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you mean when the prices get higher. Jagex probably only made it that good to bring back some of the popularity that 2h's had in rsc.

Your forgetting "What is the question of Life, the Universe and Everything?" and "What is the answer to the Question of Life the Universe and Everything?"

I'll wait and see where you go with this. You need to take out the Runescape abbreviations if you want to make it really good though.

the second one is by far the best though they are all good.

Archimage I pronounce you The Genous Noobigator Hunter!

NOOOO!!! Don't kill my friend! ... Wait... Did I just say that? IT WASN"T ME!!

Finally someone listens to me when I say "Can't we all, just get along"?

That is Baad

my point exactly.

oh theres an official poem thread now? I'll have to check it out.

I don't play runescape anymore but when I did it was almost exclusively a way to meet people and chat. I stopped playing mainly because my friends did and in the last month that I played I spent almost all my time talking. Often i would spend most of my time in free worlds even though I was a member.

you had me hooked after the first paragraph but the dialouge kinda through me for a loop. Very good.

You obvioulsy put quite a bit of work into this and I commend you but you need to consider the tone of your story a bit more. Are you trying to make it seem like a serious legend or are you writing a short story with a comedic effect. If your attempting the first one I would scrap the rs jargen (city names are fine but "noob" an spell names are not). That type of thing is great for informal and comedic stuff but it detracts from a serious story and suspends my suspended disbelief. That also applies to writing in all caps. I hope you consider editing it because it could be a very good story if you took the time to make changes.

you scribbled that during history?!?! God ****it man I wish I could right like that. I really don't care that it was "on the short side" it was excelent.

oops

I'm sorry, I normally don't flame but these noob# stories are getting really old. (A sid [EDIT] note: I've noticed that rs players use the word "noob" about 10 times more than any other mmo I've played, and I've played more than a few)

I like it, welcome to the forums.

Interisting... Fairly good, its more readable than most of the stuff thats posted here, but theres no challenge to the story. You need to add a sense of danger. I hope you'll revise this because I like the way you put it in a timeline form. Perhaps you could make it greykiss's diary

Half as good? I'd pay quite a bit of money to be able to do that.

I get the impression that that you could do a bit more research with this but its very well writing and its nice to see some non-fiction on this forum. I'll see if you can get around to proofreading it for you if you want (or you could ask Zonorhc after his rant on spelling)

You tell 'em Zonorhc! this atricle is a bit extreme but if even a few people listen its necessary.

yeah you're a pretty good writer though I wish you would take the time to write out numerals because it breaks up the story's flow.

I HATE YOUR CLIFFHANGERS!!! Um... great as usual?

the second one gives me the creeps.

I love it except for your one major error. Runescape can't go crazy, Runescape IS crazy (or as I like to say, world of Warcraft gone bad).