Harakiri

Next up...Xewleer and Confused Flames

Welcome to TIF and the Varrock Library! I am your second in command, Ratchet...I'll let every one fight over who is first in command. ON TOPIC: It was allright, but I don't like the bite size chapters to much... If your writing a short story than I would say to write it all, and if your writing a huge story, then I would say to write longer chapters. Other than a couple mistakes...( last sentence of first chapter...don't use and twice... commas are your friend), it was O.K, but really can't say your a good or terrible writer till I see more.

Holy bajeezus! Thats a lot o' DVDs...though i have a lot more books than you DVDs...My whole basement is full of books...

Oh god...its gonna be one of those 5 hour movies where the whole 5 hours is taken up by a fight... I hope it is not the majin Buu saga... 15 episodes for one fight... WTF?

South park is iffy for me... Most episodes are boring, though there are some I like... Fav episodes: WOW one My salty balls

Best episode: "Whats that poking me quagmire?" "Nothing...its just my*****" You get the idea... south park, futurama, dethklok> simpsons, family guy

Holy cabbage! I gotta find that...if its funny i would siggie that... Martial arts masters against little kids? AWESOME!

Story: Stratagem Author: Nom Anor Topic: Stratagem I thought this was a very good piece of science fiction. It is about a gang of kids who decide to go inside what they presume to be an abandoned secret government type place like Area 51. They get captured and put inside the building and there are still some things lurking in the building... I thought it was a good story that did not bore you to death. The chapters were very short, and always ended with a cliffhanger that left you waiting for the next chapter. It was neat how one chapter led to the other and there were no gaps the reader had to fill in. Nom did an excellent job of creating an eerie atmosphere and the story seemed like a futuristic resident evil. The story had a main character who could use mind control, and do things with his mind, which at first seemed kind of stupid, but the ways he used it in the story made up for it. Nom also did a great job of describing. He has the biggest vocabulary of anyone I have ever seen on the library and has a lot of college words in there. It does not mean it is an adult story though. The story is fairly bloody, but the action scenes are short, and never go into huge gory details. I found the cyborg aspect to remind me of Issac Asimov's book, I Robot, but other than that, all of the creatures seemed to be original. The characters were not bland, the story progressed at a good rate, and it was a well developed read. 9.8 out of 10

And then Xewleer comes and says that me and Archi's review is... better than his and sephs? Thanks Xewleer. Your words have given me hope and I'm gonna keep the reviews going.

If I did an opinionated post, it would be a whole page long, and would end up correcting every detail of the story that was wrong...I am working on it, this is my first review and like Archi said, you can't get reviewing skills over night. It's just the beginning and their are still like a couple hundred stories to read.

O.K...more detail it is.

Thanks for the ratings. God, you english are complex! We have only 5 movie ratings! And Pg movies for 8 year olds? WTH?

Have you seen rush hour 3? And what do the ratings on the DVDs mean? They are a lot different than american ratings...

I'd watch Mr. Rogers so when the zombies come to my house they call me a [developmentally delayed]ed 25 year old. Then they will leave me to watch Mr. Rogers. And then once the shows over, I'll act like Mr. Bean and not talk right and walk funny and look like an idiot.

LOL...show off on last pic...and holy crap...talk about too many DVD'S? I saw a lots of them that were very odd...Kangaroo Jack, Cody Banks 2? WHAT?

every one is entitled to their own opinion. Just let it rest. Just last night on clan chat we had a dirtbag who could not keep his mouth shut about religion. Its stupid to fight over and you cannot just walk up to a guy and say "God is real because I saw Jesus's face on my grilled cheese sandwich." There really is no point to this. You can practice your own religion, but if your gonna fight about it, please look back at WWII. A whole population of people were murdered for practicing a religion and you know what, if people continue to fight over religion like this then I will say that within my lifetime, another halocaust will happen, lead by the people who should be killed because they cannot accept people for who they are. You can be accepted into society for caring and allowing other people to have opinions or you can be accepted into slavery, where your minds prejudices take you over and ultimately control you. Just allow other people an opinion and live with their decisions.

Become as stupid as I can.

LOL, if you ever asked to see my collection of games other than the ones ^^ Then you are gonna have like 50 pics.

I have: DVDS: Dr. No, From Russia with Love, Diamonds are Forever, The Man with the Golden Gun, The World is not Enough, Casino Royale, Monty Python and the Holy Grail, The Mummy, The Mummy Returns, The Scorpion King, Futurama season 1, Futurama Season 2, Futurama Season 3, Futurama Season 4, Futurama Benders Big Score. Music: Dethklok The Dethalbum, Mudvayne, Wierd Al, Gwar, Red Hot Chili Peppers, Best of the 80's Platinum, Nickelback. Video Games: Odama, Simpsons Hit and Run, Splinter Cell, Splinter Cell Pandora Tomorrow, Madden 05, Tales of Symphonia, Super Smash Bros Melee, X men Legends, Exit, Splinter Cell Essentials, Syphons Filter Dark Mirror. (And like 5000 games for the x box).

THE BLUE JAY CHRONICLES 2: http://www.freewebs.com/ratchet573/index.htm Warning...inappropriate content not suitable for children

If you want some added fun, this is another story I am working on. PG-13...Inappropriate content http://www.freewebs.com/ratchet573/index.htm

Review: Aura Wars by: Archimage A Topic: Archimage tales 8+ Aura Wars is quite interesting. But, I found it to...hard to follow? It had a good premise but was hard to follow. The story jumped from one character to another with absolutely no signs to tell you, which I found somewhat confusing. The storyline itself was good. I liked the whole mysterious castle thing and all the kills were fairly brutal, but it just was not what I thought the story would be.The characters seemed to be everywhere at once and it was just to hard to follow a story where the characters are everywhere and you do not use astericks or anything to break it up and alert the reader that another character is going to take over the story for the moment. I'm sorry Archimage, but maybe next story? 8 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ Story: A tale from the library By: Archimage A Topic: Archimage tales 8+ A great story. This was funny in its own way. All the people from the library ( minus me, Blue Jay, ozzy) were in it. It was humorous...but why does it seem from experience, that Archimage is obsessed with spoons? Is he prejudiced against forks or something? Like I said it was humorous in its own way but it probably would not appeal to newer people to the library. Most of the people I had not heard of but just because of that I cannot jump up and say it was terrible. It was a good short story that does deserve a read. I do want to see Archimage make an updated version. Maybe have Blue Jay and Powerent have a relationship... 10 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ Story: Death Impending Author: Archimage A Topic Archimage Tales 8+ I could not even read this one... if anyone can read it please tell me what it says...because either my eyesites bad, or the stories color is just not a good red against a black background. USE A DARKER RED!!! _____________________________________________________________ Story: Release Author: Archimage A Topic: Archimage Tales 8+ Very, Very interesting. It seemed really dark to me. I loved it. This has to be my favorite Archimage story in the reviews so far. It is in letter form, and is fairly long but it is worth the read. And for some reason this one has a bear in it. So Archimage has to be obsessed with bears and spoons because they seem to show up in a lot of the stories he writes. 10 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ Story: Letter of a daymare Author: Archimage A Topic: Archimage Tales 8+ Holy crap...Amazing! That has got to be one of the best short stories I have ever read on the internet. That story was very sad as well. It seemed funny that a bear would show up out of nowhere and step on the person though... But it is still worthy of a ten. It is amazing. Take the five minutes to read this tale. Amazing job. 10 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ Story: Love ship By: Archimage A Topic: Archimage Tales 8+ A love story that is well written. I generally don't like much romance type stories. This was a wonderful example of the kind I like. Well written again, though Dam is should be spelled Damn I believe...unless Dam is the English way to spell it. 9 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ LAST BUT NOT LEAST Story: Blue Jay Chronicles By: Archimage A Topic: Archimage Tales 8+ =D> =D> =D> =D> =D> Thats all I can say. It was a well written master piece that even included my name in the first chapter! This is the story you should read. Out of all of Archimages stories, I thought this one was the best. 10 out of 10 _____________________________________________________________ OVERALL RATING FOR ARCHIMAGE TALES 8+ With a wide assortment of fantastic stories and great poems this is the perfect read for anyone with two or three hours to spare.Archimages writing style is unique. I have never read a story with a style like Archimages. As his friend, I can say his stories are great. As a fellow writer in the forum, I would say he is one of the top writers, if not the top writer. Its between him and Xewleer. He is great at creating an atmosphere and is amazing at creating a storyline. His poems are good (though he says he hates writing poems). I would say that this was worth the read and if anything, you should read one of them. Some of them leave you thinking. I am not giving him a good review because he is my friend, but because these kind of stories are the kind you would see in really good books. I'd suggest his stories to all fantasy lovers and all people who have been with the forum for about half a year, because some of his stuff includes characters and events that happened within that half year. I am looking forward to seeing what he can come up with next and have to say that if he continues to write the way he does, he may land himself a writing career. Overall Rating 9.5 out of 10 More reviews soon! Please support this topic... next I think I will review Stratagem.

Blue Jay, Archi is funnier than me...His news shows were brilliant.

Me and Archimage are going to work on reviewing your stories. I will review some and Archimage will review some. Then, we will also review the latest stories and hopefully it will turn out all right. Since I am not that much of a comedian when it comes to reviewing things, I will leave the comedic reviews to my friend Archimage. Today, due to the first reviews section, I will review Archimages stories. The reviews work as follows: 0: Crap 1-2: Terrible 3-4: Not worth the read 5-6: All right 7-8: Great 9-10: Amazing I will base reviews on a couple things, Archimage can explain how he does his reviews when he shows up, but here is how I will base them: -How fun they are -Originality -Is it something worth reading more of? There are other factors such as being able to read it and understand it but thats beside the point. I hope we get the chance to review every story in the library. This will probably be a good guide for people who are looking for a good read. I will go into all stories with an open mind and I will review it telling you exactly why I gave the story that score. Since Archimage is my partner, I will review his stories first. If you have a problem with a review and want to know why I gave it the score it got, please PM me. I read anything so I do not stand with a specific genre or writing style. It just depends how good it is. Please support me and Archimage. Archimage, like I said will do comedic reviews, so that we balance each other out. Time to go read some stories!

Thanks a lot. Like I said, I will make this a daily updated post starting tomorrow.