[1,000,000 gp-contest] .oO(about poetry!)

[Zero-Overdrive]

This will be some long reading you have to do, but if you want to win a million gp in runescape and help a poor fellow, then read on!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Aight, you made a good choise by reading on, I am makin' this gift for my x-girlfriend, it's a box, painted black, and with and open sides on each side, with glass in the sides, and on the glass, scrabed a picture of a scorpion - (caurse she used to wear a neckless I gave her with a scorpion) in it, also inside the box is a black rose (rose pained black) and there is a cotton layer down under it. Really dark gift!!.. but I need a message to be written on the side of this box..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She left for since she no longer thought that we were good together, and it really cracked my heart! .. shes like we're still friends, talk on daily basic, but I really hate(miss?) her .. but I still act like we're cool with it, but I really wanna make a dark impact to her life!.. and her birthday soon, so this gift must really make a scar on her heart since I can give it as a gift and she'll have it in her room, so every day she have to face it!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I need a really dark and hatefull message, something poetry, and .. no, it must not be hatefull - it must not be hatefull, but maybe have some kinda hatefull meaning, like "You were my salvation" not hatefull, but hatefull ment!.. maybe use some of the words like .. salvation, or.. atone, or.. condemn, those kinda words!!!! ..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I was quitting runescape anyway, so might as well invest a million gp in this!!!.. post your best idea, do it for me, and my revenge, and do it for a million gp to the one I find best!!!! POST SO I CAN GET MY REVENGE! :o ..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

-(SORRY FOR MY ENGLISH, I LIVE IN A FAR AWAY COUNTRY, AND DO NOT USE ENGLISH ON A REGULAR BASIC, BUT THE POETRY MUST BE ON ENGLISH) -

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

EDIT:

 

 

 

I ask not of you all for your morale, I ask for your greedyness!.. a million could buy wonders, coulden't it ?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

EDIT: Aight aight .. but try to keep it on ONE line veryone, the box got limmed space to write on..

[dymed]

If she doesn't like it, couldn't she just throw it away/stash it away in the dark corners of her closet (no pun intended)? Why would she have to "face it" everyday?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

This sounds pretty...psychotic. I think there are better ways to obsess over her (or to just, you know, not...).

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sorry about your girlfriend, but this doesn't seem the right way to go about..."mending" your relationship. Can't find a better term. :?

[Zero-Overdrive]

Caurse we're still friends, she woulden't put it away, since it's not ment as in a dark way like that, but I just want her to know how I feel. And maybe your right, but a major thing about this is that I never got a reson why, so I went totally down, but I'm about to be over it, but I still want something that could reflect how I feel - and I don't see the phsycopatic part in it.. I mean, a black box, with glass in it, and so on, nothing wrong, this is alot like Case-modding, and the scorpion have a meaning to her, the only thing I see you can pick on is the black rose, but so what.. and then a dark message?!.. oh come on.. just want it to be something poetickly.. like .. ehh

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

- Prehaps salvation had never been an option

 

 

 

- I condemn the rose' buityfulness

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

.. something.. dosen't have to be mean, just have a deeper meaning!

[runesabre1]

When she'd said she wanted to see him

 

 

 

He was pleased - at first.

 

 

 

'Can't we talk of other things?' he'd asked - but she'd said 'No'.

 

 

 

The long day had held down light

 

 

 

As they'd struggled to communicate in near-shadow,

 

 

 

Close, but not that close.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sometimes talking's easier done apart,

 

 

 

Detached, perhaps, how on a windy day with the sun in her hair he'd loved her,

 

 

 

And how she'd seen in him a God as he moved, blithe and light,

 

 

 

A masterpiece in his perfection.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Those were past days, but past days count:

 

 

 

And now in their un-union, there was nothing left to remind them of each other

 

 

 

Except those past days.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

'Can't we talk of other things?' he'd asked,

 

 

 

But she'd said 'No',

 

 

 

And now he knew that memory was all they had left.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

by:richard macwilliam

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

my rs name is runesabre if i win

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

p.s.: when will u let us know who won??

[rambaldi]

its not great but:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

i thought u were

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

at first i thought u were

 

 

 

my white dove (perhaps another pet name here)

 

 

 

my cute little kitten (or another pet name here)

 

 

 

my beautiful angel (again another pet name here)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

then i realised u were

 

 

 

my salvation

 

 

 

my personal guiding light

 

 

 

my one ture friend

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

but i was wrong

 

 

 

you were more

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

i know its kinda full of cliches but i am makeing it up on the spot (kinda), there is also an end to it but its really really clicheic and to do with issues u probably dont have

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

also dude i know what its like, going through something similar myself

[Merry]

Passed from my eyes

 

 

 

is your reflection.

 

 

 

The bitterness

 

 

 

of your rejection.

 

 

 

You broke my heart

 

 

 

and left me standing.

 

 

 

now we're apart

 

 

 

and this our ending.

 

 

 

This is my plea

 

 

 

to you my dear

 

 

 

I want you too see

 

 

 

that this I'd fear

 

 

 

would tear me inside.

 

 

 

So I hope to evoke penitence

 

 

 

for peircing my pride

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I hope you like it, it was just a quick scribble...Enjoy!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My RS name is MerryGrace, but I'm sure there will be more even better poems.

[falconice]

When I first saw your eyes

 

 

 

I looked deep into them and found something

 

 

 

Everyday, I couldn't help thinking of it

 

 

 

It was gnawing at me, burning at my soul

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

One day, your eyes would sparkle a whimsical gleam

 

 

 

On others, it would fill the room & my heart with grief

 

 

 

But it didn't matter anyways, everyday I was in grief

 

 

 

Everyday I didn't spend with you was a day that I was dead

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The image of your face, forever imprinted in my head

 

 

 

The beautiful image, always haunting me

 

 

 

In the day, I would notice your perfection at school

 

 

 

At night, you filled my dreams with sensational longing

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I couldn't help myself, I had to

 

 

 

I suddenly couldn't control my feelings for you

 

 

 

I had to know, I had no choice

 

 

 

I took a plunge into emotions and told you my feelings

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My Lord was there that day, he granted me with your love

 

 

 

I was reborn, reliving the days I had previously known

 

 

 

The days I will never forget

 

 

 

The laughs, the fear, the sadness, the anger, all shared between us two

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Then all to soon, the Devil must've worked his mischief

 

 

 

The words I had nightmares about

 

 

 

It broke me, it condemned me to sadness

 

 

 

My salvation, my very angel, you, you killed my fragile heart

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Once my tourniquet left, my heart bled

 

 

 

The blood was not red, nor black

 

 

 

It was gray

 

 

 

A mixture of the pure times with you, and the hatred I now possessed

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I just wanted to see you smile

 

 

 

I just wanted to hear your laugh

 

 

 

The darkness shrouded my thoughts

 

 

 

My life, it was done, I was done

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

No more, I've told myself that you're not right for me

 

 

 

I told myself that I have got to live without you

 

 

 

I told myself that you were a freak and a loser

 

 

 

But, I cannot lie; deep inside your presence still exists

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I know that your best friend I've ever had

 

 

 

You're the one person that I've wanted to spend my life with

 

 

 

How could you? Can you not see?

 

 

 

YouÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢re the pure white snow and I'm the water you melt into

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I can't let this happen

 

 

 

Why?

 

 

 

Why did you do it?

 

 

 

Why am I condemned to eternal suffering without you?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

not bad for 15 minutes work eh?

[rambaldi]

wow, thats excellent falconice, i really liked the last few stanzas

[Laz-E-Boy]

You were my sunshine

 

 

 

Who stabbed and raped my weak heart

 

 

 

Goodbye forever

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Try the haiku.

[Dadevilsidol]

Memories of yesturday,

 

 

 

Have left within my heart

 

 

 

A gaping void,

 

 

 

That only you can fill.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Urm just a word of warning, don't go too dark and 'violent' in this as you are quite likely to scare her. That's never a good thing!

[How2PK]

Dear ex,

 

 

 

I'm going to hunt you trough the nation.

 

 

 

You were so utterly boring,

 

 

 

That I asked How2PK from tip.it to make this poem,

 

 

 

Cause I ran out of inspiration.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

TadÃÆÃâÃâá. I don't play runescape so it's completly free!

[JohnnySmum]

lol, this reminds me of the maddox page where he's talking about bad poetry on blogs and the like. Use words like nihilism (cause that comes up all the time in normal conversation).

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I've got some poetry competitions coming up in the near future, so I'll see what I can think up :wink:

[JohnnySmum]

Okay i just came up with this:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

There was a time when I could smile,

 

 

 

Before you stole my heart

 

 

 

And led me astray with sweetest guile

 

 

 

Your love never to impart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Hopefully I'll be able to think up some others later.

[Zero-Overdrive]

Aight good keep it flowing, but please try to keep it on 1-3 lines, to those posted.. longer.. poets, I will try to pin point some of the hings in your long stories, if any of them I wanna use - that's considered a win too..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

- I haven't red them all through that well yet, but I though this one were allright..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

by: runesabre1

 

 

 

- Sometimes talking's easier done apart.

 

 

 

- masterpiece in his perfection.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

by: rambaldi

 

 

 

but i was wrong - you were more

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

by: falconice

 

 

 

No more, I've told myself that you're not right for me

 

 

 

I told myself that I have got to live without you

 

 

 

I told myself that you were a freak and a loser

 

 

 

But, I cannot lie; deep inside your presence still exists

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

By: How2PK

 

 

 

Dear ex,

 

 

 

I'm going to hunt you trough the nation.

 

 

 

You were so utterly boring,

 

 

 

That I asked How2PK from tip.it to make this poem,

 

 

 

Cause I ran out of inspiration. <-- OMG that'll kill her ;)

[Futurama]

Roses are Red,

 

 

 

Violets are Blue,

 

 

 

I hope you die horribly

 

 

 

you heartless [puncture]

[Zero-Overdrive]

wo wo wo.. hostality there.. keep it clean .. :o

[Bubsa]

Kinda...sadist if you ask me?

 

 

 

But anywhos, gave it a go and:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Take joy from the fresh landscape of my wound,

 

 

 

break out the reeds, and the delicate streams,

 

 

 

and taste the blood, spilt, on thighs of sweetness.

 

 

 

But quick! So that joined together, and one,

 

 

 

time will find us ruined,

 

 

 

with bitten souls, and mouths bruised with love.

 

 

 

[Bacon2003]

La,la,la la,la,la,la,la

 

 

 

La,la,la la,la,la,la,la

 

 

 

La,la,la la,la,la,la,la

 

 

 

La,la,la la,la,la,la,la

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I just can't get a decent po-em

 

 

 

Girl, your hatred' is all I think about

 

 

 

I just can't get a decent po-em

 

 

 

Girl, its more than I dare to think about

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Made it up myself, honest.

[falconice]

Roses are Red,

 

 

 

Violets are Blue,

 

 

 

I hope you die horribly

 

 

 

you heartless fool

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

whoa... :shock: that's reallly good!

 

 

 

i wish i had talent like u :wink:

[Zero-Overdrive]

I've today added lil' more to the box - need that poem soon .. :o

[rambaldi]

whoo part of mine starred on teh bits u like :) wasnt expecting that

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

i would just like to thank u though, cuz of this i have tried writing a few poems myself, made me feel heaps better, might be cuz of other things but for a short while (just after i finnsihed them) i was almost feeling normal again

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

a few lines from another of my peoms that is kinda similar to the one i posted ealier

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

it became what i only dreamed of

 

 

 

what i coulnt see happening

 

 

 

you made me happy

 

 

 

you made me ecstatic

[JohnnySmum]

If I werenÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t such an idiot,

 

 

 

IÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢d think up a poem myself,

 

 

 

But it looks like I was never taught

 

 

 

And IÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢m a smelly elf.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm sure she'll be able to relate to it.

[Zero-Overdrive]

more! :o..

[Merry]

Edit: Accidental double post...I'll use this to say something else...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Theres alot of good poems, this is going to be a good contest. when will we find out who the winner is?

[Merry]

You wrote on my heart

 

 

 

how you'd never want to part

 

 

 

but when you got bored

 

 

 

of the love that I shared

 

 

 

You erased it away

 

 

 

and left me bitter to this day

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Or...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You wrote on my heart

 

 

 

that you'd never want to part

 

 

 

then you erased it away

 

 

 

and left me bitter to this day

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

two versions, one shorter than the other...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

theres another one...

 

 

 

I hope you consider my poetry, as I am in dire need of Money...lol. :lol:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I never look before I leap

 

 

 

therefore I usually fall

 

 

 

into a massive heap

 

 

 

with you laughing at it all

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Haha that was fun poem, random...has nothing to do with what you wanted, lol.