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no I didn't cause i've never figured how to change the font size (can't get the syntax right). and besides smoke is cooler :wink:

go smoke!

intresting plot twist, now why has smoke gone crazy?

a minor grammar mistake. I think the comma should be a semi-colon.

I never said you were coppiny it I just was saying it sounded similar. I was asking about kitchikers just out of curiosity.

I only had time to read the first chapter (I'll read the rest later) That fight scene was absolutely incredible! I loved how you described a few moves in detail and combining it with was the character were thinking and feeling instead of describing just that "they were moving fast and then so-and-so got a knife through his stomach" The fact that the entire fight was really only a few seconds of combat makes it far more realistic. Later on though you dialouge leaves something to be desired. I can't really put my finger on it but I think it has something to do with the fact that you release so much information at once (I know that I do the same thing). I think it would have worked better if exactly what the shadow dragons were was kept a secret till later. I loved it. I'll read more tomorrow.

no! don't make it up you know I might die If I read another one of your stories archmage! :D Burnt_Arven can we?

what in the world are you talking about? I know how to spell!!...maybe...posibly...at laest I think I do... Well at least I know how to spell Belgium!! after reading your post that is An thats right back away slowly before I pull out my tae know do. :D

which of his books have you read? I've read the entire hitchikers series and salmon of doubt. (still have to read the dirk gently books)

why does everyone have to turn evil... :?

I went back and re-read the first post. The section "the tale of shilo village" really reminds me of hitchikers guide (especially the idea of having a back up copy of the universe)

ever played D&D? in that all dragons talk (in their own language of course)

its cool to see some completely random battle scenes sometimes.

Kumlekar cursed as the spell fizzled in the air before him. Fortunately it still acted as a scrying pool allowing him to watch the battle that unfolded. He watched in awe as the titanic battle between HellÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s Judge and Armaneth unfolded and cursed when Armaneth seemingly died. He decided to move on not really knowing what effect if any this would have on his quest. Turning south and avoiding the bandit camp he walked managed to sneak by the Zamarokian temple and goblin village with little difficulty even though they were heavily guarded. He reached Taverly where the druids gave him food and rest. The next morning he went to Sanfew to get information about Kelagrim. The news was grim. The tunnels under white wolf mountain had been taken and were so heavily guarded there was no way across the mountains so Sanfew and Kumlekar discussed their options. It was decided that Sanfew would teleport Kumlekar to Camelot where he could head north to the main gate of Kelagrim. So Kumlekar spent the next hour carving a strong willow shortbow in the elven design. He made headless arrows but instead of attaching metal tips he dipped them in an oily potion made out of toadÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s legs, goutweed, newts eyes and swamp tar. He then burned the tips so they took on the properties of obsidian. Kumlekar finished off the set with a light weight quiver made out of wolf hides. At the end of the day he went to Sanfew for the teleport deciding that he would find a place to rest in seers village before continuing. Sanfew prepared the runes and cast the spell. Kumlekar felt the spell go off and his body shrinking. It was then he noticed that something was wrong. Instead of the customary purple glow he saw an angry red and Sanfew shouting for help before he found himself sprawled on his back in a foreign land. Kumlekar got up and surveyed his surroundings. He was standing on a blood red cliff over looking a series of canyons filled abominations human eyes were not meant to see. He immediately knew where he was not because he had been there but because he had heard about it in tales by evil priests. He thought to himself ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅWelcome to the AbyssÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâæÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

intresting...sounds like me.

left is what I have when I have traded a penut for an elephant. elephants are intresting creatures. Penuts are too except they aren't creatures. the most intresting creature in existence is the Ravaging bugbladder beast of trall which is so mind bolggilingly stupid that it thinks if you can't see it it can't see you. by coincidence this provides the perfect survival mechanism for sentient beings that encounter it. A survival mechanism is a method of survival methods of survival are extremely useful for abyssal demons. Abyssal demons do not have a survival mechanism other than giving up whips. Whips are useful tools because of their strecheness and the pain they causebut while I was in varrok the strange thing was that a whip was attacking its wielder...

But master you have forgotten I am a computer so "Belgium" is a compliment. Just please don't count!!

I am sorry master archmage. I have obviously forgotten my hichiker's traing please forgive me :cry: :)

yep and I'll explain that later I'm trying to keep them a secret as long as possible. (though if you read my website you maight be able to make a few guesses) http://www.freewebs.com/inilandrial EDIT: Apparently it doesn't like free webs. (anyone have a better idea where I can make a free website that I can actually post a link to?) EDIT of EDIT: Apparently it does like freewebs now as to making the chapters longer I would like to but I'm having trouble so I'll probably post 2 at a time.

intresting I liked the first chapter better though. I find it hard to think of orcs as speaking such perfect english.

This story takes place in a fantasy world called inilandrial look at my web site if your confused. I have not had anyone proofread ths so be nice. (and it is my first story) Edit: I made this map of the Dwarven Empire Prologue: ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅSo children, you say you want to here a story? Would you like to hear of the Ancient Sea Dragon or how the Halflings came to this world? Or would you prefer to hear of the Great War of the Night Elves? No, no IÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢ve told all those all ready, how about a new one? HereÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Å¾Ã¢s the story of Rendar, founder of Prut the greatest human kingdom of this age. WellÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâæ I would say ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬Åa long time ago in a galaxy far awayÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâæÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

it was? anyways...MORE QUESTIONS!!! :twisted:

yeah put me down for it

This is the one reason I wish I was hindu (the whole reincarnation thing combined with mokasha) :) . I personally try to avoid thinking about it but I think we sort of swtich off like was said earlier. I disagree with most organized religions that conclude that our actions will determine a "heaven or hell" (I have gone to both catholic and fundementalist christian schools so I know quite a bit about christianity even though I am agnostic and the more I learn about it the more I disagree) the primary reason I disagree with these is that they set such exact requirements for being "saved" It seems to me that any truly loving caring god would not only save people that worship him in his "true form" because they have either not heard of him or folowed some other "misguided fools". So if there is a "Heaven" we could be saved based on our intentions instead of our actions.

oooo hard choice either the Austin lounge lizards, Dr. Demento, or "Wierd" Al yankivitch (spelling?). all three are comedy and range from country to rap to classical (My al time favorite song is "the saga begins" which is a paradoy of star wars to the tune of american pie.