Unoalexi

Would YOU like to by a period? :lol: Please don't pull facts out of your [donkey]... People pay for members to take avantage of the extra features. Please don't stereotype ether.. It makes you look idiotic.. And 1 million members paying 60$ a year=60mil. 60mil>20.8mil. End of story -.-

...Except for titanic :XD: Umm.. Cannibalism is one of TBM's favorite past times..

He cant do anything without his tie! Muhahahahaha!

Banned because salisbury steak is awsem!

OH NOES!!?!?! :ohnoes:

Hmm... Nether of these are sentences I'm afraid. The first one requires a verb and the second one needs a noun.. So water's drips should be water drip, and Then how they exploded should be Then they exploded. Other than that I couldn't find any major gramatical errors.. But you made Bluejay a gay cannibal!?!?! Bad Archimage! Very bad Archimage!*slaps wrist* That is so mean... :evil: Anyway, your definitely VERY good at writing.. Although the subject matter was rather odd, it was creative... 4.7 Bill gates points out of five..(.3 taken off for grammar)

I know, but every sentence is a little much, don't you think?

Connection lost.. Attempting to get Nationwide on your side.

Wrong because my grandmother runs all the time in marathons(and wins) Umm.. l33tsp34k is awsem!

I hate you for giving me a headache!

I love you for having a red Hello Kitty as your avy.

Banned for being a shield made out of bones(eww)

+ = Watch out for cows! (I couldnt find a picture of a cow kicking a lamp and lighting a barn on fire)

No, because fat politicians shouldn't be allowed to get a free pass from legal affairs, even if the country is being invaded by giant moles. I love to try to kill the Giant Mole in Falador Garden, although it's at least four times my level, so I always die. The mole jokes are funny too- I shall call him, Mini-Mole! I loled in real life at that.. Lol, gosh that acronym is so overused, and I bet that half the time when people type it, they don't really laugh.. Why don't we just type 'CQ' for chuckle quietly? It would be sooo more accurate.. How can we fix corruption in our legal systems?

Vea-lolah-voo-meen

Banned for being a nooby Rat Meat.

+1 Double u tee eff indeed.

The people remind me of the tomb paintings in Egypt... Otherwise I agree with the others Five kittens out of ten.

+1 -.-

My friend, you ARE the thundercloud :lol: :lol: [

+1 -.- Also, COMBINE YOUR SENTENCES!!! The transition words were put in our language for a reason!

Hmm.. the great Sephrycritic only found one mistake -.- .. You have two appositives, but no noun.. use the guys name instead of the father of Hylean.. Wrong kind of 'hear' :lol: A semi colon would be more appropriate here.. Instead of using two 'he could tells', just combine killing and great sadness with a 'as well as'. Example- should be changed to- the himself is not needed More quiet should be quieter Semi colons are your friends! Also, The whole 'loved him like a brother/sister' thing could be done away with- aren't they brother and sister anyway? Overall, I thought it was very good. : Nine Sephrycritic points out of ten.

Hmmm, so what do we have here..? Underlined-These words need to be capitalized, I believe you meant for the Book of Rites to be a proper noun, no? Bold-You use book way too many times. Although you certainly don't need to change this, it would sound better if you did. You also do this with man too, I think. Dark Red-This sentence could be written better, it just doesn't sound quite right. Perhaps something like- "It was only a few minutes from sunset as the man pulled a small book from his pocket"? Indigo- Also there is nothing really wrong with this sentence, having too much adjectives makes your writing seem amateurish.. You don't want to force the reader to see things as you see, but instead you want to give them little hints and let their imagination do the rest.. Blue- Families should have a apostrophe, like families' because a group of people(a family) are owning one object. Too many 'ands' here.. These sentences could be combined Capitalize proper nouns! Don't use the same noun twice, only if you absolutely have to.. This needs to be broken up into two sentences You forgot a noun here, and this sentence could be written better.. You probably could've written these sentences a bit better.. 'The fireball was growing rapidly in size, easily destroying everything within it's reach.. It burnt the tower to a crisp as it expanded, quickly demolishing the area around it as well.' Overall, I thought it rather annoying that mostly all the paragraph was italicized.. Seven kittens out of ten.

Get ThruItAll to explain it to you -.-

I had all ready added avatar,, It's stuck to the bottom of the buddy definition... -.-