English Project : Cheated

[lavinder]

K for english i had to write a story, Its about 2 years old because i wrote it in year 7 ( Im in year 8 now and nearly finished the year). I couldnt think of a story by myself and because i "thought" noone in my class knew about RS i decided to write about RS.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Here it is ..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[Mutian]

Good story..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

If sombody would knwo about Runescape you will be laughted out so hard.

[lavinder]

lol yeah :oops:

[____]

It's Fan-Fiction. The only thing you could get marked down on (if the teacher knew about RS) was for originality* :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

* At least IMO anyways. Sometimes teachers can fail you just because they don't like you and somehow manage to think up some freakishly workable reason to back up your fail without giving the real reason.

[pjb21]

do teachers ever like you?

[KnightLite]

lol i wrote rs stories better than that ;)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'll have to dig out the sovieneir box some time and type them up :D

[Iantiger]

Well I guess it's not bad for the work of a Year 7 :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The one particular bad thing I think you've done is that you've made far too many references to Runescape. Like the bit about Varrock, and Port Sarim, and then you mention Runecrafting with Rune Essences... your teacher will be like:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

"??? Rune essence what's that? Varrock? Is that a country"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You see what I mean? You've made reference to too many RS-related items without explaining or introducing each one properly. Other than that, its better than what I could do in Year 7,

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Iantiger

[Godslayer]

Good lord...I can do alot better than that...And I'm grade 6 :lol:

[Neo_A_Cerec]

Year, you froob, not grade, he's English i reckon...unless i'm mistaken... :?

[lavinder]

"She" Is english and we hadto make the story completly wild and have nothing do do with normal this eg. football (the boys went mad rofl)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She didnt have a clue and she gave me a lvl 6a when everyone else got 6c's 5a's .

[ElvenFaith]

It's Fan-Fiction. The only thing you could get marked down on (if the teacher knew about RS) was for originality* :P

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

* At least IMO anyways. Sometimes teachers can fail you just because they don't like you and somehow manage to think up some freakishly workable reason to back up your fail without giving the real reason.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I've had that happen to me before... Boy was I ticked off. :oops:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It's a great story, lavinder. :) I see some potential, although I kind of agree with what Iantiger said. Other than that, great work. :)

[Rhys]

Good story, you switched tenses too many times though, you really should avoid that or things get confusing. Only other critiscm I have is that you missed out a few words and used some informal words.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still, a good piece of work for that age. (Fear my level 7s). :D