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Fist_of_ozzy, thank you. I'll take a break, and make sure yours gets done when I get back! Without any furter delay, your review, sire. Poor Cas! The highlighted parts indicate rather or not a comma is there, so compare and contrast your story with this fixed area. Since there are a lot of comma's needed throughout this post, and I mean throughout this post, even periods sometimes, I'm marking down like crazy, however, your score isn't weakening to a bad extreme. I find it odd his brother and father make fun of him. I love hero-outcasts! LOVE 'EM! Just not that way. :wink: Then the black knight-guy, to which I'm referring them to, comes in. And the ruffian threatens to burn the place to the ground! By orders of me, I declare this black knight-guy to perish! Thusly we come to the second and third posts for the first chapter. I have no critisism, only what the hell??!! Another dragon like person like the past?? Or at least I think that'll turn out like that. We'll see. SCORE: 55/60 AWESOME Your last 2 posts saved ya! Great. Nothing to say but this story is good, let's do the last chapter. :D Chapter 2: Stranger from the West This will be the shortest review page-part I've done. I love this chapter. You go to the past. And there isn't critisism! NO! You even twisted my theory--he's the dragon! Excellent work, my friend. Just don't trick me again. :evil: SCORE (The quickest one I've done) 58/60 AWESOME I loved the plot. You may had some grammar/puntuation mistakes, however, I'm not deducting. It's too good. OVERALL SCORE: 57/60 AWESOME I'm sad because the second part was great, with no critisism, which I love doing. Haha, just kidding. Excellent work. Fix punctuation, grammar, maybe look for spelling...You are doing awesome, and I'm enjoying myself. I deem you a knight. Man, there are a lot. But there. : Hope you enjoyed this as much as I enjoyed writing it. :wink: Have an awesome weekend and stuff. Bye!

Gah....It's 4:25 here atm, New England coastal time. Hehe. Crap weather today. I feel your pain, :pray: btw what time is it for you at the mo?

Great news everyone! I'm not going away 'till tomorrow because of the weather! So... Angelus, hope you are on tonight, cause I'm reviewing yours! Fists of ozzy, after him you. Necromagus has been patient, so I'll attempt to review it after. I dunno if I'll be tired or not...However, if I'm not...inverted1, then I'll do yours. And how bout you guys start reading my current story for a change? HMMMMMMMM??? :lol: I feel for you Angelus--no feedback, just makes ya wanna not do anything... :lol: No I'm serious.

Oops, guess I didn't put up the deadline for everyone... EVERYONE, I'm going up north; therefore, I must do the reviews the 18th next week. I'm going away this afternoon, and Xewleehr is coming back Sunday. Clarify today who you want to do your review. Clear? Thanks everyone. groans uncontrollaby, This is the only way to make everything fair for...Everyone. I wasn't even aware that I was going up their, until a few days ago, suprise suprise...

Oops, guess I didn't put up the deadline for everyone... EVERYONE, I'm going up north; therefore, I must do the reviews the 18th next week. I'm going away this afternoon, and Xewleehr is coming back Sunday. Clarify today who you want to do your review. Clear? Thanks everyone.

Hehe, sorry, been busy all day, all week, for the past month...Ugh. And it's summer. I'll make your deadline date tomorrow, so it'll be available today or tomorrow. And good luck with your college work, Xewleehr. And I knew about that respawn thing, it's just [mildly] funny.

Llamster, your story is pretty good so far...And the review is short, to match the stories shortness. But here. :lol: Don't worry, I like being silly. What the hell? YES!!! ABUSIVE TEACHERS! "I'll get the cane! Buhahahahah!" That was halarious. Cripes, that'll be stuck in my head while I attempt to win a black trainer card in Pokemon Pearl! But that's just funny! Oh, and after threatened, there needs to be a space. Deduction! So he is at an all dwarf school. It's like me Gym Partners a Monkey...Except it's "My Gym Partner's a Dwarf!" Well...It's the perfect scenario for me...And I'm lovin' it. So I'll end like this: It's like Harry Potter, "Go away human" is funny. It's like Go away mudblood," except not as cruel. Woot! And we're done! SCORE: 58/60 STiLL AWESOME I...Must...Stop...LAUGHING!!! Indeed, the story itself was very funny, very good, and I love it. I simply cannot go without reading more! You are good, intending comedy or not! Finish! FINAL AVERAGE: 59/60 AWESOME Spectacular, and the library is growing, for you are a knight. So be it, I declare it so! And you shall like it! I Enjoyed writing it! Hope you enjoyed reading it! :twisted: See ya!

Chapter 5: A Council with the King "You found the girl amongst the attack of the Noiiz?" Ren kneeled at the throne of the King of Unedain, King and Maester of the nation Xan-Viz. "She was a Noiiz. They somehow manifested their own negative thought into the girl, and she must have been easily possessed..." Possessed...Possessed... Ren arose, rubbing his head with one hand; an echo enveloped his inner thoughts. It was as if he...Heard this before. "Well?" King Xan-Viz questioned in an angered tone. However, Ren kept thinking of what he was hearing. Possessed...Demonic wings...Remember these words: The hunt has begun! He finally shook his thoughts from the inner depths of his thoughts, yet the remnants from the back of his mind echoed still. Ignoring them, he continued: "I felt a strong presence, and that was her. To be weak causes possession of your total body, and also causes pure control over mind and soul, never mind the heart..." Hearts negation...Mind and body, souls damnation... Ren began rubbing his head again, this time throwing the thoughts out. "Noiiz," King Xan-Viz arose from his throne, walking until he was face to face with Ren, "Noiiz are the horrid physical, mental, and spiritual negative energy released by a driven soul, whom only seeks revenge or any other entity within this cold and harsh life. When the soul is finally driven mad by their own evil, Noiiz is released, and the soul is destroyed, leaving the body, or the empty shell, behind. But the body becomes something...Yes, the body is manifested into pure darkness, and is manipulated by a dark master until it can think, breathe, and live on it's own...Despite this, they are still emotionless. And these empty shells are called...Curiji." Beware the Curiji, foul and deadly, who sing a powerful, deathly medley... Ren listened now to these foul premonitions that dwelt in his mind, and listened of Xan-Viz, for he could no shake the premonitions off. Xan-Viz therefore continued: "There are many Curiji...But there is only one thing in the world that is even more powerful that a Curiji..." Sin...Beware your ultimate sin! It shall haunt you and your kin! Be silent, premonitions! Be still! I cannot bear this any longer. Rest, I charge you, and you may haunt me later with the darkest of thought, and fill my mind with the worst of worst evils! "Sin." He had heard Xan-Viz, but Ren heard the voice of a sinister being boom through his mind, making him fall to his knees: As you wish! Thrice to thrice, from thrice to tenfold we curse you, your mind shall not suffice! Obliterated shall you become, and you shall burn with the rest of this earths scum! "Ren?" Xan-Viz helped him up, along with a couple of the guards around him. "Ren? Are you okay--" "Be silent!" Ren shook the guards and the king off, clutching his head in a burning pain. "I...I...It is silent. My mind is...Silent. I cannot hear those foul beings...The fearsome voices that harassed my inner sanctum of thought...The premonitions of evil have drained out, being obliterated into the darkness..." Ren turned to the king, allowing his hands to droop. "Mylord...I must part from your presence at once. I came to this city for two things; to deliver those offerings...And to search for something I feel as though I lost. But I do not know what is lost; allow me to part from your presence, I shall bother you no longer..." Xan-Viz bowed his head and smiled. "You bothered me not; now go. The girl shall be watched over, and we'll guard her with our lives. Now depart, the air is still still, and it is fresh; the sun shines upon the kingdom of Unedain, and you must take all advantages." Ren knelt before the king, bowed his head before the guards, and departed from the throne room. ******************** A dark enveloped over the sinister realm, and a dark voice spoke to the Curiji, and to the Noiiz as well. "His memory is returning to him. He is progressing faster than I thought. Reviel is there, but now that the boy has met the girl...He will have a hard time drawing the boy to us. Therefore, I call you; Sindrolig, Cell, Jigen. Assist Reviel, and go after the boy. You know the rest of the plan." "Yes, mylord..." All three said together, thus darkness wrapped around them and they disappeared. "Lotus comes here, for he senses something arriving on the horizon...He does not know what, but I certainly do. An ex-Demon Curiji awaits the future. He has already killed four of the other Demonic Curiji...He can think for himself now. He is now the third exile. Vincent..." The dark lord frowned, then snapped his fingers, creating a strange light that showed the image of Sindrolig. "You made it successfully," the dark lord smiled, "but there is a change in the original plans. Bring the boy to me, rather than slay him. And the girl, as well." "Understood, Mylord." The image of Sindrolig instantly faded. The dark lord laughed sinisterly, and the silence of the darkness was shattered; he knew what was coming, and it was coming swiftly.

Course I/Xewleehr can. Llamster and KCHughes--It's late, and Sylvan got in the way, I hope you don't mind, but I must do it tomorrow morning/afternoon instead. Anyways, read both of your stories, I remember tree gnome village and stuff, Llamster your story was good as well. Can't wait to review 'em. However, it's for a while I'll be looking for flukes...Over and over and over and over... BTW, inverted1 and Andufus and angelus--BTW angelus, good job--I could probably get them done tomorrow, as I want to. How's that sound? I'll pm you all when I'm done! And this should be fun!

Fists_of_Ozzy, good to see you back. I'll probably re-join Zephillia soon. Your deadline...Will be later, because I'm going up north with family, so...Wednsday the 18. inverted1, Same date, and I'm looking forward to it. There guys. Enjoy.

Certainly. Your deadline date is set for the 18. inverted1, your review, sire. It's short, but nothing to critique, and for that, I solute you. G'day. :D

Your deadline is set...And have a nice time at the festival. My friends going to one, too. :D

How ironic. You can't tell me you are not judgmental, or even a small bit of racist because if you say you are, then you are lying to yourself. Nowadays, we don't know whom to trust. Despite this irony, sure, I literally HATE what they did to us, I know many people whom had losses from the attack, and literally HATE all of them, And you cannot tell me you have no HATE within you because again, we all do. Also, the term towel head is more of a discriminative comment than racist. And my final realization is, since all of the democrats I hear and know about say one thing, "They don't want us over there! They hate us!" Then I guess they aren't happy we killed that tyrant and had them hang his [wagon], I guess they liked being massacred day by day, I guess we shouldn't be involved. It may be a tad ironic that I said both terms, but we all dislike something too much. And for me, and my friends who respect this country, it's those who attacked us in cold blood. Therefore, I shall hate them until the war is done and either they secede, or we secede. I shall hate them for what they did, and I feel bad for those civilians who come to our country and are mocked, for they did nothing to us. My father is a bomb squad officer at Logan airport, the place of the attack, and none of them know no one can be trusted, those who hail from Iraq...It could be simply someone who betrayed this country. Either way...

Hehe...Its almost believable... I really am not on the computer all of the time, and when I say deadline, I mean it's due on that date; we can get it to you before the date, and also we slowly work on it for a looong time. I have them all saved, I'm just too damn busy lately. Not a bad idea...Okay, if we forget, you get to flame us, flog us, whatever. Although my original idea was exactly the same. hehe. I'm only on for a long time if I'm done with everything else in my day, to write or do something. Okay, to end... Llamster, I'm sorry about that whole thing...I'll go easy on you, so you have the deadline for the 17th of July too, okay? Either today or tomorrow I'll post it--I'll open the folder and finish it now. inverted1, your story is so damn enjoyable...It'll be posted soon enough. archimage_a, I'm sorry to say this but you are banned!!!!! Buahahahahahahahah! Na just kidding :wink: Eat that! KCHughes, I'll get to work on yours as soon as there's are posted. Mehish for today.

All right, that's enough. I'm officially setting up a new policy; Xewleehr and I have lives, and are not always on the computer. I've been very busy lately, so I've a few rules to establish. I'll put them on the first page later. 1) Patience!: Patience is a virtue, as we say. Uphold it, and we will get your review done. If you are impatient, we will refuse service to you. Llamster, keep that in mind. 2) The review policy: This policy will set up a new road that will give me and Xewleehr ease. I declare it this name because, since I have a life, and Xewleehr as well, we shall set up a date for your deadline. This means, we will set up a day where our reviews shall be posted and done, but they must, and if they aren't...I refuse to discuss that. We may also get to post it any day before the deadline date. For you three who are waiting, I will post them at the end of this post. 3) The ban/refusal Policy: Discussion is allowed here, only on stories. Flaming will not be permitted. Any form of bribery for your story to be done will land you in a ban. Any flaming we will refuse service. Last, 4) Finish Policy: When your review is done, Xewleehr or I shall pm you to tell you your review is done. If you don't like your review, that's your problem. And more rules to come later, so nothing else will be wrong. KCHughes, your deadline is July 17. 2 days bud. inverted1, July 16, tomorrow. Llamster, I shall not refuse service to you, but prolong your date to July 19 for your impatience. Good. We're clear. Have a good day.

Okay, so whenever someone comes out with a thread like this, at least 7 people say bush as a moron. First. Get off the frickin' bandwagon, just because everyone else is saying "We hate Bush" doesn't mean you should. If he was a moron, then I guess he didn't put our troops in the middle east to fight off the towel heads, the ones that smashed our towers to nothing and made millions of people join oblivion. I guess, if many people hated him so much, he was never elected for another term. I guess, in a true reality, that he was never elected in the first place, 9/11 didn't happen, and we are all living in a fake universe created by machines in the matrix. Face it [wagon] wipes, if he wasn't such a good president, then I dunno how he even ended up as president twice. Indeed, I'm a bush supporter, and those of you who say a toothbrush could do better, you are basically saying you can do better. Face this reality/scenario: You are the president, and your nation was attacked, pressure was pressed upon you, then I suppose you would say: "Let's not attack them." No. Your first choice would be, in blind fury or shielded fury (Where you look calm but are pissed), "This war will be a long one. It won't be a little while, but many years to come." Then thousands of people cheer. Many years later, you have idiots prancing on the street, going: (Insert your last name here) is a moron!!!!" And [wagon], like at my school, saying "The main reason why we are over there is to look for imaginary nucs!" Here's a true story. I argued with my friend. A hardcore democrat, who is bent to thinking irrational. He negates 9/11 in his mind, thus ignoring it completely. We where having an argument (I was winning) and he said the same thing over and over: "The only reason we are over there is to hunt imaginary weapons." I yell "What about 9/11?!" He shut's up instantaneously. 5 seconds later: "Republicans and bush are stupid!" I ignored this, but he crossed the line when saying: "You will never understand what it's like to lose someone in the towers!" Well did you? Simple question ending with a no. Thus, I smashed his face and broke his nose (Oops). Never again did he call bush a moron around me. And never again did I resort to violence unless needed. It's democrats like him that, if I don't lose anyone special from the towers, why should we care? that make me mad. I remember that day we all became a union, no democrats or republicans, because in everyone's eyes, we wanted to simply blow the middle east off the map. But bush did the right thing and went to war. Then, years later, idiots are jumping on the bandwagon and saying bush is a moron. Think: I bet you didn't think that way when 9/11 happened. I'll end on a strange not. What if there are nucs, and after bush is out of office, they use them? Then, the idiots will scream: "OMG Bush should have found those weapons!" Tsk. I wouldn't vote for either, but if I had to choose, Obama. Hilary is a lying piece of crap, I remember when she said that we should stay in this war, and the dems booed, but the reps. were happy. But I know she won't uphold that. She'll withdraw the troops and we'll all die. :-w But neither will win; this country is to racist, everywhere you look there is one. Down south, from where I live up in new england, it doesn't stop. I hope, one day, we will be ready, and a black person/woman will be president.

At E3 (And I forgot about this) I just remembered Atlus is coming out with a new Trauma Center. The game takes place in 2007, 10 years before the events of Second Opinion and is the pinnacle of Caduceus. So no, Derek Stiles and Angie won't be in this game :cry: However, there are many improvements that can lead to a successful Trauma Center 4. The pre-story goes something like this: No flaming about how you don't trust IGN, since every sight about this game says the same thing! The improvements are astounding! From now on, it's complete voice over, so it won't be a pain-in-the-[wagon] reading it. You might think it's weird that we still have the tools from the second opinion (i.e., the antibiotic gel). However, it's the pinnacle of Caduceus, so it makes sense. Well, to me it does. More improvements: I guess it's an okay improvement, but it's in 16:9 widescreen. So yay I say. Still, I'm a tad upset about why it's set in 2007/2008 (Since second opinion is set in 2017 or 2018...), because I wanted to see if things would work out between Derek and Angie... :cry: Anyway, more improvements graphic wise: Looks the same, the vital meter is different...hehe... Lastly, my favorite part...The new disease. Truly, we haven't a clue, but from second opinion, this will lead me to thinking since Angies father ran away at around this time, this must be the first guilt--AKA "An experimental guilt gone wrong" since he helped create it. My extremely favorite part, and I hope yours: This game is going global, not only through wifi, but using co-op with your friends, you can do surgery together. I'm definatly stoked for that! In a way, the new characters look cool, Caduceus's beginning, and of course New blood will probably be a smash hit. This might lead us to the fourth, hopefully with Derek Stiles and Angie, maybe with them married and Angie pregnant or something cute like that. We'll see... It comes out this Holiday Season, so prep for this one, fake medical community!

Grrr, I just remembered they ARE coming out with a new Trauma Center for the Wii: Trauma Center New Blood. Apparently, it takes place 10 years before the events of the current trauma center. However, it has co-op mode, so you can do surgery with your friends, and Wii tracking system for online, so it ranks the top in the world. Fascinating...I takes place in 2007... :-k

Cripes...Dammit...This reminds me too much of the Odyssey...creepy...And you write so awe-inspiring...Dammit... Okay...Go write a book, get it published, become famous, then blame the tipiters when your famous for nagging you to write a novel, where we go world renown and all of the famous movie stars come on tip.it...Thus we nag them... :-w

I like the things they are coming out with in the near future. Can you say PURE DOMINATION with all caps typed 1,000 times AND without going temporarily insane? :lol: The games they had to offer really look like we'll get far, for the DS and Wii. Reggie (Nintendo's speaker) even admitted we are dominating the market, with young and old audiences alike. So, he says, Wii is the future of gaming. Now it would be the future if the made the graphics, just for the graphics geeks, so I can stop their constant nagging and bragging about "Graphics are everything," it seriously makes me want to stick a penknife in their back... -.- The Wii zapper! That looks awesome. But the true fact, MS and SONY were...No show either. We all knew what was going to happen in both companies. Thusly, Nintendo had things we knew about, and didn't...Yet it wasn't satisfying...So E3 itself wasn't the greatest, since it truly had nothing to show...

Ninendo's Wii fit wasn't all they had to offer. And Wii fit looks fun, for reasons being I want to do yoga, and I don't feel like going to some yoga class, also because it has a mini DDR in it, and some other exercises. :-w Metroid corruption looked good; so did medal of honor, and the nintendo DS zelda looked awesome, but I really was looking forward to another Trauma Center, which I don't remember seeing. It wasn't a big disappointment, not great like other years, and it didn't improve with Sony or Microsoft, but I'm happy. The wii zapper and other games looks like the gaming improvement is finally met for first person shooter games, and future capabilities look...Swell. So ya. Happy. :anxious:

Go here. That's basically Nintendo's press, and boy did it sound great! I mean, I can't wait for the games, but the Wii zapper! The zapper is a controller you plug your nunchuck and wiimote into and you get full on control in first person shooter games because, indeed, it's a gun. Second, the game variety. Reggie, nintendo's speaker, literally showed at the beginning the control wii has over the market, 114 percent in Japan, 46 Percent in the US, and the UK 42 percent. And for 33 straight weeks Wii has been sold out. So bear that in mind, the Wii library has 60 games thus far, with 100 more on the way over the year, and the DS has 300 games, 140 more to come. The DS was great; Zelda the phantom hourglass looked amazingly cool, I still liked TP better, but you know, it still looked good for a portable system. Then the game range, like guitar hero 3, medal of honor heroes 2, Wii fit, Metroid prime 3: Corruption (They call it corruption because Samus has a new form whereas she gets more powerful but corrupted :P ) Mario Galaxy, as they said it was the biggest mario since mario 64, and another new controller, a steering wheel, designated for car games, but moreover for mario kart wii. Reggie also claimed that we should all face it; we are in control of 64 percent of the gaming market, and wii is the future. Sony was crap, we all new what was happening, MGS4 looks great, blah, blah, blah. Halo 3 for X-Box 360, I don't give a damn. Wii is what I focused on, and the future looks damn bright!

KCHughes, llamster, and inverted1, all three of you will have your reviews done today, and inverted1 has been the most patient, so his comes first.

Here we go...Let's see if you will live up to your current title, or have it brought down into a lower...Or make it higher. Bear in mind you can get OVERSCORE I call it, where you get over 60. However, that's for you to bear in mind, it's your own prize to brag about; to me, that's just a 60. At then end of the year, we will also have an overscore contest to see whom has the highest overscore. The prize? Wait and see (Nothing RS... :-w )...

PERFECT! More work for me to do (I mean this in a good way, not like "UGH!!! PERFECT!!!). Sweet, after Draggneth comes you. BTW, I like that story. :D EDIT: And indeed, KCHuges, you have knight status. And this was after a little bit of thinking. However, welcome, and enjoy your title. Just keep in mind you have the power to de-rank your title to a lower level OR raise it higher. To tell everyone how I do this, I take all previous rating score and do the average...So be careful. Okay, here comes some reviews...