January 16, 201115 yr Well then, that's quite frankly [cabbage]. I'm pretty sure that you don't get said rush of adrenaline just from fear though (I would imagine that the pain from having a hole punched through oneself would be enough to cause a fight or flight reaction). That being said, if you don't have specific training and/or are not prepared odds are that your first reaction will be confusion followed by the need to get the hell out. Oh and again, everyone feels fear in some form or another (I would imagine that it is/was a very useful adaptation to keep people from doing something really stupid).
January 16, 201115 yr This is a ridiculous argument, there is no way on earth that a person can sprint about five meters and attack a burglar without him simply pressing the trigger.
January 16, 201115 yr depends on how immoral the man in question is if it was seamus heaney i can vouch for his intent to cause pain on A level students 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
January 16, 201115 yr That's when you know you have made it as a poety...When School Children hate you. Shakespeare is a case in point. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts.
January 16, 201115 yr seamus heaney is a troll and a half, hes like herp a derp childhood is hard, btw ireland is like ancient rome and greece and also im mad that my parents died shakespeare is jsut like hey you know what? I understnad everything. i'm gonna write it down brofist shakesbro, brofist 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
January 16, 201115 yr Nah, Heaney is like 'I like Ireland, I hate Britian. Oh, now North and South Ireland are fighting. Er.......FLEE!' Shakespeare is just high fluted. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts.
January 16, 201115 yr n trust me bro im knowing mr heaney do you know owen sheers? 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
January 16, 201115 yr Nah, we only did Carol Ann Duffy, Shamus Heaney and some other one...I have the book upstairs somewhere. Load of terribly poems. http://www.uzzisoft..../archimage.jpegWell I knew you wouldn't agree. I know how you hate facing facts.
January 16, 201115 yr "shamus" ye cool, im mad since im like politics brofist heaney then im looking at sheers and hes like herp a derp i write about red wings 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
January 16, 201115 yr I want to like Shakespeare, but having to overanalyse it repeatedly for about 3/4 of a year kind of drove me away from it.
January 16, 201115 yr nope hamlet is really a great piece of art, doesnt matter how much you analyse it, you cannot fail to love it unless you just dont get literature in which case why are you even able to read? rhetoric 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
January 16, 201115 yr I did not say I don't feel fear, only that I do not fear things: I fear not what is, but what once may be.I fear not a situation but fate itself.I fear to lose my sole longing in this world;I fear to be as I see me. Is it narcisistic of me to say that I amaze myself with my poetry?Also, read diagonally that is I fear to be is but longing me. Add the kind of question it is answering and you get What I fear to be is but longing me. Which I find a horryfyingly accurate summary of my own view on my life. Twitter: @TheMather1
January 16, 201115 yr I did not say I don't feel fear, only that I do not fear things: I fear not what is, but what once may be.I fear not a situation but fate itself.I fear to lose my sole longing in this world;I fear to be as I see me. Is it narcisistic of me to say that I amaze myself with my poetry?Also, read diagonally that is I fear to be is but longing me. Add the kind of question it is answering and you get What I fear to be is but longing me. Which I find a horryfyingly accurate summary of my own view on my life. No its not narcissistic, its like Albert Einstein saying that he amazes himself with his science, or Michelangelo saying that he amazes himself with his art!I loved to poem, I understood the meaning and related a little bit, you are an extremely good poet!
January 16, 201115 yr Hmmmm, the repetition gives an overall structure to the poem, but there's no real use of language. Except for 'Fear' you have no real use of metaphors or similes, or anything reallly. It's hard to visualise what you really mean. Oh and the ryhme scheme is A,B,C,D,B Which is cool that you included a rhyme, but I don't think there's any real significance, so this is probably an invalid comment. And the syllables do not match up (Althrough this is not neccessary, it does give a good rythm to the poem) It's a REALLY big shaft.I didn't catch fire, I used the can of hairspray as a flamethrower and pointed it at my arm.how are you going to ignore my posts when I'm offering to let you live as my vassal in two weeks time?
January 16, 201115 yr A smile,The mask of sorrow and a charade of hope,Melancholy is everywhere, says the raven in doves feathers,A smile is not elated instead its just a veil,Smiles are only fires, that cover up the dark,
January 16, 201115 yr Yes, rather saddening. (Unless you're using another meaning to the word) The use of language is okay, but the structure should be worked on imo, perhaps add another few lines in, to make the "smile" a repetition (if you want that) or something. Nice Haiku Rocco, made me giggle. It's a REALLY big shaft.I didn't catch fire, I used the can of hairspray as a flamethrower and pointed it at my arm.how are you going to ignore my posts when I'm offering to let you live as my vassal in two weeks time?
January 16, 201115 yr Lol, can all Taverners write haikus? 10:53 PM - retech9691: I feel the need10:53 PM - retech9691: To include many chasms in my story arc10:53 PM - Resistance: You mean plotholes? Remember, Remember, the 4th of NovemberRIP Dawngate ;-;
January 16, 201115 yr GUISE IT WAS JOKE POEM LOLOLOL!!! Hey, I'm getting Photoshop CS5 and a graphics tablet, who wants a new signature :P? Rocco, thats amazing :D
January 16, 201115 yr The first line was not a verse, which I tried to point out by making the poem in italics.And I didn't try to give it a rythm, I actually tried not to. And thanks, Resistance, though there's no need to praise me like I'm a legend-to-be. The empty square, a shell for naught.A frame with which no image's brought.A shielding wall that's derelict.Is like a heart which none select. Yeah, that's just me showing off/being bored. Twitter: @TheMather1
January 16, 201115 yr The first line was not a verse, which I tried to point out by making the poem in italics.And I didn't try to give it a rythm, I actually tried not to. And thanks, Resistance, though there's no need to praise me like I'm a legend-to-be. The empty square, a shell for naught.A frame with which no image's brought.A shielding wall that's derelict.Is like a heart which none select. Yeah, that's just me showing off/being bored.Recommendation for improving the flow of the poem: Change "with which" to "that has" and remove the 's at the end of image. Other than that small flow problem, I actually sorta like it. I used to write a lot of freeform poetry that would flow nicely, but I've lost it all. And frankly, I'm too negative towards anything I make (read: I think everything I make sucks) for me to think any of it's worthy of even appearing on the internet.
January 16, 201115 yr First two lines are cool, but the last two need work. It's a REALLY big shaft.I didn't catch fire, I used the can of hairspray as a flamethrower and pointed it at my arm.how are you going to ignore my posts when I'm offering to let you live as my vassal in two weeks time?
January 16, 201115 yr it makes me instantly hate your unoriginal and cliched poetry when you say you are showing off you make me want to study seamus heaney more since at least he has class 'Tis I, 'tis Vindice, 'tis I!
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