You've got a really great film noir thing going on there, although for the sake of the genre it would be cool to take it even further, with more high-contrast lighting. Of course, given the budget you had (Presumably near nothing), this is quite good indeed. You were lucky to have so many actors too, when I shot a short myself I only had about three actors and half a room to shoot in. :-| One problem as I see it is the music. Not to hate on Debussy, but that song just doesn't have enough feeling in it to make a good backdrop for drama. The other problem is just that, it's a backdrop instead of the focus, like I would imagine a music video would do. Overall though, nice work.