andufusthebronze

curosity can drive me over the edge

should I keep in the mystery of what the thing John kills in, or just reveal it. It is a good oppertunity for mystery and discription. what do you think?

why do you guys write about what you write about? I personally try to include a fire in my books as much as possible. Its a sign of respect to my deceased grand father, a fireman.

thanks :thumbsup:

ok, cheers issy! :D I'll change some of it and in the first book he is a very dark and wicked character so that'll hit in. I have an idea for the chapter with him in chapter 1: the hunter of the darkness.

I have views on stuff like that in school, for example most of the time in french or spanish we waste our time learning to say: I have three brown cats, one of them is female. Simply because no-one cares!

recipe for disaster. It takes you all over the map and makes you have to do many quests. I have only done 8/10 parts but it still rocks!

Hi guys, I am writing a series of books and have multiple ideas for the introduction for John one of the main charaters. I've started each of them and was wondering which one you thing is best, and what needs improving John introductions 1. The coals in the grate where smouldering and giving off little heat or light. There every now and then a small puff off smoke would come of it and curl upward out of the chimney. John sat down at his desk thinking of what to write. He had to do an essay on Elven weapons, but he thought they where a bit like a cutlass. He spread the scroll out in front of him to check what he had written so far. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅElven weapons ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ã¢ââ¬Ãâ by John Henley. There are a few variations in the Elven weapons they are kind of like scimitars but longer.ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬ÃâÃ

thanks pb0b, and congratulations on having a green mask!

you seem to be quoted what i said on your "onw thousand miles" thread issy! :P

but issy, you have to listen to the comments the poeple give you! :XD: and so this is the leelee you where talking about :D

What issy said. Plus xmas has been and gone

no problem :wink: just a little help s'all.

I saw the changes and stuff, and it is improving! just going to quote some of the stuff you have said on mine like this. So as long as your happy with it :wink:

god - I'll get an elite team to do this with! I kept getting pulled into the game as a collector for some reason it didn't say do you want to be a collector? It just pulled me in :cry: then its all collector blue egg i try and it hurts me! You need a group of friends and patience. anyone want to go with me?

good luck man, stick to it

fine, I suppose I'll post on your blog! :roll:

I thought this was particularly good, and it flowed rather well. I think that you need to tell us who two of the people are though a) george - possibally her brother? wan't clear and B) explain in more deatail about will slayte. The imagery has improved quite a lot but could be improved a little bit more, sorry its just. I'm begining to like this and want a good end result so I will be harsh abit here Is good, not perfect but still good. then it goes to "her hair a mousy brown" which is frankly awful compaired to the eye descripton. You need to have consistency on your peace or the bad bits stick out. sorry if I hurt your heeling but you asked for us to be harsh. I would give it around 16 now

mounts would work but I'm not sure about one thing. races? like elves, dwarfs, gnomes, undead, human, troll would they work?

err.... pures? skillers?

err.... pures? skillers?

well there could be a horse riding like thing which would be good. Where only you can see your on a horse so it saves some work but this is how you could make it a bit realistic. you find a horse out in the vast plains of runescape, and you try to befriend it. you feed it carrots and take care of it. doing all that would get you level three. then you can use crafting to make a saddle and reins, and put them on the horse. then you eventually mount it, and ride it around the world of runescape, or possibally just an area called "the plains of runescape" and the more you ride the higher you level and at level 50 you can fight with a bow or sword on your horse. that would be a good mini-game :

well, I've got it like that, but diffrent. Its hard to cope, the thing that keeps me going is that if you try hard enough one day something has to happen. try your best to get in the good books, and insults hurt more when someone close says them

well, I have tried to download it 3 times, but it "time out" after 26% so stops downloading can anyone help me?

well, I have a few to be honest Diddy kong racing (for the N64) was the first video game I ever played, and it got me hooked. The atmosphere whilst playing was amazing. It had good graphics (for the time) a decent tory line (ish) an evil pig! :twisted: and it was great! I found my N64 the other day, I might buy a controller and diddy kong racing for it :) Ocarina Of Time: I am to be honest a massize zelda fan, So I own "Zelda, the collectors edition" Which has the gamecube version of Oot on. I played it right from the beggining to the end. It was so much more than a game, there was a world to search for heart peaces, enemies for days, and a horse named "Epona" Horse riding was fun, and played a major part of the game in my view Mario 64: Made me a mario fan, I am still missing 1 star on that game! It was so fun, the fact that you jumped through paintings and beat up bosses and did missions made it for me. It was the mission where you raced a penguin down an Icy slope that makes me love it, I must of played that mission a million times over well thats my three