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Bad grammar will ruin a story, no matter how good the plot is or how well you describe things. Your grammar is downright terrible. Fortunately, spelling and grammar are probably the easiest things to fix. Also, you shouldn't worry about pronunciations. Just let the reader decide how to say it.

Some (by that I mean many) parts of it are very corny (like Shogen being able to join the White Knights just like that). The main problem, though, is your horrific grammar. There's tons of run on sentences, and you keep on switching tenses (from past to present). This would be a good story, but only if you fix the grammar.

That's a new one.. Who goes to "hell" (or gehenna, which is the original biblical hebrew word used for a 'burning pit') then according to christian theology? Not a lot of christians would agree with you that every person, Hitler and 'casual mass-murderer' alike, can just utter a few words of repentance to make up for countless destroyed lives, years of torture... Your pastor is misintepreting his faith if he genuinely believes so & teaches it openly. Christian universalists believe God will save any soul regardless of their actions through faith and repentance, it represents an extremely small portion of the total theological believer base of christianity though. Extremely small portion? 100% of conservatives believe that God can forgive anybody (except possibly Satan). While many if not most Christians aren't conservative, it definitely isn't an extremely small percentage of Christians.

I hope that's a typo. You can't safespot with salamanders, if I'm not mistaken. It's probably still a good option, though. Possibly, like I said, it's been a very long time since I've went there, but I don't recall ever meleeing the brothers. Assuming that the brothers' abilities and stats reflect that of their armor sets, Karil would have extremely high mage defence. Coupled with the fact that mage is the least cost effective of the three combat styles.

I realize that that's just a random number, but you'd probably lose more like 150-200 arrows (estimate 1000 shots per hour, 80-85% arrow keeping rate). And to answer your question, rapid is better. It yields a better xp rate and mossies have good drops.

I hope that's a typo. You can't safespot with salamanders, if I'm not mistaken. It's probably still a good option, though.

You should use zammy chaps and a granite shield instead of Torag's and unholy book, it'll give you more range attack AND more defence bonus. Win-win scenario.

Barrows' repair costs are tiny, like <300k for a whole set after fifteen hours. You could make literally millions in fifteen hours of combat.

Salmon and tuna make lobsters and wine effectively useless. And also, apple pies are cheaper than lobsters and pack more healing into a single inventory space (171 gp each, heal 7hp in two bites). Eating = time. Time = more damage. It's good for F2P, Slayer's member. You're not going to have to eat more than once or twice a minute in most cases. There are plenty of reasons why cheap foods aren't that great, but taking more damage due to more time spent eating is not one of them.

Alching is by far the best way to train mage in F2P. By bolting do you mean bolt spells?

Spiders. An alternative would be zombies, since they drop a lot of steel arrows.

Possibly Mage Training Arena. Or, as others have said, alching. Aviansies are probably better, you won't get as much xp but you'll make a fair bit of cash.

[hide=] [/hide] Using super restores will yield a lower moneymaking rate than prayer pots. Yes, you will make more money per trip, but since you're spending more per kill without speeding them up, you're going to make less money in the long run. You might personally not want to keep the airs and waters, but it's the smart thing to do. As a guide writer your job is to help people kill these in the best way possible.

Hmm... no one noticed my post. Salmon and tuna make lobsters and wine effectively useless. And also, apple pies are cheaper than lobsters and pack more healing into a single inventory space (171 gp each, heal 7hp in two bites).

Training spot in the wildy with undead monsters that have good drops? Sounds rather familiar... *cough* Ghostly warriors *cough*. And wouldn't it be a good idea to alch the adamant kiteshields?

You are in the right place. That's my personal favorite range training spot. It only works if you have the Prayer level for Hawk/Eagle Eye, though (so this isn't good for you). You mean the balcony? Shooting them across the fence would be better because you won't have to recharge your prayer as often. And lesser demons are horrible, they're always crowded and they have pretty decent defence.

I tried maging them once. There are safespots, but what often happens is that when you are safespotting one of them, another will attack you. I wouldn't recommend it.

That's gotta be one of the most horrific spelling mistakes I've ever seen. Your story's pretty great; the only problem is that some elements aren't very serious (namely, the part about the adventurers) while the overall tone of the story is.

You only have to have enough defence to stay alive on B2P, tbh. And what setup are you using? My friend with 78 defence tanks them with 159 range defence. Someone with 70 defence or less could stay alive with 200+ defence.

Ghostly warriors are good xp and have great drops. You have to do Spirit of Summer to access them. Operate Jennica's ring at the axe hut in level 55 wilderness. Oh, and combat stats in the low 60s isn't "mid to high level" ;)

Lessers have terrible drops for their level, and since they are usually very crowded you aren't going to get much xp.

Well, you'd have to have someone willing to let you slaughter them all day. Arranging something like that would be quite a hassle, so I doubt this is a practical way to train even in F2P. And you can use boost prayers in F2P at black knights and zamorak monks, though the latter is very crowded because of all the telegrabbers.

You should try ankous, not sure how good the drops are in F2P but in members they're one of the best moneymaking NPCs.

i dont think its 50% because that guy hits a 43 in the pic and hitting a 86 normal with a gs is hard It's a 50% (isn't it 25?) reduction in accuracy, not strength. The only thing that reduces max hit are the new spirit shields.