malo2

Oil isn't rising because of increased demand or decrease in output. Saudi Arabia is constantly increasing it's oil output while biofuels are becoming more and more popular. If anything, the supply is rising and the demand is staying the same. The problem is that the corporations are pushing the prices up, and the stock market is helping. I just hope that this is just a very big bubble that will eventually burst like the housing market, but for as long as the demand stays high, that is a very optimistic view.

Nextscape is mechscape

Got it, thanks

Oh you have to be kidding me, about how many do you think I will end up killing?

Where can I get a new one if I have lost mine?

nobody on even /b/ thinks the memes are funny, you clearly don't know what you're talking about and need to calm down. You sound like an old man calling every teenager satanic because Radiohead is popular. Oh and let me guess, you went an a ranting spree when 2 girs 1 cup was popular. "Stop laughing! This is not something to joke about! This is just sick!"

What are you doing on the internet? You clearly are in the wrong place. Pretty much disagree, Pflaumen is right in saying that a big portion of 4chan is a sick pile of trash junkyard... I'd NEVER let my kid/kids browse it, especially at under 15 years old. Why would even major ISP's in the UK and USA automatically filter out any traffic going to that site? Think malo, if you had kids. Would you let them visit 4chan? Yes, it does have some quality sports, weapons discussion etc.. I admit in the past I took part in those, there were very high quality American MLB baseball threads, etc... It's just sad that new people who didn't understand the dark humor of 4chan boards like /b/, actually thought it's a place where figurative 'r­etards' gather and post a lot of lolcats, pictures of their classmates, topless pics, & spam "DESUDESUDESUDESU", thinking it's witty or funny. They entirely missed the point and have already ruined a major part of the image boards. That's completely irrelevant. Why would you actually bother to worry about age on the internet, and go post warnings for people about how they are not old enough to see the content. If your kids are teens, I wouldn't be surprised if they already browse /b/, and they definitely watch porn as often as they can. They also masturbate every other day and have a fetish or two, and they most certainly don't pay attention to the age requirements on sites. Keep that in mind.

Not to be negative or anything but WoW's graphics are still A LOT better. well you're comparing crap to crap. But either way, nice to have some better graphics to enjoy.

What are you doing on the internet? You clearly are in the wrong place.

Well I imagine that the iq of the average 4channer is well above 100, it's just a place where people like to use the twisted side of their minds in anonymity. It's definitely not a place for the average dope who spends his evenings watching the emmys, listening to Britney Spears's latest songs, and reading up on Paris Hilton's latest attention seeking tactics.

I once got to 66k words and decided to start over. Don't use more than one adjective per item. For example; "Hot, dry, and dusty day" is bad writing, you should cut it down to just one to make it something like "Hot day" or "Dry day", whichever you feel is the most important. This is for multiple reasons; firstly, it will slow the reader down too much. Secondly, it makes the impression that the noun in question is weak, and needs multiple adjectives to make it significant. Thirdly, you will quickly end up using the same adjective many times over. If you use two or three adjectives per noun, the adjective will become weak, and if you have already described 5,000 other things as bright, the sun will no longer seem to be so bright.

can't get much more generic than this

malo2

nice edit, but as far as I'm concerned, they're just increasing the resolution.

Ah the memories

There isn't one.

I can already name one stupid thing you've done; make that post.

its not like it was ever useful to begin with, most of the replies are automated and have nothing to do with your question.

About half of those are me.

Thanks a lot, that's very helpful. I will probably get to work on the changes suggested tomorrow. About the modern type of dialog, I did have some problems with that. The theory is that the magical and nonmagical societies are very separated and have heavy segregation which is hidden from the younger people. Because of this, the societies have their own rate of cultural advancement, so the magical society is more advanced. that is my excuse for the high quality orphanages and schooling, and all of the rather modern speech. I will probably take out the "dude" from the story, thats a bit too far. I plan on Elias to get a job later on which requires him to travel to a nearby non magical town, where he will discover how separate the world is, and gain more truth about the destroyed bridge. Wow you guys are actually making me very enthusiastic about writing more, since now I have good ideas on how to improve :lol:

I wish you would do a little more than copy and paste. This hardly supports discussion and doesn't really encourage me.

Unfortunately, that's what happens with many groups. I hate to use a cliche, but a rotten apple really does spoil a whole bunch in the eyes of the public. I'm sorry but I can't imagine any regular republicans turning terrorist because of this. I understand a couple of smaller scandals making you feel that there is something wrong with the party, but supporting terrorism at a time like this is just far over the line. I think it's much worse than sleeping with prostitutes.

No problem.

Notes: I have not given a description for the main character or his friend. I will get to that soon so do not worry. With the whole market scene, I am planning to shorten it, or make if more insightful to the entire story. Most likely the latter one, as well as make it more interesting. The whole thing with Jack, I am planning on giving him a bigger introduction and developing the conflict between him and the main character much more, so the whole fight later on is much more interesting and meaningful. This is my third and best attempt at the story, the first attempt was 18 pages long and was scrapped, the second was much better, but was scrapped around page 6. This one is looking very good for me right now and I will probably go on with it, that is why I am posting it here. Once again, all criticism good and bad is greatly appreciated, especially if you give suggestions for improvement. Thanks very much.

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