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I may have to remind you that night elves are primarily pirates. they have a matriarchial society and prey on dwaren trade ships. I wouldn't say half-blood, but perhaps mixed, they have been known to rape their vicitms, though these days it is a rare occurance, since they are trying to create alliances with the human kingdoms. I love this paragraph where is he right now, I don't care if he doesn't know, but for the purposes of writing this its important for the rest of us to know.

Afro, I loved the chracter, but his back story does not match at all with my vision of the night elves. They are not exactly dwindling, of the surface elves they have been the least affected by the war. The levitating ability is characteristic of drow so i like it, but limit it to stuff within 3 feet of him, and no more than he can normally carry as a medium load. The fact that his powers lessen during the day could be fairly unknown to him because in the night elf homeland it is eternall night. this isn't a problem if its in the smaller human nations. Jenova, I still have a problem with that staff. Could you send me a pm with ALL of its properties? I have some ideas that I don't wnt to put down here.

thanks sirith, updating the orginal post now. Anyone have any suggestions about other stories I should add to this list? (must have been posted in the varrok libary)

death, what do you mean this isn't story like, this is just an intro. make your criticism constructive please.

I thought that it might be nice to complie a list of the most memorable stories and poems in the libary, this isn't to put anyone down, so don't feel bad if one of your stories doesn't make it. Keep in mind, theres are memorable, not necessarily good. I included a few that are memorable because of the discussion they inspired even in the story itself is only mediocre. Heres what immediatly comes to mind for me: High Fantasy: Eyes of a Warrior Blood Warrior Ravens' Cabal Low Fantasy: A World Behing the Painting Assassin Redemption Comedy: The Imp and Jinn The Chronicles of Da Cabbatron Catherby, teh best city in Runescape And the kings of rs comedy, Gaal and Smoke! The Gaalsien and Smokeeagle Saga Gaal and Smoke 2: Tale of Two Cities Pandora's Requiem Sci-Fi: The Dreamweb Hunter Versus Hunter Paradox Other: Harry (A true story) Unforgiven Since Mein Kampf Dream Please note that these were picked without the authors premission.

Issy is being a bit extreme, but he is right in how to improve it.

What about us Newbs!

oh and one more thing: TENSES and are you going to continue this or not.

first of all no numbers in names, second of all do not use numerals in the text except in very special cases. Thrid of all KEEP ON WRITING!

please read the libary rules.

^^^ what he said sits pretty good, though I'll hold my review until after I read the orginal story first.

I like these short stories, perhaps a few with good endings might be nice though?

I think your missing the point, by not giving detail you really give the impression that you don't want to be writing which gives the reader no reason to be reading.

RACISM! Well it was pretty funny so we'll let it go.

Pretty good except for one line at the very end. YOU WROTE "7" INSTEAD OF "SEVEN"!

THAT ROCKS! I was laughting from the second sentence all the way to the end.

intresting... its a bit different than most poetry or romance stuff that I like, but its pretty good, 8/10

a man (or monster) after my own heart, I do the same thing (check out my stuff on inilandrial)

I believe you mean write Anyways pretty good, it seems that the over-all quality of the work in the libary has improved sinceI last checked a month ago.

The Interlopers :) On Topic: Nice stories, keep up the good work and I'd like it if you wrote those chapters you're thinking about :) HEY I remember that one! On topic: pretty nice fight scenes, though I find it uninteresting without a plot.

this is by far the most thought out story I have seen in the RS world, any others are either comedic (GAAL, SMOKE WHERE ARE YOU!!) or fail miserably, I might send you a character later.

um guys, any updates? also I think we need one more person to join. And Necro, you still here?

Please don't try writing another section till you fix this one up a bit, I think this is more of a problem with trying to stay too close to rs, than any problem with writing on your part.

either is fine, I have very little on night elves, except that they are pretty reclusive, except when they're raiding dwarven or human ships, they're basically pirates. Sun elves are by far the most magically inclinded race and are the only race that has a college of magic. a single wizard can do very little but taking part in rituals can anhilate dwarven ships.

everyone write your intro, but leave it open ended, It would be nice if everyone started out in the dwarven capital, though human nations work also (read as "Prut works"). Starting in the undersea kingdoms is far too far out of the way, and I would also perfer that noone started in elven lands, but we can figure out a way tomake that work.