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More to the point, You crossed the line, And you know you did. And your still walking.. Does anyone find venting there anger makes them more relaxed? I, for one, have a slight anger problem, whilst punching a punch bag and blaring some music, It seems to calm me down inside, Somehow. I know exactly what you mean, however usually venting my anger involves taking it out on someone so i repress most of that anger alot. :XD:

Thankyoooooooooooooooooooooooooooou That means alot. As you probably know!!!! :XD:

Allow the equilibrium of ying and yang to be omnipresent in ones person, so that one might indefinitely heal one's self spiritually. OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooohm. pps: I am sooooo weird........ ppps: AND if that doesn't work then you could focus on your inpenetratable Zen sheild, but don't get me started............ pppps: I'M NOT EVEN TAKING THE MICK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry about that. :oops: It sounds like you've had a really tough time. TO relax i will: a) go on da computer ( as you can probably see) B) talk to friends c) watch TV d) read e) chat and the killer number 6 f) write Its the thing that pleases me most. Find an outlet for your passions and indulge!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

Thankyou luv your sig as well!!!!!! :

you can expect a spring poem soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! any suggestions ??? :D

heey weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeellll, I think that the plot sounds and looks like its heading towards a great story however there are a couple of points that i think you should adress. a) Some of the description in the story was very good, however i thought that you noted down certain things about the house and the garden, that you wouldn't usually highlight to create a spooky atmosphere in a ghost story. Like when you wrote about the fridge. I think that you should write more about the key objects around the home. Like the tree which suddenly appeared out of no where. Perhaps you could include there first impressions of the tree. b)i feel like the description often blocked parts of the story developing. For example at the biginning of the story you included details about the gate that very much illustrated the eerie feel of the story, but then you carried on with..."the gate itself was". But we don't need to know about waht the gate was made of. c) again in some places there could be more description while in others less. In general i liked it. Great choice of names particularly samways and like i said i can't wait to find out what happens next. Keep going and turn up the horror gear. :mrgreen:

Cool man! Reminds me of Aztec culture and how they sacraficed people for thier gods. :ohnoes: Thankyoooooooooooooooooooou :thumbsup:

me again, I thought the poem was great and i wish we could talk about it in peace withought being penalised by what, as far as i'm concerned is just noise and ignorance.

hmmmmm don't really know what to say on this one. In theory it was a very good poem, but i guess that on a sunday afternoon i'm not really in the mood. :D

So the ribbons of blood spiraled and spun mingling with the mighty tears of the moon and the sun as the gods met in a sojourn for the dead the daemons of death slowely fed on the decaying flesh of the chosen one on which we had all relied upon a brief fragment of a poem i made up over lunch. :D

weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeell. I thought that the words and phrases you sstructured your poem around were very good. However i think you could greatly improve on this if you....................................... a) possibly rhyme it. The poem has that kind of feel to it. B) rythm. No constant rythm a bit disappointing in that sense. c) redrafted the entire poem using the descriptive devices you did before with a new form. Other than that i thought that it was swell. Hip hip hooray for the snow i say!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :

And some general others. I love all of these particularly the first, second and last. You're great writer!! :D

cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool quotes guys! 8-) Particularly like the song for your dad issy.

OK i'll get straight to the point. Not all of us can be writing masterfully exstensive "[bleep]ens" worthy novels, but it doesn't necessarily mean that we're any the worse with our words than the next person. We all sometimes are struck suddenly by inspirational yet concise sentences, phrases and even paragraphs which could possibly be the roots to a great piece of writing. So in response to some very good and very short pieces of writing in the varrock library, I thought it might be kind of cool if we had a place to group together all those "literature bites". So feel freee to post. :mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen: If you think that there is no point to this or there is something else like it already then lock it if you must and i'm sorry about the trouble.

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooh, now that was a very enjoyable read. I am sooooo pleased to be involved in this..........you see.......I was wondering...........am I sarah??????????? Another guess is........... Jane; is she suziangel???????????????????? On the writing itself i thought it was enjoyable written with vigour and feeling, but i think that you over-describe some things : basically you just have to many things being described briefly when it might be better to have less things being described more exstensively??????? Also some obvious details were neglected when you could have wrote something about them, but other than that....................wait for it........................ I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! : : :thumbsup: :thumbsup: MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by the way all criticism made with the two author's best interests at heart.

I can't believe you posted that. Whooooooooooooooa we must have written that ages ago...... I think..........When did we write that?????? Aaaaaah brings back memories that poem does. Don't you dare write any more without meeeeeeeeeee. :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

i object strongly to wearing real fur in every respect. I'm no animal activist but i get a strong sense of wrong whenever i see someone parading up and down in chinchilla or mink. Sorry to make up a grotesque impossible example to guilt trip everyone. But imagine if it was suddenly miraculously possible to preserve human skin and flesh and then equally impossibly it was suddenly considered a season's "must have" to wear a corpse's face as a mask. You wouldn't be particularly happy if you suddenly saw some wealthy type walking down the street showing off there new mask constructed from your mother's face. Sorryyyyy i exagerrate too much i know ,but fur; its just like i said before- wrong. Fake i do not object to and i think its a good idea to use every part of an animal but its just a personal feeling of resentment towards people who wear fur and sell it anything to do with it makes me shudder. :(

That is sooooooooooooo not true. They are completely different. Mostly because Queen is amazing and pink is......forgettable if you know what i mean. Know offense meant, you're reading the words of a queen fanatic. Every song displays 100% musical talent from each person in the band and all the songs particularly the early ones are memorable. I hate the way mcfly did a cover of "don't stop me now". i'm in the generation that should stereotypically like pink and mcfly etc, But I don't!!!!! . Sorry this post is a bit messy, i had alot of things to say. Anyway the most important thing i want to say is Queen is way better

Call it cheesy, call it cliched but hey its my favourite and I'll always opt for friends. :D

very cooooooooooooooool i must have missed all the short story writing lately. :D Offtopic: Do you like my new sig??????????gb :lol: I think that short quality pieces of writng are far better than longwinding boring pieces of writng i'm glad you wrote this!!! :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

YaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaY!!!!!!!!! :thumbsup: thanyou for all comments, the structure is not on my list of priorities at the present moment but i will resolve to improve it ASAP

I thought it was very good, it made me laugh. I'm glad you chose to rhyme it. :

Different word choices in some places, particularly the one above and shouldn't Master Martha be Mistress Martha? Ok now thats all out of the way I thought it was very good indeed :D for a working progress. Sorry i didn't comment for ages. When ever i started to write issy pmed me.

You nearly had me crying. Really heartfelt. Thankyou for posting this it was lovely. :

Whats wrong with that???