hmm... you did make a improvement although i did catch to spelling errors. Quickly was spelled wrong in the 4th paragraph and probably is spelled wrong when referring to the hellhoundÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s dinner. Overall It is great to see when people can make good Runescape stories. 6/10