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gettin better i can sorta see a plot but its good

very good how long this gonna be?

very good but er is that all ur gonna post here?

can u post wot else u sent to jagex if its half as good as this

if this got like made into a book then i wud buy it i wud also see the film play the game if it went that far this is one if the best stories ever written 10/10

u no u have been drinking too long wen u fall off the floor

i like wer this is goin

lol ye they are rnt they it wint be posted for ages

is that the end cos i think u cus do a lot more to it (v good so far)

dunno toying with an action romance not much romance tho in fact not much at all or a horo but its wether i get a good start or not (wotever i do ill try to put humour in it)

so no hidden meaning then?

i really dont get it at all plz explain in simple terms its good but i dont no y its good?

dead proper good i mite rite a story soon

only noticed it cos fixed was in bold u say fixed scimmy wen it shud actually say scimmy fixed (just poiinting it out its still good)

very good i really want to read more

its a bit confusin may be if u edit it will b better nd plz add more cos i havent decided on it yet

its quite good but i mean like it ses reason explained below is section 2 the reason (just left a really bad clan go to http://www.rsgems[LikelyScam] then click on the foums nd rs talk if u wnt to laff nd dont mind bad language proper funny)

dead good plzmake 1 post tho cos it wud be easier to read

i can remember reading sumtink about a half ogre half boy thing which was good nd he rule a platoon which fought dragons on here once that was good this is just in a hole diferent league a better one a much better one really gr8 story

very good nd i dont think its too long is that the end of it if so will there be a sequeal

yeh gr8 story carry on plz

lux like ur more actiove here then in the clan forums

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did u get the town names from varok, faldor etc yeh lianne if u actually read the story u mite have spotted his age which was 14 (14 is still a child in my opininon ) i am 13 not much of 14 and i dont think in big words and i am in top sets (not bragging) i think it ses he is 14 neway i cba re reading it no offence it is good but still i wudnt re read it straight away plus i am not bothere aba grammar p.s i mite sound like im defending him but its a good story dont skit it

yeh i luv it i red all of it one problem tho make the sections smaller the story dusnt have to change just say half ur posts that way i dont have to read 4 eva lol but seriously more ppl will read it if its smaller