Version 2:

 

 

 

 

My first pixel. I think I would call it a WIP still, since I'm not satisfied completely yet and I know there's stuff I can improve on. But as it stands, I like it. It turned out pretty good I think.

 

 

 

C/C, comments, anything. It is my first, after all.

Nommy

 

 

 

Nice idea with the text, very original.

 

 

 

It needs some more detailed shading, give the table and walls some texture.

A lot better than my 1st pixel -Points to signature-

Your black outlines make my eyes bleed..

 

 

 

Seven kittens out of ten.

I likey

Your black outlines make my eyes bleed..

 

 

 

Seven kittens out of ten.

 

 

 

So Misterxman's signatures also make your eyes bleed?

I dont think its the black of the outlines Unoalexi dislikes, maybe the inconsistency of thickness.

 

 

 

I think you could potentially learn alot from this image NOM_ANOR if you took the time to work out your lighting and cleaned this up some, your colours work pretty well so for a first I'd be pretty proud of this.

 

 

 

keep it up - Ter

Thanks for all the comments.

 

 

 

I've been working a bit on it, reduced the black lines a bit but I think most of it would look odd without them. I guess I'm just impatient with details, but I have been adding some texture to the wood and such. Hopefully I'll be able to post a version 2 sometime soon.

 

 

 

But then again, I have a math test tomorrow and just finished with some Java programs. . .

I dont think its the black of the outlines Unoalexi dislikes, maybe the inconsitency of thickness.

 

 

 

I think you could potentially learn alot from this image NOM_ANOR if you took the time to work out your lighting and cleaned this up some, your colours work pretty well so for a first I'd be pretty proud of this.

 

 

 

keep it up - Ter

 

What he said.

 

 

 

I honestly kind of like the inconsistency. It looks unique. I would make the wood a bit different. But, I like the roughness for some reason.

I like it. It's a lot better than anything I can make. :anxious:

Your black outlines make my eyes bleed..

 

 

 

Seven kittens out of ten.

 

 

 

So Misterxman's signatures also make your eyes bleed?

 

 

 

No, you misunderstood.. his lines are nice and neat! :

Rough lines don't necessarily mean it's bad.

 

 

 

I think they suit the style.

Well it's definately impressive for a first so I rate it 8/10, comparing it with other peoples firsts.

 

 

 

The text is just awesome, but some items lack detail, esspecially the background which I find quite boring.

I think it's one of the best firsts i've seen. I think the way you have the lines gives it a different style.

 

The shadows are done well, and the shading, though simple is in my opinion, perfect for this. there are just two things that bother me, one, the shading on the wood next to the window (like to the left and right) is way to apparent, and since the window draws your eyes to that area, thats the one important flaw i see. it almost gives the appearance that the walls are curved, and unless you were going for that (i doubt it) you should change that. and lastly, with all the other things more sketchy, which is a style i like, the lines on the window are all perfectly straight and it's different from the rest, which i think should be changed, not sure exactly how, but still. anyway, the text is original, and good. also, the handle on the coffee cup is sorta wierd, make it a bit think i think.

 

Anyhow,

 

9/10

I think it's one of the best firsts i've seen. I think the way you have the lines gives it a different style.

 

I agree. :) Great work, especially for a first. I like it a lot.

 

 

 

Great attention to how the books/papers fold and bend.

 

 

 

The line inconsistency is nice, but thick lines usually look ugly with harsh pixeling. You can fix this with some slight anti-aliasing around the lines. :)

 

 

 

A few things you need to work on:

 

- Be consistent in your style. You use nice irregular and cartoony lines to outline the paper and a couple books, but other objects (like some of the books) are very straight and boring in places. In real life, no book would appear that perfectly straight! Hell, not even rulers can be realistically outlined with a single straight line. ;)

 

- You need more neutrals, especially on the desk, papers and cup. Right now the shadows just "end" and you leave solid colours, making it look plain and empty.

 

- You need to lighten it up a bit. ;) It looks like it should be a fun and cheerful picture, but it turned out very dark and depressing. Saturate those blues/greens and brighten the desk and shadows a bit.

 

 

 

Cheers. Keep it up. :)

Here's version 2:

 

 

 

 

 

 

I tried to give the table some texture, as well as getting the shanding down a little better to make it look less empty. Removed the lines on the papers, but I left most of the others.

 

 

 

Better? Worse?

Your black outlines make my eyes bleed..

 

 

 

Seven kittens out of ten.

 

 

 

So Misterxman's signatures also make your eyes bleed?

 

 

 

No, you misunderstood.. his lines are nice and neat! :

 

 

 

No... my post was sarcastic. You said you [didn't like] the black outlines, and neglected to say anything about their inconsistency, so i threw in the name of a very accomplished and respected pixeler who uses the same style (black lines) for comparison.

 

 

 

Oh screw it. Why do I even try. *looks at country-wide results of latest standardized test* *cuts wrists*

Calm yourself. ^

 

 

 

 

 

V2 has no real discernable difference, apart from a speckled shadow under the books.

 

 

 

The shadow/highlight around the window looks odd.

 

To give it texture try and [bleep]e bits out, rather than having waves of equal length.

Your black outlines make my eyes bleed..

 

 

 

Seven kittens out of ten.

 

 

 

So Misterxman's signatures also make your eyes bleed?

 

 

 

No, you misunderstood.. his lines are nice and neat! :

 

 

 

No... my post was sarcastic. You said you [didn't like] the black outlines, and neglected to say anything about their inconsistency, so i threw in the name of a very accomplished and respected pixeler who uses the same style (black lines) for comparison.

 

 

 

Oh screw it. Why do I even try. *looks at country-wide results of latest standardized test* *cuts wrists*

 

 

 

You could've put the tags in there, it's not as if I have the amazing ability to hear the tone of a person's voice over the internet.

 

 

 

rofl.. :lol: