SuziAngel

Exactly!! :D

I used to waitress when I was 13....smile nicely at the customers and they'll tip you well :wink:

13 I think (and there are 3 other countries in the UK, not just England : ) Yep, God save the queen! : Don't even get me started on the sodding queen.......

13 I think (and there are 3 other countries in the UK, not just England : )

Waiter/Waitress

Yeh, so would I :

Yeh, I've heard that pissing in the wind isn't fun :wink: On topic: Cad has given you some good advice there. Try writing a few drafts to see how you can improve it.

I know it's not a story, but the other day I found one of my books from when I was in my early primary class. We had to do the usual, you know, draw something and write a couple of sentences about it. Mine always seemed to be: This is a (whatever it was). It is beautiful. This applied to pea[roosters], police cars...anything. To be honest, I don't think I've come on all that much! :D

Holy Macaroni? :D

I think it does. But, correct me if I'm wrong, Andufus is male, yes? I can see why the first sentence would not appeal to a guy. oooh really? how? Anyway i think i'll keep the first sentence now. Thankyou v. much suziangel and issy2 :D It appeals to females rather than males because (Issy, don't shout at me) females are nosey. We hear something like that and we want to know more. Most guys need something with impact to get them to take notice. I know it sounds a little sexist, but do you see my point.

I think it does. But, correct me if I'm wrong, Andufus is male, yes? I can see why the first sentence would not appeal to a guy.

If you don't see it, I pity you.

I'm sorry, but frankly, I'm unimpressed by your grammatical snobbery. I work with children with learning difficulties. A lot of them have extremely interesting points to make, but have trouble expressing themselves in the written word. Can I also point out that twice you used "i" in the lower case, when they clearly should have been capital letters. I think you need to think about your own mistakes before you attack anyone else. We all make mistakes, even you!

I think all drivers should have, not a test as such, but a re-cap every ten years or so. The rules of the road are ever changing, people who passed their tests several years ago drive by a slightly different set of rules to those who pass now.

Yeh, heights... Ladders ~ I'm OK going up...but then I can't get back down. The countless number of times I've climbed a ladder thinking, "Yeh, I'll be alright going up there" only to get stuck :oops:

I haven't yet used this forum much, so maybe my opinion will change in the near future. But, this is how I see it so far... I like to look at most threads to see what people have to say. I try not to discriminate against those whose writing abilities are shall we say, lacking, because they still may have valid points to make (I know my own writing is less than great at times). Yes, I have noticed that some peoples input seems to be mindless tripe, on the other hand, it also appears that there are a few people on here who just look for arguments, and put their points of view across in a manner which is demeaning to others.

Well, according to your previous posts on the depression board, I'd nominate you for the title of 4 years old! OMG, you make me laugh...although there is truth in what you say. You haven't told us your age yet though Rushrock..... :

Hmm...maybe keep the one that smells of fish..... (OMG, that's disgusting...can't believe I just wrote it)

A fantastic list of songs....quite a variation there! Whenever I go into my local pub, I put Angie on the jukebox, love it.

The words seem too...umm....I'm not sure how to describe them....but what I mean is that the words "a spot of" make me think of old ladies drinking a spot of tea in an ornate little tea shop in Devon. Do you see what I mean? It's not a word I would associate with ecstasy.

The content is good but I'm a little puzzled by the name of one of your characters. Why does Miss Lady Gwyneth Tailor have two titles? Or is Lady her first name? But still, you have called her Miss, yet she had a husband. I liked your lovely descriptions, the word 'sumptuous' springs to mind.

A great big chocolate factory?

The content is good. Maybe you could consider restructuring some of the sentences... i.e. A large bear that had long matted hair stood in front of him. His hair was coated with small patches of blood, sweat and mud. could be put like this ~ In front of him stood a large bear, his long fur matted with blood, sweat and mud. Just a suggestion :)

That's really great...the only bit I'm not too keen on is: For a spot of ecstacy those words don't seem inkeeping with the rest of the poem. Apart from that, yes, it's well written and I enjoyed reading it.

Well I bet you posted on here yesterday? so why not there? I did, I did, I answered a question on there...I think it was about LeeLee's poem