Hawks

14 count for what? AC hit? It depends on the hydra's (is that what you're fighting?) armor... If you want, I'll assign it 12 (10+3 for DEX bonus, -1 due to size) for AC.

The proper way that you should've written this is: Although my relationship isn't quite as long as yours, but I think it's worth mentioning. Actually you should have rewritten the whole sentence as you seem to be missing some words. I don't mind incorrect grammar but a lot of people on here get angry for some reason. By the way your story is cute. Cute girl dude! :thumbsup: It should really be: Although my relationship isn't quite as long as yours, I think it's worth mentioning.

I give it a 1/10 becuase there's something there. It's rather bland and boring.

Level 3 (w00t 2 points)

Never seen you before 0/10.

Eat It - Weird Al

Here's the deal: anybody who wants to can make me a Mountain Dew sig. I'll pick the one I like the best and use it, crediting the artist, but you can sign the sig too. My name, hawkxs, should be somewhere in the sig as well. You must use either or both of these not-renders (they are in EPS format): Diet Mountain Dew Mountain Dew Code Red Or find an equally cool MD render somewhere. And it should be within Tip.it limits of 400x250, 40KB. Thanks to whoever decides to do this! :D

|Chapter One| Aboard the Rok1, a Rok Cruiser Class starship in the ownership of the Merlin School of Roks, four Master Mages are lounging about But youre not supposed to leave the controls! This ship is a piece of junk! If you do that youre going to get us all killed! Koal yelled at the other mage, a man named Wi Zool, who was about 30 but had white hair due to being an air Master. Its on autopilot, Wi replied calmly. The autopilot is the worst part of this whole stupid ship! Its our best hope to find new Roks, Wi said again, slightly annoyed now. You see, the Mages knew of the prophecy and believed it, because they had also heard of the Witch of Mandor. They felt the witch could do no good being close to Earth, which she was. The main order of mages, Merlins Knights, was constantly on the lookout for her, as well as more roks. As it just so happens, all four mages on board the Rok1 were Merlins Knights. Three friends had been kicked off of their Mage World games and sent outside by their parents So with nothing else to do, they wandered around Alex and Zachs backyard, which wasnt really that big; it used to be a large farm but had been split up into smaller parcels. It must be cool to have a mom who makes armor and a dad who is a jeweler. You guys must get so much cool stuff. said Mike, a 14-year-old who was friends with Alex. Not really said Alex, They only give us stuff thats really messed up or that the people ended up not wanting, Zach, Alexs younger brother by two years, nodded in agreement. Do you ever get to test computer games? Alex asked. Sometime when my mom is working on one, but my dad never lets me play them. Mike replied. What the heck was that? Zach yelled, pointing at a large thing that had, apparently, just fallen from the sky and landed in their backyard. Huh? Alex turned in the direction Zach pointed and saw a slightly smoking hole. They ran to it, and inside they found a trio of shiny stones. Are these really? Mike gasped. They sure look like it! Alex yelled. Zach pulled the silvery white stone from the hole, cradling it in his hand gently. He looked at it but could find no distinguishing marks. Alex followed, finding the onyx colored rock and examining it. Mike reached into the hole and withdrew a fiery reddish-orange stone. What should we do, Alex? Zach asked. Why ask me? Alex freaked out. Youre oldest! Okay Um First, dont show them to anybody. Secondly, I guess we find a mage school place I think But we dont even know if these are real! Mike exclaimed. We cant show them to my dad Hell take them away. Would your mom I dont think so. Shed freak. Ergh. When in doubt Go to the library? Alex suggested. Why not? After they pocketed the rocks, they went inside and Alex grabbed some paper and his backpack. Were going to the library, Mom! he called. At the library, Alex sent Mike to the non-fiction section to look for books about roks. Alex looked through the online catalog for more information, and Zach looked for the newest Mage World novel. Mike searched through the shelves and found a few beat-up books about roks. He took them up to the desk and checked them out. You have a fine of sixty cents. Do you want to pay it now? the librarian asked Mike. Sure, he said as he dug a few quarters out of his pocket, paid the fine, the walked to the computer where Alex was. I got these. The History of Roks by some dead guy, Roks: A Comprehensive Guide, and this really old, nasty, smelly book. Mike said, showing the books to Alex. Alex printed out a page of information and logged off the computer, then saw Zach at the desk, checking out as well Although he had a stack of Mage World books a foot high. There is no way you havent read all those six times and that we dont have them all. But youre wrong. We never bothered to buy the original guide and we havent gotten the newest one yet. They said that somebody dies in it! Meh. Lets go to Mikes house cause his mom and dad arent there to bother us. Alex said. So they walked to Mikes house, and Alex called his mom and said they were at Mikes and they were going to eat lunch there. He dropped his backpack on the table and pulled out a notebook and a pen, then cracked open The History of Roks. Zach devoured Radens Songbook, the newest Mage World book, then rummaged through Alexs backpack until he found his Nintendo SX and popped in Mage World: Radens Quest. Look at this! A prophecy In this nasty old book! Alex said, copying the words down into his notebook. Long from now, the Roks will be found. Many will be mages but only three will be able to save the galaxy from the Evil of Mandor. These three will be true Battle-Mages, with armor and helms, staves and swords. They will collect the Robes of Merlin and the Staves of the Elements. They will train with the Master Mages and defeat the Evils of Mandor. Maybe it means us! Zach exclaimed. Sure, and your name is Joseph and you want more pudding. What? Mike said. Never mind. How are we going to tell if theyre real or not? Two things come to mind. A mage school and your dad. Dads out of the question. He cant know or else hell freak out. A mage school then? I heard the order of Merlin or somebody believes in the prophecy. We should try to find them. Alex turned on Mikes computer and looked up local mage orders. The Merlin one is Merlins Knights, and they have a school by Wal-Mart and the McDonalds. They only take over-16s though Do I look 16? Not really, Zach said, and Mike agreed. Too bad the prophecy doesnt say anything about age. Yeah, but its like always kids. Think about Star Wars Lord of the Rings, Frodos not that old, Eragon, I dunno, Harry Potter. The kids always get stuck saving the world. One problem This is real life! Not a movie or a book! Is there any place that takes kids? Not close by The nearest one is all the way in Cincinnati. But Ive been reading about the Master Mages at the Merlins place and they seem nice enough. Lets go there tomorrow. Theres your moms car in the driveway. See you, Mike. Alex said as he and Zach left and went home. Aboard the Rok1, the mages are mostly asleep; Rio is staring down at the ground, out of the front window, wishing to be in his element. As he turns to go to his quarters, a soft beeping starts from the ships main computer. Somebody found some roks!!! Rio yelled, waking the others up. He noticed the signal was coming from a small town called Telek, Ohio. Balin, the fire mage, was up first. He gave the command to ready the transport speeders, Rok Sub 1 and 2, to the ships computer. Thirty minutes later, the mages were in the small, cramped, hangar. Lets fly! cried Wi, the Master of Air, as they lifted into the night sky towards Telek, Ohio. Zach! Wake up! Mom said shed take us to the mage place but we have to get up now! What? Huh? Zach sat up groggily in bed. Come on! Shes leaving in twenty minutes! She has to go to the store and she said shed drop us off there if we really wanted to go! I checked and they have a kids area but no classes! What about Mike? Hes here already! Zach rolled out of bed onto the floor and pulled himself up. He got dressed, putting on his favorite T-shirt, one with Raden from Mage Quest, and a pair of shorts. They all got in the car and thanked Mrs. Gamouchi once again for taking them to the mage school. Alex, Mike, and Zach barreled out of the car once they got there and went into the kids area, which was full of Mage World paraphernalia, mostly the video games. At the same time, the Rok Sub 1 and Rok Sub 2 touched down at the Dayton Spaceport. Greetings sir, how may I help you? A welcome robot addressed Koal. We need to go to Telek. Can you get us a cab or whatever? Certainly sir. Please follow me. It said as it led the mages to a waiting area by the road. Soon enough a cab pulled up. Wed like to go to the Merlin School of Roks. Itll cost you some. Thats almost 50 miles. Doesnt matter. Were going there. The cabbie was quiet and drove to Telek. It was uneventful, and took but an hour. Here you are. The mages paid and headed into the school. Its here. I know it. I can feel it. Theres more than one. In that direction, Koal said, pointing to the Childrens Area. Are you sure? Rio asked. Yes. As sure as sure can be. Which is how sure? Rio grinned. Ergh. We need to find them. The mages ducked into the childrens area. Inside there were probably twenty kids, playing all sorts of games spun-off from the Mage World series; collectable card games, video games, even the board game. There was a wall bookshelf with a copy of every Mage World book categorized by storyline. That one. Koal said, pointing to a tallish boy with shaggy purple hair, playing an immersion-video game. Its him. Maybe others too Yes, that one as well and perhaps him as well. As he said this, he pointed to another boy, this one with white-blond hair, and then a shorter boy with bright red hair. Shall I? Rio asked. Go ahead. Rio approached the taller boy, the one with purple hair. Hello, my name is Rio Saxan. Im a Master Mage here. Is there anything youd like to tell me or ask me? Alex mumbled a bit of incomprehensible gibberish before stuttering, May-maybe. I dont know. We need help. We? My brother and my friend and me. Hmm. Get them and come with me. How can I trust you? Well Encai no an Rio kai shal. The promise of a Master Mage. Zach, Mike, cmon! Alex called. They came over and Rio took them to a small training room where three other Mages sat in chairs around a large table. Lets see them then. Go on, Koal said. Slowly, carefully, Alex pulled the rok from his pocket and set it on the table. Mike and Zach followed suit, so each had their rok in front of them. Theyre definitely roks. But how do we know they were destined to have them? How old are you guys anyway? asked Balin. Mike and I are fourteen. Zach is twelve. Whos who? Oops. Im Alex, this is Mike, and this is Zach. It cant hurt to train them. Theyll get roks eventually. You fear though. Somethings not going to work. Rio replied to Koal. I know whats not going to work. Our parents. Moms going to freak out, she never even lets us look at swords at the armory Dad would ground us for life. Well well just have to make sure they dont know, Rio grinned. You can do that?! Alex gasped, I thought that was just a rumor! No, its true. Master Mages have a lot of secrets. Then if thats settled, youre going to need flight suits among other things. Do you have them? Yeah, weve got flight suits. Heres a list then. Can you come back tomorrow? I dont think so, Well get you then, at Alex and Zachs house, But our mom will be there! Then go outside or something so she doesnt see you. Well be missed! I can guarantee it wont be so. Moms supposed to pick us up in five minutes! Alex yelled, Well be ready tomorrow! as the three boys hurried back to the kids play area. Soon Mrs. Gamouchi returned and took them home. Alex grabbed his backpack and stuffed everything on the list in it, and added some extras. Zach loaded his backpack with food, and at Mikes house, he packed his flight suit, leaving room for the others as well. With nothing else to do, they read until dinnertime, then went to bed soon after. In the morning, Mike came over and they put their flight suits in his bag. They went outside and stashed them in a tree. So far so good. At around 11 oclock, a red minivan pulled up to the curb. Rio stuck his head out of the passenger window and waved. How did you know? asked Alex. Know what? Mikes mom drives a red minivan just like that! Lets go, Momll think its just Mikes mom! They crammed themselves into the backseat of the van, which was one of those annoying evil bench seat things. They threw their bags in the back, while up front, Koal headed towards the highway, going to Dayton. Were going to Jaroo, the mage training facility. Rio told the boys. Cool! Ive only ever been to Mars!! Alex exclaimed. Wow! Ive only been to the moon. Mike said. They reached the Dayton Spaceport and the mages showed the boys the Rok1. They hurried aboard and took off without a hitch. Computer, please set course for 401.320.127, Jaroo. Wi told it. Certainly. it replied.

I think I commented on this one on your DevArt. I really like the bright green in the middle of all the gray. It's really cool in that respect. The background is a very interesting jumble... It's not the best part though.

It's a good start, good storyline. Lots of spelling and grammatical errors, I went through and fixed them for lack of stuff to do. Also your numbers need variety if that makes sense, read through my edited version to see what I mean. Too much he said, she said. One more thing: the Prologue sucks. [hide=~~~Chapter One~~~]::Gaining power:: Emerald peered through the trees. He saw nearly a hundred people working on reconstructing the ruins. "Wow." Emerald gasped. "What?" Sir Vericez exclaimed as he and Balek ran up behind him. "I say we attack," Balek suggested. "We could take 'em, after all they're only construction workers." "No they aren't." Emerald pointed out. "Look on the other side, there's got to be nearly two dozen ancient mages over there." Once they saw them they dashed away to Varrock. Emerald and the others made their way into a small house across from the Blue Moon Inn, walked up a few flights of stairs, and into a small, dimmly lit room with three cloaked figures standing in it. "What news do you bring, Emerald?" the first one asked. "They certainly are rebuilding the ancient fortress. They also have it well guarded. About 100 workers and 25 ancient mages." "We'll have to keep an eye on them," the second monk said. Emerald left the room and went to the bar across the street, then walked up to the barkeep. "What can I do for ya, Emerald?" he asked. "One Dragon Bitter please." Emerald mumbled. "So hows the war going? I hear Varrock has a warrant out for your arrest." "Huh?" "Yeah, the king just issued it this morning." "Under what charges?" "Spreading the growth of Zamarok and encouraging worshiping him." "What!?" "Yeah, he figures since you wish to bring balance to the world that means supporting good as well as evil." "That's insane. Mind if I sleep here tonight?" "Actually, yes. The king will be looking for you tonight." "Ah, thanks anyway." "No problem, here's your Dragon Bitter." Emerald took a long sip of the alcoholic beverage. He felt relaxed, like there was no war, like he was in the Enchanted Valley just enjoying himself all day. Suddenly Emerald's Guthix raptor flew in through the door and landed on the table as Emerald finished off his drink. He took the note off his raptor's wing, read it, then stood up and headed out the door. Emerald headed south and went into the desert. He headed past the mine and at the edge of Al Kharid, called out to a gnome. After looking up the gnome started to prepare his glider. The gnome flew his glider to the Gnome Stronghold and landed it on top of a large tree. Emerald went down a ladder and headed into a room with a group of people sitting around a table. There was a gnome, a druid, a dwarf, a Seer, a Void Knight, a Fremennik, and Emerald. "Glad you could come Emerald." the Fremennik invited. "Shall we get back to business?" the Seer said irritably. "Yes, let's," the dwarf commented. "Zamarok's forces are growing in Morytania. I'm afraid they might overpower Varrock." the Void Knight stated. "We've noticed the same over here, in West Ardounge, they might try to overpower the east." the gnome said. "Saradomin's forces stay strong in Camelot, or so my scouts say." the Fremennik reported. "None the less we must keep an eye on Zamarok." the Seer said. "Emerald, what do you have to report?" the Void Knight asked. "Zaros is growing. He is rebuilding his fortresses that currently lie in the wilderness. I think he is planning to overthrow Varrock and get his once beloved kingdom." Emerald reported. "The gnomes have heard rumors of Zaros gaining power." the gnome stated, "As soon as we heard this we sent a scout to go over to the digsite, for you all know it was abandoned two years ago. He saw Zaros worshipers scouting out the area as if they were to make camp there, possibly rebuilding the city later. He said as he was flying away that he didn't see the Zaros worshipers looking to Varrock as if they were to attack it, but to Canifis, once Zaros's strong fortress Kharyrll." "We must join forces with Varrock then, whether they like it or not, they cannot ignore the fact that their city is going to be invaded soon!" the Fremennik yelled. "Yes." Everyone agreed. "We must form an attack plan first though..." the Seer said as he took out a map of the area. "Here is Varrock's eastern entrance, if we can barricade it up, then station some forces at the bank using it as an outpost, we could hold off the invasions for quite some time." "Yes." the Void Knight said, "We can also do the same with the north." "This is silly!" the Fremennik yelled, "You said we must form an ATTACK plan, all I see is defence untill death." "I agree." Emerald said. "It is too soon to tell, we must see how the next month or two unfolds before taking any action." the Seer pointed out. "Fine." Emerald and the Fremennik said.[/hide]

Really good video. :D

Zamorak 'cause he's 'evil'.

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HOW DID YOU KNOW?? That's exactly what happened to me (without the Guthan's) except I'm still combat 49, almost 500 total level. :thumbsup: Creepy...

WOOT INTRODUCTION! Yes I know it's short but it's decent! Yay! In the year 3600, the earth was invaded in a way unlike any other. A series of magic objects fell to the surface in groups of twos and threes. The technology of the objects was so far ahead of anything the humans had ever seen, there was but one name for it. Magic. The humans named the objects roks, and although many an English teacher complained, the name stuck. Kids dreamed of finding a rok and becoming a mage, and having the times of medieval Europe and feudal Japan come back to life with the magic of the roks. Of course the humans still developed their magic, technology. The roks even helped in that area, for they unlocked areas of users minds that housed information hidden for centuries, unused since da Vincis time. With their technology, they discovered ways to live on the moon. The humans now live on the planet called Mars as well. Other galaxies were discovered, and a way to travel quickly between them, the Infinity Rok Drive, was invented by a mage named Wi Zool. While the humans may be peaceful, there are others who are not. One of the many galaxies is the one called Mandor by the people of Earth. There lives an evil queen who holds her people in thrall and fights for universal domination, but she is known only as the Witch of Mandor. Since the roks were discovered, schools were created to teach those who were deemed worthy to master the rok. The teachers there were called Master Mages. People who only used the roks magic were simply mages. By the time our story takes place, in the year 4200, a legend has surfaced, something to the effect that an evil will try to take over Earth, and only the three destined Rok Masters can stop it. They must be trained by the best of the best to even have a chance at destroying the evil.

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Yay! Fun story. Hehe. Also the hand bit at the beginning made me think of Master Hand from SSBM for some reason.

I think it should be both even though it might look weird. here's my new one.

AWESOME!!! BOTH ROCK!!!

Hallo! I is back now yay me!

OOC: I is back now!!! YAy!

OOC: Hi I is back!!! Sorry I didn't get to making the sergeant. (sp?)

Very good read. I too will love when I can play in full screen HD but I'm F2P sadly.

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That shirt is awesome! I would totally buy it. Have you thought about getting screen-printing supplies and doing it yourself? If you sold enough shirts it'd probably be worth it.