First Signature made on MsPaint

[Grasle]

Well, this is my first one. Been working on it, and I'm glad to finally finish.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The only thing not made on MsPaint was the Text, which I used PaintShop Pro.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Please post constructive criticism. Thanks :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Newest one (based off of comments):

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[destro3979]

wow great for your first

 

 

 

1 problem

 

 

 

whats with the fireplace?

[Grasle]

Thanks. I got a little lazy on the fire place, and never bothered to fix it. I was a little unsure of the lighting, so...

[Sharcoth]

It's unoriginal but it looks nice. I like how you did the rug and the gold the most.

[Grasle]

Oh, thank ya!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

It is a bit unoriginal. There are plenty like this, with the classic pile of gold and sitting with high-level armor. But I guess it serves me well enough.

[Hugger_88]

Wow, extemely nice for a first except for this: His legs seem flat, and the p-hats are a bit small, and the fireplace is not lit. Still great!!! \ 9/10

[aaron1120]

I agree that the fireplace needs some touching up...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also, I don't think that your text fits in well with the rest of the sig, I would probably consider trying something else.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Other than that, it looks great! Nice job! :)

[reddawn509]

Did you intend to attempt A/A? ANyways, pretty neat for a first, but the character looks a little flat.. and the whips look like coils of rope..

[Wisp]

legs are 2d, and seem to be painted onto the chair. Amazing for a first.

 

 

 

Ok just some miscellaneous stuff

 

 

 

The whips, if uncoiled would be, by my guess, 3 times his body length. That would be pretty awkward to hit someone with, IMO.

 

 

 

Eyes on chef looking in are messed up.

 

 

 

There is shading on walls, but not very noticeable IMO.

 

 

 

There are random lines on the floor but no shading.

 

 

 

The windows make the BG lighter (the glass) and non glass makes it darker. this is reversed. ( i mean the outside)

[Grasle]

Thanks guys. I'll try and fix it up when I can find time.

[Kuroi_Ame]

I think it's quite nice. Your pallette needs tons of work, though. And it would look much better if you removed black lines with darker colored outlines (like if you have a green shirt, take off the black line and replace it with darker green). Okay, back to the pallette problem.. Use colors with more contrast, and don't use such saturated colors. Darken them up a bit, but don't use extremely dark colors, that makes it look dark.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Fireplace: your lightsource is coming in from the west. The west wall of the fireplace is blocking light from going real far deep into the firepit and the wall on the east is getting a bit of light, itself. And, the fireplace looks like there is no hole in the back top. Mose fireplaces do, unless this one's just for show, lol. And don't think that the light from the top comes in. It may very little if any. I like the font, but the color gradiant isn't the best I'd go with a red color, no gradient and chose a border, preferably black. 1 pixel thick.

[Grasle]

Kuori_Ame, I'll try fixing it. The whips have stuck out a LOT, so I decided to get rid of 'em.

[jepa69]

wow i realy like this sig

 

 

 

probably the only cc i can think of is that the leg is flat and the back wall is lacking in texture

 

 

 

i still dont belieave this is a first

[Faelenof]

OK, actually pretty good for a first pixel, I applaud you. :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Unoriginal theme to be honest, but of course everyone loves showing off their wealth and the public loves these sorts of sigs.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Good Stuff:

 

 

 

- Rather liking the way you did the glass. Interesting take, pretty effective too.

 

 

 

- Sky is also pretty good. :D

 

 

 

- Shadows being cast from the figure and chair are excellent. Kudos go to you.

 

 

 

- Pretty good anatomy, though I'm not much to talk as I'm rather terrible it. Might want to listen to other people for advice on anatomy, if needed. :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I think the above things were executed very well, especially the shadows. Very well done in those respects. I also see you've done some antialiasing here and there - again, good work, and a rather daring move for a first pixel as antialiasing is more of an advanced technique.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Stuff to Improve:

 

 

 

- The most immediate problem that caught my eye was the glaring blankness of the wall. It really is blank. You could possibly try a tad more shading and shadows on it. Zooming in in Paint I noticed you've done a little, but it's not too obvious zoomed out.

 

 

 

- Fire looks pretty flat, to be honest. Doesn't have much depth. If you take a look at some images of fire, it's actually the lighter colours that are in the inside bit of the fire, and not the reds.

 

 

 

- The character's lap is very flat - in fact, the entire armour section of the character feels rather flat to me. I'll address this problem later in the post. :)

 

 

 

- Coins... hmm... coins are really difficult to pull off. I've never made a coin stack before, so I'm not experienced in that respect, but it kind of just looks like a big pile of yellow. Maybe define some clumps of coins a little more?

 

 

 

- Party hats seem slightly too small.

 

 

 

- The amulet strings seem too... well... stiff. If they're made of wool, then they'd hang a little more limply than that instead of the perfect roundess.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And as promised I'll deal with the armour. :) As Kuroi_Ame stated, your colour palette leaves something to be desired - there's very little contrast. Metals especially need quite a drastic change in colour to make them 'metallic'. Darken the 'scales' on the platelegs as they get closer to the crease between his legs.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also, your lightsource is a bit confusing. The most dominant lightsource, as far as I can tell, is the window, as that is where the chair and character are casting their shadow. But there is also the lightsource from the fireplace, and that's having no effect whatsoever on any shadow in the room (who'd have a fire in the middle of the day anywhoo? :P).

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sort out your palette and lightsource, and you'll be sweet.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Overall, I'm mighty impressed by this. Excellent work, keep it up. :D

[Grasle]

I'll put a new one up when I get the time.

[diophantusdan]

I think the gold can be greatly improved. Right now it seems a bit too 2 dimensional. Try giving it a bit more depth by making your darker areas a bit darker.

[Grasle]

Okay, thanks. Will do.