PLEASE NOTE:There is no cursing on the track itself but if you would not like to read any curse words from the images shown then PLEASE as the last hook(chorus) ends either close the browser or continue watching, you have been warned.

 

 

 

TO MODS:I realize this is a youtube video but I'm trying to EXPOSE MY lyrical skills, it isn't just a normal youtube video so if you would be so kind as to not overlook this and if it's possible to keep my topic open please do so, thanks.

 

 

 

Copy and pasted:

 

 

 

I'm workin on my rap career ya know and all so I need peeps to listen: check out my first video(it's just pictures with the lyrics and a picture of me, nuttin fancy) Dirt Road on youtube:

 

 

 

NEW!You Might Be A Hata:*Warning, mild content

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GvzBEaxH-zo

 

 

 

Dirt Road:

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AddxWO7iTqM

 

 

 

Get That Dough:*warning mild language in lyrics

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uzRLFgF2ktg

 

 

 

Cause You Drove:

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_YpwWd0DkK0

 

 

 

I'm The Champion:

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GTR6It5uWxo

"The video you have requested is not available"

well aware of this had to go back through like 7 different forums and edit my topics lol

 

 

 

anyway I have a working link now: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AddxWO7iTqM

It's good. Some pretty good lyrics. Did you make the beat yourself?

What do you mean with made it to the top without the banana? And for some reason it doesn't really sound really good. Like you just can't make it, you know, you don't come out with the words you use. And to be honest, the verses don't make much sense to me either.

Banana is slang for a gun -_-

 

 

 

I guess I'll have to explain for people who can't put 2 and 2 together...basically the hook means I'm tired of seeing the same old same old come out with some stupid [wagon] dance song(albeit I will probably put it on my ipod rofl xD) and then suddenly they have millions because some song writer makes some halfassed lyrics. I keep it gangsta with originality is playing off the fact that I might not be a gangsta but it is also a slang term for "cool".

 

 

 

The verses are backing up the fact that I'm tired of the above statements mentioned:

 

 

 

"I still work the hardest at school n my job/I wasn't just given my corn on the cob"

 

 

 

It all makes sense if you understood any of it -_-

It really doesn't sound that bad, hahaha. Nice!

It all makes sense if you understood any of it -_-

 

 

 

ALright, clear on the banana part. But still, there's some weird tuff in your writing.

 

 

 

I was young, yea I was looking at God himself

 

Riding high in a helicopter imagine how it felt

 

 

 

I mean, that's weird. You go from looking at God himself to 'riding' in a helicopter. Sure, the link is that you were high, and God is suposed to be high, but it doesn't fit. Maybe it's the 'riding' as you don't 'ride' a helicopter

 

 

 

8 Years old they tell me that I might die

 

Imagine how my pops felt when he began to cry

 

 

 

Weird again. Imagine how your pops felt when he began to cry? Probably not too good. It doesn't work. To him it doesn't matter if he cries, it doesn't make it more dramatic for him. It would be more logical if it would be "Imagine how I felt when I saw my pops cry" or something, but still it doesn't hold together well. And when you put it together with the previous lines it's even weirder. DId they tell you you was going to die when you were in a helicopter?

 

 

 

And the first verse has got some weird stuff as well.

 

 

 

Built street ways for the future to roll on

 

Pavin oppurtunities for the poor, praise for the rich

 

 

 

The pavin oppurtunities is a clever found with the street building, but what has got the praise for the rich has got to do with that?

 

 

 

It's safe to say I'm the king place the crown on my head

 

Cause I'll be damn sure I make it big before I'm dead

 

 

 

If it's safe to put a crown on your head, so then you made it big already, nothing to be damn sure of.

Needs more cowbell.

Sigh, I completely forgot that you guys don't know me xD

 

 

 

I'm a diabetic so I was driven to the hospital in a helicopter, no drugs for me :D

 

 

 

I'm not gonna rag on you but that completely "destroys" your arguement for the first half but it's a misunderstanding so it's cool, you just didn't know :)

 

 

 

Praise for the rich...honestly you got me stumped, I was trying to tie the I'm poor and wanna be rich so I'll praise you guys idea together maybe it didn 't work so well. The ending for the first verse does make sense what I meant was, I'm gonna make it big so you might as well give me the crown. Granted it would have made more sense if the 2 bars were switched around but it gave a more dramatic feel to it by having the idea of death being as the closer for the first verse.

 

 

 

I don't mind explaining these things if it means I help people understand me :)

0/10. I hate rap/hip hop.

0/10. I hate rap/hip hop.

 

Then get out :roll:

0/10. I hate rap/hip hop.

 

Then get out :roll:

 

 

 

Seriously. Where all these people who have to express their hatred for something they know nothing about coming from? -.-

0/10. I hate rap/hip hop.

 

 

 

Really though, I don't take stabs at your lifestyle/genres so why are coming into my thread to do it? Do people spit on your shoes when they see you cause they hate your genre? I honestly don't see why this rock/rap feud comes from, I don't see any battles being fought among either genre. Rappers aren't running wild killing off your bands are they? Your bands aren't writing hate songs about us, are they? So I want to know where the biased comments even started.

Really though, I don't take stabs at your lifestyle/genres so why are coming into my thread to do it? Do people spit on your shoes when they see you cause they hate your genre? I honestly don't see why this rock/rap feud comes from, I don't see any battles being fought among either genre. Rappers aren't running wild killing off your bands are they? Your bands aren't writing hate songs about us, are they? So I want to know where the biased comments even started.

 

 

 

Yeah, it makes sense this time.

 

 

 

I also don't know where this rap/rock fued came from. It's just dumb. :|

bleh it came out wrong or does everything I type have to be explained? I'll go edit :)

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New song added check it out :)