Steam username: )I'll rewrite it later (add me if you want)

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Dude publish it when ur done!

 

 

 

I <3: it

 

 

 

Thank you, hope you are enjoying the current one.

 

 

 

Now, to clarify this, the Advent ((with no hyphenation) and the corrupt and the omega are longer, in depth, and yes, the chapters will be three times as long as they are in the current version. And so everyone knows, I want to teach you the language from the stories, so I might not have to translate what they are saying. I'll post that (and a secret suprise) in the_Corrupt later. Hope you guys are happy I'm doing this and anxious.

Hoping to get a new Signature (with matching avatar) soon. :D

 

In the meantime...Steam username: )I'll rewrite it later (add me if you want)

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Wow good story so far. I will read it all! So far I've got to chapter 3. I'll give you more feed back when I've read it all :thumbsup:

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Hiya all...I'm bumping this story 'cause it was popular for a long time ago, and still should carry on some sorta legacy...So enjoy.

Hoping to get a new Signature (with matching avatar) soon. :D

 

In the meantime...Steam username: )I'll rewrite it later (add me if you want)

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