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I hate how there's more and more pokemon. The original 150 were the coolest. I had tons of the cards but never knew how to play the game. I guess I only collected them because they were shiny and had cool pictures which we all know attract you kids.

I took a typing class at school to learn. The class was ok since all you had to do is type and it was an easy A since it was all about reaching low set goals and not about how fast you could type. Friends in the class helped past the time too.

Last night i saw the movie Silent Hill which i have to say was really good. The creepy was great and well written. Makes me want to buy the game now.

AhÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâæThe age old moral of generosity, defined so clearly in the story. Although the story lacked word choice I like the originality of the story. Nice work

Not bad

An example of this problem is "story of my clan *intro" which appears on the first and 12th page of the Varrock Library.

I have notice that more and more of the stories in the Varrock Library are popping up in two different sections at once. Every time a dated story gets bumped or receives a comment the story makes a duplicate which moves to the front of the forum while the original stays where it was pervious of it being bumped with the added message. There are numerous stories which seems do be doing this which I think need to be addressed.

Nice to see some new faces in the library. The story is ok. I guess it fits right in with all the others.

"Man of the Year" i hated it. Not only was tony the tiger and cherrios guy the canidates but there made it into this serious movie at the end. Robbin made a bad choice doing this film. I think I lauged twice.

Hmm doesn't sound like a typical preacher usally there not rude. So everyone at your school is going to the same church? Churches only represent part of the community and working at a church is less community service and more of a godly service. What type of church is it also?

You just get over it. Besides your 16 what are you doing on a bike. Get a car lol.

Pretty bold to say jagex will make completely new game in two years time.

Doesn't really deserve a rating although I am curious where this story might go if you get your thoughts and word choice in order.

I ask in the future all people browsing this grand library post items relevant to the story. Please take note of the when the story was posted and how active the writer is before you make suggestions or comments. Some things are not necessary and do not need to be said.

I guess you were going for short and sweet. It is always nice to see legends and stories in the Varrock Library that are not fifty scrolls long. Although not all short narratives are bad the lack of a real plot and a firm conclusion took away from the tale.

It is a good poem. I liked all the different styles in the poem but at the end I was feeling the rythme then you flop the question line in there that is a whole different rythme. I also thought the second part long line took a little away from the poem. 7/10

Chapter three showed the beginnings of the new relationship between Kia and, and.....what was his name again? The blossoming relationship between Brad and Kia lead the story onto a great path although I wish you described it better. I won't lie, the chapter was very hard to finish and the focus was a little side tracked. The uneventful trip of how he got to Kia didn't say much for the theme of the chapter. Also it is never good when excessive conversation between characters about little thing is used. I ask if this is truly you best. Find your voice and go with it. Another thing I want to address is the grammar. Only quote when the people are actually speaking. It is unnecessary to quote thoughts and feelings. Also whenever someone new is speaking it is proper to start a new sentence. I hate to just focus on the negative but I feel I should express my personal feelings for I think most other avid readers will agree. I look forward to see how other readers feel about the developing story. The only thing that matters is if it is perfect in your vision. Critics may suggest things but you are the final judge. You can't make everyone happy.

It's a great addition to the Varrock Library. I enjoyed the fight with the orc and thought the story was great.

Nice to see you have made another story. I read the story and then the all the comments. I agree with everyone. You need to take more time making the stories. I do want to address the ending. I feel it is improper and wrong to include such great Runescape players :shame: . At least this story isn't locked though :) . If at first you don't exceed then try, try, and try again.

It was obvious you were in no rush to make such a simple point

hmm i dont recall you 0/10

I don't know. You kinda went on and on and on and on about nothing.

wow really...you must be smart

Glad to see your back and your working on chapter three. I was looking for this story earlier today to see if you had updated but couldn't remember the name. Hope to see the next chapter soon.

All this is is a flawed story. you didnÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢t go to school until you were 12 but you still were able to amazingly learned to read, write and speak English within a very short time and now with you Harry Potter name and your sonic avatar everyone suppose to believe this lie. I guess this is kind of spamming but come on seriously? Best if this story just gets locked.