Nom Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 [hide=V1] Unrefined version, I was too eager to upload it here and I have to walk my dog now :D .[/hide] [hide=V2] Luke and lightsaber edited.[/hide] V3 (Final?): Smoothed out the lines on the Death Star crater, and rounded out the eclipse. I don't see anything more to be done with it, unless anyone has any suggestions on how to make the lightsaber glow a bit less intense. C/C and such appreciated. Second pixel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destro3979 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Very good for a second! Well I have a few things to say.... -Get rid of the black outline -Smooth out the Lightsaber -and fix up you lines example : New Sig Coming soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yaff2 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 its awesome because its starwars! \ \ \ but you need to smooth out your line, its lookin good 1980 Berlinetta with a 350, bored, mild cam, intake carb, headers, exhaust Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pryomancer Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 I like it. Guy looks strange though (assume it's Luke? /ignorance). Rid the black outlines, and bring his right arm in from the shoulder, it's a bit too broad right now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nom Posted December 24, 2007 Author Share Posted December 24, 2007 I'll go back in there and fix up the lines, I wasn't going to keep the black outline either. But I just got impatient :lol: . Thankees for the feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reddawn509 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 I would work on the Lines of Luke a lot more, then recolor him. As of now, his stance makes him look a little.. zombie-ish.. for the most part, a decent job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rushrock Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 I would edit Luke. Proportion is a bit off, and clean up some of those lines. Also, I'm not quite sure what that gradient shading is on the right side of the Death Star...Light reflection? But really, great job! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nom Posted December 24, 2007 Author Share Posted December 24, 2007 Edited Luke a lot. Took out all the black lines, and fixed the lightsaber. It was really wonky before :lol: . Besides Luke, nothing else touched yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destro3979 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 much better only thing now is the side of the death star with the sun looks a little funny? its not very round... but good so far :D New Sig Coming soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rushrock Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 ^ Oh, it was the sun... Yeah, it's a bit awkward-looking. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pryomancer Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 I think the side is supposed to be like that. Like the sun is being revealed around the edge and the glare is distorting it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nom Posted December 24, 2007 Author Share Posted December 24, 2007 Yeah, the right side is like that because the light from the sun behind it is disorting the edge. These are the references I used for the Death Star and the almost-eclipse: [hide=Death Star][/hide] [hide=Eclipse][/hide] The reason there's no corona seen around the other edges is that the Death Star is exaggerated-ly close, so the sun appears much smaller. Therefore it isn't a real eclipse. Oh, and the other Tatooine sun is completely hidden, in case anyone else is as much of a SW geek as me and was wondering. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rushrock Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Maybe brighten up the area being eclipsed? And the sun isn't as round as it could be, I think. That's what I meant before. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yaff2 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 the glow comming from the light saber it to.... solid. needs to be a transparent blue, and it looks like teh wrong shade. V2 alot better 1980 Berlinetta with a 350, bored, mild cam, intake carb, headers, exhaust Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
misterxman Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Looks good, just needs a few improvements: Remove the black outlines from Luke and the "crater" in the Death Star, currently very distracting. Darken Luke's back a lot, the light is shining on his front only. A darker back with a cast shadow on th ground is more dramatic and effective. Pixel sigs by me.Pixel Art Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aussie_King Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Immensely good for second. Try removing some of those black lines and fix up the lightsaber, make it smooth and give it a glow. Other than that, fix up the eclipse like someone already said and it should be great. Also a little work on anatomy would be good. Add me ingame: Lnterest. I am back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pomar1 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 You know what is diffrent about "first pixels" and "17th pixels", "107th pixels" ? That if you make first, or second one, you really try to make it as best as it can be. As best as you can do. For example me. In my live I have done really much pixels. And now, when i draw, I dont think "hmm... how to do this better...?". I dont think how to do it better, i think "hmm... its boring, when i will end it :( ". So FIRST AND SECOND pixels are the most beautiful, becouse people do all they can do. This pixel is awsome! You said its your second one. So I give you 10/10, meaby if you update it, I could be so good and give 11 ( :D )? ----TheLair Game!----"Game isn't dead... You wish!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nom Posted December 24, 2007 Author Share Posted December 24, 2007 Put the first version in hide tags, I dunno if people were noticing the second :P . I'll try to fix it up some, but it's Christmas eve so I might not get around to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jopie211 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Very nice, I like it a lot. I do think the blue light from the lightsaber is a bit too intense, but other than that, great job. :) P.S.: I also love your current signature, it has a lot of style. pixel avvy by me deviantART Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThruItAll Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 Nais. Is well gud. But whats that stuff that looks like broken glass underneath the lightsab0r. 9 kittens out of 10. Personality switchover on land of guthix forums. :P Guess who I am? danke Schon Sam!^^"Blood runs thicker, oh were thick as thieves you know"-Carl Barât Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
guthix121 Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 9 kittens out of 10. Rawr! I will eat your babies! Own a forum? Advertise it for Free!!! Forum Promotion - Free Forum AdvertisingThe Freelance Mind - Freelance, Graphics, and Webmaster Discussion forums Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThruItAll Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 No wai! I'll eat your babies. danke Schon Sam!^^"Blood runs thicker, oh were thick as thieves you know"-Carl Barât Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Unoalexi Posted December 24, 2007 Share Posted December 24, 2007 No wai! I'll eat your babies. Rawr! I will eat your babies! I will eat both your babies for mimicking me!*snarrl* ~~~~on topic The blue patch on the ground looks strange, did you save it as a Jpeg? If the Deathstar is covering the sun, shouldn't Luke and the moonthingy he's walking on be covered in shadow? I'll say seven kittens out of ten. Here be dragons ^ Dragon of the Day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nom Posted December 25, 2007 Author Share Posted December 25, 2007 It's saved as a PNG. And I didn't make any shadows because the entire landscape is one big shadow, hence why it is so dark. There's no light reaching the planet from the eclipsed sun. Yeah, I should probably work on the glow patch. But right now I'm going to bed. Merry Christmas everyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moonshadow Posted December 25, 2007 Share Posted December 25, 2007 Along my little grey lines, I would make that part brighter a tad. I think it might look more realistic. Along the black line, I would make the gradient thingy follow in more of a circle not a dip I am not a big artist guru, so, I may be wrong. If I am, don't follow what I say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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