Bluejayfan94

I believe there should be more description, rather than just the talking and quick changes of locations. I don't really see much flow to the story.

This is good man. May I ask who your writing with?

I agree with smilies, there shouldn't even be a ":)" in it. This is a story, not a retelling. When was the last time you saw a smilie in a novel?

But sadly there is no prize, or else I would have entered my Machinima's script.

Those are pretty good. And, by the way - You CAN'T do anything, you just won't try. Try/practice, and you will succed.

Are you serious about making machinimas or montages? If you are, and will possibly spend money on it, I would say get an internal capture card. Most, however get an external capture card, which plugs into your USB port (hopefully its a USB 2.0 port, or else it will be slower, and have less quality). I use the Dazzle* Video Creator 100, also known as the Dazzle* Video Creator Platinum. If you have ever watched a video by DigitalPh33r, he uses a Dazzle* Video Creator 80, which is basically a older, uglier looking model than the 100. A link to the "Dazzle* Video Creator" Pinnacle Page: http://www.pinnaclesys.com/PublicSite/us/Products/Consumer+Products/Home+Video/Dazzle/?dz=1

Model lancer? No. It comes with a gold lancer for ONLINE play, a couple other small things, and the game itself... but if it did come with a model lancer, I'd flipping Blarg pants.

I wrote up a new idea for a machinima in Halo 3. The small description is this: Anyways, It sucks that I can't go on Xbox Live for almost a month, but when I get back I can help anyone with the Vidmaster Achievement: Annual if you still don't have it ;)

Just pre-ordered the Limited Edition today... I am awsome for getting it last minute... last Limited edition too!

Wow Lenin. You deserve a cookie :D

I'm not that interested in the story. It dosen't seem to catch my eye as some others do. Sorry man.

I'd suggest getting someone to proofread and correct your puncuation and grammar mistakes. Now lets see... After the first line it dosen't need a full stop, so a comma would be good. Though then it dosen't fit in... Perhaps change the wording there. Second sentence has to end after "A boy was made there." Last segment in this one part has "hee". Now I do not believe there is such thing as "hee", and I believe it is just a simple sticky key or accidental letter press. It should be "he". There, I would recomend getting it checked over by a friend or parent, but I hope you get better at writing :thumbup:

6 different POVs? Wow, and I thought some bourne books were confusing. :lol:

Haha, guess we were right about that not being a censor... WTF were you thinking making us think it was one? lol

hey, even though you have a cool banner that i have never seen before [/drool], it is not right to bump a topic from June to now. Please be wary of this in the future. Thanks :)

Nothing about me? Wow, I feel sad now -.-

Wow, English is your third language? I would wish I knew your first language to see what you could do there :thumbup:

I got my Overkill! /thunderstolen I made part of my best map I have ever made [/thunderstolenagain]

Have you noticed when it was made?

Its masterchief and a marine.

"frikking awesome" Whats my reward? I changed my forums (SGP's) banner to this for Haloween: Hows it like?

Lenin, its like christmas in October for you... Right?

It is, but Bungie kinda wants everyone to get the Legendaries, because they won't be free and when the Mythic Maps come out you would have to buy two map packs.

Ah, so when you stalk, it's a compliment :thumbsup: Yes, right now though I'm trying to get achievements on my second online profile "HomerSGP" so I could do a machinima by myself. Up for helping me get some? And, i am also currently learning the words to... lJV202TpGrY

Haha, don't worry. I never notice people log on half the time. Only if a friend I play with says "Nick!", "Commander!" or "Otis!" then I notice. Otherwise I'm basically asleep playing the games :lol: