splatmster24 Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 ok, i hadt 2 days to write this and i can only have two page, so i write about what i do best, paintball. I was wondering if any of you literary genuises could halp me, tell me what to keep, what to expound on, and what to drop. just need a hand, i reall want an A on this. :D Paintballs flew everywhere as Mike Paxson threw his now empty pod away from him. He slammed the lid of his halo b reloader down and continued firing long streams of paint into the opposing players bunker. He had just gone through his third pod, leaving him with only one left in his harness. The field around Mike was a catacophony of noises. Markers were firing at astounding rates, coaches were screaming at their player, paintballs slammed into bunkers, sounding like the bongo player on Maroon Five right after chugging a triple Latte. In the midst of all this chaos and confusion two pro teams, L.A. Ironmen and the Boston Red Legion, kept their cool and continued to do what the drill constantly to be able to do. Namely, eliminate the other team. ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâ¦Ã¢â¬ÅMike, cross on E4 and R2!ÃÆââââ¬Å¡Ã¬Ãâà Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pompey_spud Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Pretty good i suppose, apart from the racism at the end. Weren't you complaining Parabola was a racist and a bigot the other day? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 25, 2007 Author Share Posted March 25, 2007 Pretty good i suppose, apart from the racism at the end. Weren't you complaining Parabola was a racist and a bigot the other day? racist? the russians are the best! Hands down! i was making a joke. Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
StrOwez Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 what year in school are you in? A friend to all is a friend to none. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 25, 2007 Author Share Posted March 25, 2007 what year in school are you in? 10th grade im 16 Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pompey_spud Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I was making a joke. Always a joke isn't it? Just having a laugh? These stereotypes hurt people, maybe next time you want to make a joke, find one that isn't unecessary, stupid and rude. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rocketman089 Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Always a joke isn't it? Just having a laugh? These stereotypes hurt people, maybe next time you want to make a joke, find one that isn't unecessary, stupid and rude. Do you need to cry on my shoulder? :( Gamertag: King Arizona Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pompey_spud Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Always a joke isn't it? Just having a laugh? These stereotypes hurt people, maybe next time you want to make a joke, find one that isn't unecessary, stupid and rude. Do you need to cry on my shoulder? :( Haha, I'd love to. Just a bit annoyed, because not only is this guy annoying, but now he's a hypocrite... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tigra00 Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Stereotyping doesn't = racism. Huge difference between the two. The popularity of any given religion today depends on the victories of the wars they fought in the past. - Me! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pompey_spud Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Stereotyping doesn't = racism. Huge difference between the two. I know that, but yesterday he was whining at someone for being 'racist' when it was a completely wrong use of the word. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KCHughes Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 the russians are the best! Hands down! Bless you, sir. the russians are the best! Hands down! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nadril Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 My only sugestion is to make good friends with a spellchecker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Antrune Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I was making a joke. Always a joke isn't it? Just having a laugh? These stereotypes hurt people, maybe next time you want to make a joke, find one that isn't unecessary, stupid and rude. Get a grip. And no lol why do you always want to get stuff from John Lewis. Its over ̣̉300 more then than what i paid. John Lewis is a great, great shop. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 26, 2007 Author Share Posted March 26, 2007 I was making a joke. Always a joke isn't it? Just having a laugh? These stereotypes hurt people, maybe next time you want to make a joke, find one that isn't unecessary, stupid and rude. sorry bud, several of my best friends are russian. i know how they talk and was trying to be as accurate as possible. Sorry if you find it offensive. The vodka crack was just a joke, i get made fun of all the time for haveing I-Tunes, its just a joke. yea, i used racist in the wrong context yesterday, oops, my B. i was upset, so i used racist as an adjective of bigot. go after the noun, not the adjective. sorry. Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fat_hobbit22 Posted March 26, 2007 Share Posted March 26, 2007 i though ild share this with you, i sit here at 2 am in the morningdoing maths course, i have to go to school in 3 and a half hours and i still have loads of work to do, including english course work. anyways dont miss you deadline, i wouldn't advise it, do it as quick as you can. i was going to tell you something that would help you but i cant member what it is, sleep deprevation is kicking in, brb getting some cereal :twisted: 8-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 26, 2007 Author Share Posted March 26, 2007 i though ild share this with you, i sit here at 2 am in the morningdoing maths course, i have to go to school in 3 and a half hours and i still have loads of work to do, including english course work. anyways dont miss you deadline, i wouldn't advise it, do it as quick as you can. i was going to tell you something that would help you but i cant member what it is, sleep deprevation is kicking in, brb getting some cereal :twisted: 8-) know how it is, im just glad i got all of my homework done this nig...... OH MY GOSH! I FORGOT ART! I GOT TO GET A BUNCH OF STUFF TOGETHER! oops, better get it. :wall: :evil: Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lionheart_0 Posted March 26, 2007 Share Posted March 26, 2007 OH MY GOSH! I FORGOT ART! Of your posts on this thread, this is the only wrong one. Drop art now, and take music. Sig by IkuraiYour Guide to Posting! Behave or I will send my Moose mounted Beaver launchers at you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 26, 2007 Author Share Posted March 26, 2007 OH MY GOSH! I FORGOT ART! Of your posts on this thread, this is the only wrong one. Drop art now, and take music. hmmm, cant sing, cant play an instrument, ill stick with drawing. :) Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beamo26 Posted March 26, 2007 Share Posted March 26, 2007 Definantly use a spellchecker... Few grammatical errors here and there but apart from that it's decent, dunno what the marking is like there but it's a B to a B+ in my view Just wondering, why are you writing about paintball? Is it just a short story where you can write about anything? Check out my blog here!Thanks Jopie211 for the sig Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zonorhc Posted March 26, 2007 Share Posted March 26, 2007 How are you filling two pages (assuming A4) with that? Varrock Library: Shattered Sky | Silent Thunder | The Emperor's FinestAstri @ MythWeavers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nadril Posted March 26, 2007 Share Posted March 26, 2007 How are you filling two pages (assuming A4) with that? gogo size 30 font! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
splatmster24 Posted March 27, 2007 Author Share Posted March 27, 2007 Definantly use a spellchecker... Few grammatical errors here and there but apart from that it's decent, dunno what the marking is like there but it's a B to a B+ in my view Just wondering, why are you writing about paintball? Is it just a short story where you can write about anything? paintball is what i do best, i write about it best because i can speak from first hand expererince. Say what you mean and mean what you say because those that matter don't mind, and those that mind don't matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yomom1919 Posted March 27, 2007 Share Posted March 27, 2007 Its ok I guess. I'd use a spellcheck like others said, but thats about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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