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Yeah, I noticed the feet as well, I normally don't have much trouble with them, but I guess I overlooked it.

Fair enough yeah, now that I look at it - the neck should be thicker, just a bit

That works, lol

What if I classify it as a broken halberd? lol haha, even then it's too big, meh, it was fun.

Excessively huge weapon? lol

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Multi-task indeed, You should seriously consider chain farming ranarr herbs (with super compost) while you fish, it will increase your profits significantly. (every round of rannars takes 75 minutes)

Mabye I should have put a " :P " after the sentence to clarify that I was jokeing, lol

Comments in red. Don't try to force your writing to sound complex and/or sophisticated. At best, you will generate something that is difficult to read through because of overly complicated sentence structures, and at worst, you will write something that makes no sense to people who know what the words you use mean better than you do. You need to keep your writing simple. Be careful of synonyms that carry different connotations to what you are trying to evoke. When in doubt, use the simplest word, to make sure that readers know exactly what you are talking about. Remember that you are trying to write a story for people to read and understand, not for them to decode. Suggest you read some Hemingway or Pratchett to get a better feel for how words and sentence construction function in prose. Great.. So I've taken a step backwards from my initial version of the intro (which adhered to alot of your advice, except with more basic language). I guess I should stop trusting WORD's synonyms (use that excessivly now that I think about it, probably not the best move) and writing simply to fill in space. At present, the concepts for the story are a little... erratic and unstable (especially concerning the "beacon") Ok... I'll go back through with all of this in mind. If there's one thing I'm good at, it's exponential improvement : Thanks for the advice, I'll use it well.

Vaarg has complete physical control over Bris (made clearer later), he's getting her to stab him as part of an infiltration plan (into a town).

They just want to reassure themselves that they diddn't waste countless hours grinding a particular skill (that they are better than some others...) or they need assist in a skill, most likely the former.

It just comes down to the fact that some people are douche-bags.

You can expect a ddp++ spec from pretty much anyone, lol, it's like pking 101, you're right about it being considerably faster though.

So basically, they can only avoid it if they anticipate it - which requires them to have had prior experience.

Names too wacky for you? lol They are kind of the villains, they need screwed names. (Bristoxyl's name can be shortened to Bris)

Here's 2 more :P [hide=] Lol, I look like a 10 year old in that one Mafia style[/hide]

Is this a good intro for my story? (What's happening is kind of explained after) ============================================================================================ The beacons soft rays crept under Ethras lofty ranges; its diminishing light caught upon a broad pair of opaque glasses perched underneath a tuft of quivering hair; half-exposed sinister eyes gazing over a twilight horizon from atop a jagged outcrop, scanning the vast field below. A slender entity wrapped tightly in strands of shredded black fabric silently loomed closer and embraced the shady observer from behind. Bristoxyl Vaarg exhaled She was pressing a gleaming stiletto to Vaargs back with her right knee at the base of his spine I apologize, master, Gasped Bristoxyl driving the blade in harder, tears forming in her desperate eyes. Vaarg let out a sadistic moan, allowing the sharp appendage to slide deeper into his flesh. Why do you make me do these things? Bristoxyl wept. Vaarg seized the sharp edge and tore it away with a groan. Blood spluttered over Bristoxyl; her hair was tainted with crimson highlights. Vaarg held Bristoxyls trembling head to his chest; her laments soaking into his dark garments as they collapsed upon one another. Come now, its alright, Vaarg comforted Bristoxyl caressing her exposed arms. She turned eyes up to meet his, only to be shocked by the profound glistening of those unaffectionate glasses. Vaarg removed the glasses and placed them over the drenched marbles that were her eyes. Bristoxyl sniffed and gave a half-hearted giggle. They remained still, watching the beacons glow finally scatter beneath the mountains as the flickering of a dying flame. Impressive walls a wasted investment, ha-ha! Vaarg cast his hand over the plain and directed his finger far-off toward a dispersed cluster of surrounded candle-lit buildings. yadda yadda yadda ======================================================================================== What are your initial thoughts?

A Rite of Passage - Dream Theater (*Loves the illuminati lyrics*) BLACK CLOUDS AND SILVER LININGS = TRIUMPH

You do realise that an inventory of lobsters every 10 minutes makes about 20kexp and 42kgp an hour? that's not TOO bad, considering if you fish for 3 hours a day, that's 60kexp and 126k gold, that's 420kexp and 882k gold in a week. I admit, for cash that's a bit slow, I advise you kill ankous for cash, you get some decent melee training done especially if you've got a salve amulet. (~150-250kgp with ~50-120kexp and hour depending on how crowded it is and your combat level)

Magic only tends to be effective in clans, otherwise it has always been a hybrid peripheral. If you are getting owned by someone purely using magic, I suggest you change your strategy because they're piss-easy to avoid/defeat when solo. Personally, I rush them with a few ddp++ specs after taking a zammy brew and activating piety, that should kill them outright. Remember the more non-mage armor they're wearing the less of a threat their spells become. If you do find yourself binded+teleblocked, bring a semi-decent ranged weapon + dragonhide as a counter. Oh, and don't neglect your own magic level, it contributes to a large portion of how well you can resist spells.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TiKFlLcektg&feature=related Gold

He's saying that if he cuts the contact for a few years and comes back (if there's an opening), there's a much greater chance of getting back together. It's ultimately the best thing to do if you don't want to fall into the friend zone. During that time of little-to-no contact, try other girls, yeah. Who knows? there might be one that was crushing over you that whole time.

This is getting really paltry. No matter what anyone posts next, I refuse to reply - go ahead and say what you will.

FFS, stop saying I'm contradicting myself. It's like saying "that person is eating" when they're sitting on the toilet.